All Comments on 'My Son's Bully Ch. 02'

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KidG1000KidG1000over 7 years ago
keep going!

i like the story! bring Alvin and his humiliation more to the front of the story. Alvin becomes the submissive cuck wimp for Klay and gets embarrassed in front of mom. Alvin has a little penis, gets spankings, and loves worshiping his mom's feet. Alvin should suck his mom's toes, especially when she is getting fucked by klay.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Story ideas

Have her and Alvin have to be naked at home all the time and take her out in public dressed like a slut. Make Alvin shave her pussy. Have her suck Alvin but don't let him cum but make him eat her after Klay has cum in her. Make her get her nipples pierced and her clit hood. Maybe make her have ware a butt plug that has a chain that is attach to Alvin's cock when at home

MiniwandMiniwandover 7 years ago
Don't bring Alvin in

You chose to write from the mom POV so the story is centered around her.

It would have work to bring Alvin in IF his mother cared but she just doesn't. Alvin already saw her get fucked and humiliated but it didn't phase her, no guilt or shame for her. That's why involving Alvin more would not be good. If the story was from his POV or his mother struggled between her shame and guilt of fucking Klay and the pleasure she gets from it then Alvin in the story would be a plus. But you didn't go there.

I think Alvin should be an extra from time to time but no more. As for the mother (who doesn't have a name) she works at a research facility? Maybe you can use that. Drugs can do a lot of things like growing breasts, making her horny, making Klay cum more, mind control and so on.

Klay can offer her as a reward to his teammates for winning a championship. She can have a sister to offer to Klay. She can use drugs to seduce the girl Alvin is in love with for Klay, a confident and beautiful girl who thinks Klay is trash and feels sorry for Alvin. She is trying to stop the bullying and goes to Alvin's house to meet his mom. The school wants proof then she will give them some. She discusses a plan with Alvin's mom to catch Klay red-handed. Of course it backfires because the mother tell Klay about it and in the end the girl become a slave too.

Of course piercing nipples and a tattoo saying "Klay's cum dumpster" can be added too.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Son

Leave the son out. Use more public humiliation

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

Get him to impregnate her, completely own her. Also a nice way to conclude full circle from where she started.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago

Maybe bring in a teacher, another mother, or Klay's mother

newmantopleasenewmantopleaseover 7 years ago
DO NOT LISTEN TO THESE GUYS

Alvin needs to stay in the story because it's a bully/mom/cuck story, it's just the way it is.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Alvin Grows a Pair

Have Alvin hit Klay with a baseball bat, then take a pair of hedge shears and castrate him, force Klay to take his own genitals into his mouth and then Alvin tapes his mouth shut. Alvins' mother then decides Alvin is the man she wants.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
suggestions

Use more humiliation for the mom. Make her entertain some of the son's friends. Slowly the son starts to get into seeing his mom humiliate and even joins in.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
More jocks

Klay should bring a few teammates over to spit-roast the MILF in front of the wimpy son - and they they make the son video record it.

I also like the idea of having a hot teacher (who Klay fucks on a regular basis) join in so he gets to dominate two hot sluts at the same time.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Mom/whore at Baseball Game

Make her go to his baseball game... dressed as business woman...

whore has to kiss his bat before each at bat... strip as each inning goes by... have her in lingerie at game's end

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Show her off, pantiless, skirt, at the mall.

Show off pussy

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
make her son jack off right next to them

make her son jack off right next to them

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Foodforthought

Alvin has enough and grows a pair

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Great

Focus more on Alvin having to watch and it's affects on him. Kalyn might beat him in front of mom and get her ascent or teach her to cum while he is doing it

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
continuing

Klay needs to use and abuse you in front of yoour son that he bullies, then force your son to become a sissy

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
A lil incest

Have klay make Alvin lose his virginity to his mother after klay let's Alvin's friend fuck hee

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
More!

I like the idea of turning Alvin queer. Maybe have the mom verbally abuse him? Klay could turn her into a true whore, selling her out to his friends--other kids who know Alvin

post_masturbatory_shamelordpost_masturbatory_shamelordover 7 years ago
Keep going

love the story. I want to see him knock up the mother, and do a variety of other things to mark her as his property, such as tattoos, piercings, etc.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
gain weight

Have the hot mom foced to become curvy and plump. still hot though. also pregnant

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Bullying

Mom needs to start bullying son with klay. So they both enjoy it

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Needs more detail.

The sex was going just way too fast with only little bits of detail as compared to the first chapter, If it isn't too much, can you add more to this chapter and any others you make? It was good, There just needs to be a bit more in the sex as every few lines it would just jump around. They fucked for a good while, the details should reflect that.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
the son is necessary for this story.

there are already so many stories of a man dominating an older woman. what makes this story special is the son's involvement. pls keep the son as a main character and focus on his humiliation. that would make the story so much more unique than the others on this site.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
I Locke it but I feel something is missing...

I feel like maybe the son is getting the short end of the stick no matter what... But I'm not sure that's it

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Do incest

Make the son fuck his momma and become a dickjammer like Klay. You could also add the character of Klay's father to fuck Alvin's mother.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
good read

more humiliation add more of the son few of his Buddy's

have drink piss

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
More humiliation

Great stories! I'd love it if the son was involved more, and if he humiliated the both of them. Even humiliation and degradation in public.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
More? Longer? Harder?

I read both chapters today. I hope there is more to cum.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Rob

Let him take her to the town, do some shoping, buy some slutty clothes or make her get some tatto and tan. Cheap jewelery might work nice too. But her some dildos to keep her pussy stuffed.

Make her son wear her used lingerie or girly clothes, chasity cage or make up, to be proper sissy. Make a party for some of the school pals.

Invite Klay's dad or brothers to have fun with her too.

Make her daughter, who was out of home, return.

Babyslut15Babyslut15over 7 years ago
More please

Have home show up at her job and fuck her and then move into their home with his dad and they both fuck her and he Dad takes control of the son and fuck him hard too

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
great story

I would like to see him rape her son, while she is holding him. Then she can clean her son ass with her tongue, while he fucked her ass. bringing in his father is a great idea.

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
Good

Good, but i think u should rewrite it at all and make it longer, add also other classmate

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
amazing! part 3?

Turn the son into a sissy and the mom into a common street whore

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
continue

Have mom demand son beg to be beat or put in chastity in order for her to get that cock.

Imagine how humiliating it would be for him to be with his recent girlfriend with a chastity belt on his little dick. Pussy eating is all that's on his menu. Maybe Klay even suggests he has to practice with "someone" so he gets better for that girlfriend.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
added thought

Make her want to see Alvin beaten and humiliated. Even to the point of disowning him right in front of him

AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago
Beat up Alvin!

Definitely want to see Klay beat the ever loving shit out of Alvin, make him bleed and cry, while his mom watches and laughs. SHe loves watching Klay bully her son, and the bloodier it gets, the more excited she becomes.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Where to go?

How about having Alvin split Klay's head with a hatchet or a meat cleaver.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Pregnant

The mom should get pregnant from klay

Titus73Titus73almost 7 years ago
Highschool

Take it to the school. Have Klay whore out Alvins Mom in public again. Maybe play more into the mind of Alvin and stuff.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Alvin sodomized

He should take Alvin too.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

Maybe have Klay bring another whore that's better than his current slut and use both of them in front of Alvin because it takes more than 1 whore take down that man1

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
just a thought

let the son in on the action both him and his mom end up slaves

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
LET'S LEAVE ALVIN OUT OF THIS.

Hi hamgod!

Ch. 2 is outside my comfort level. Sorry about that. I did enjoy Ch. 1, though.

As to Alvin, you can create a voyeur son character based on Alvin, hopefully one who was not abandoned by his mother.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
The best. I wish it was me!!!!!

I came 6 times reading about Kyle. He is everything I wanted in life

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

great story but you need to get the son in on it :)

MiniwandMiniwandabout 6 years ago
More

You could first extablish total control of Klay over the mother. Like her quitting her job just she has time to please him, humiliating the son by making him clean up after them.

You could even add a character like Alvin's aunt or the girl Alvin has a crush on.

encore769encore769about 6 years ago
the best

one of the best submission stories I have ever read. The only thing missing besides having her son watch, is to make her son also take her. Klay says that "He needs to become a man" and to do that he has to show his control over his own mother. Klay can now begin to teach Alvin on the ways.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Add his family

He brings slutmom home to his house and his dad's cock is bigger and his mom has nice huge tits and they get a turn with her. His little sister, who is sexy can have Alvin. Gotta throw him a bone.

MisGMisGabout 6 years ago
try this

If you were the bully what would you enjoy doing to her, I agree with the idea of taking her home and letting mom and dad use her and letting the son use her to become a man, Don't quit the job. tell us what she does and work her humiliation in to her job, Make her fuck some of the owners and or customers to further her humiliation, let the daughter slap her around and use her together with the son.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
Not the son

Don't 'let' the son in on the action other than watching, being humiliated. Why does everyone want that? Go read pure incest fantasy stories! Truly, you should write what YOU want. But loved it when mom got horny seeing Alvin seeing her used. Hope there are more chapters to.. cum..

AnonymousAnonymousabout 6 years ago
mom starts too disown

mom should show hatred towards her son and humilate him as well calling digusting names and verbal abuse

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago

Klay should knock her up

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
More bullying

Like to see son bullied more and bought up as a slave

mcbsmcbsover 5 years ago
No need to Continue

Unless the author plans on Klay getting a bullet between the eyes. After a hollow point 9mm or 357 mag round to each knee cap. Two Stars.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Yes, more, please

I really like what you're doing, and am hoping you keep it up. If you don't want to continue these stories, maybe try something similar? A parent chaperone at a school dance who gets a bit tipsy from the spiked drinks and ends up groped and possibly more.

THE_USER_999THE_USER_999over 4 years ago
GOOD DO NOT STOP, Klay Wouldn't

The only knock i have is it all at the same time no staged alvin is hiden and thats the key point of the story?

TheRiseFromAshesTheRiseFromAshesover 3 years ago

Yeah so, it's about how I expected the story would go. I think the problem of this story - and I already mentioned this in the previous chapter - is that the mom converted way too quickly. She should have put up more resistance, and not this mindless "yes master" stuff that you'd see at a flick of a switch.

I do hope you continue writing. It's really not that bad. The plot could be worked on though. I'm a big fan of character and I love to see them descend in a logical way, particularly if it's written in the female perspective.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Great Fuck Story

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

this woman is stupid,

trucker1965trucker19656 months ago

Get a grammar check app please.

Scrap everything you have and go back to the beginning. Your bdsm, control freak bs starts at the end and you just heap more of it onto the story. We have no indication whatsoever that the mom has any experience at all with this lifestyle, so why would she just start living it at the sight of klay's foolishly way over sized cock? There is absolutely no training on klay's part, really?

Where is Alvin? He makes a appearance what, twice so far. Yet the sight of klay's cock has caused her to forego her motherly instincts, because it's so awesome and enslaving to her. Where is the examples of her doing that? He's being bullied by klay, yet there is no bullying and taking advantage of mom while doing so. Mom isn't doing the bidding of klay and choosing klay over her son to his face, who she has told us pleasing him is more important to her than her son how so?

In the end this really is nothing more than a brutal rape and if that's your point then the story really is pretty much over he accomplished that in all 3 of her holes.

BTW real men can't fuck all might and continue to shoot huge loads of cum every time.

AntsinthejungleAntsinthejungle6 months ago

I love it, I don't have any issues with your story. Atferall it's just a story, something that you made up. I enjoyed it and I know others did too. I love everything from start to finish. Continue to write ✍️.

AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

You're a fucking idiot. Seriously, you don't know how to spell, and I don't even know where to start with your plot. Also there was no bdsm. You're Alvin aren't you? The soft kid with a tiny dick. I can't think of any other reason you'd write trash like this.

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