Christmas Pie

you should never

speak ill of the dead as in this author who died a long time ago and just doen't know it.

Very hot

I like it Xoxoxox Annette

My wife

This story lost me at the end. Just not my thing. But I couldn't think of a better Christmas present than seeing my wife gang banged!!

WAS THIS SUPPOSED TO PLEASURE OR PUNISHMENT

which ever or what ever he is the Wimp TK U MLJ LV NV

1*

fag cuck shit.

Enjoyed this story

Nothing better than a loving hot wife.Thanks

Unbelievable.

Your kidding.right..?

A thought

For the last couple anons, and anons in general

If your life sucks so much you feel the need to spew anger and bike at people online anonymously, please, consider just killing yourself.

This country is going to shit because of guys like you. The suicide and overdose rates among the average anon's demographics (white, male, lower educated, older) are rising and have been for a while, but clearly not fat enough. So please, do us all a favor and open a vein. The world will be better off, and I promise no one will miss you for very long. I'd imagine you're this unpleasant to be around in your real life too.

Just a question...

Just a question: why did he marry if all he wanted was to suck all his six friends and soon be begging for them to fuck him? Even his friends (?) knew very well what he really wanted...A sick story...1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

Please ...

Move this to Gay Male category or fetish ... It's revolting

Gay

Please post this in the gay section where it belongs.

Revolting. And front line cocksucker, take your own advise.

"we both love the sexual freedom"...

How is it that this only applies to the wife? Shouldn't he have access to the others wives and girlfriends? After all its only fair. Just wondering! But if you want good scores for your story, submit it to Gay Male, they would probably appreciate it more than LW readers. I don't think this marriage is going to last very long, even in fairyland. What a hateful, treacherous, cheating, sleazy bunch of men. If I was there I would be the one to gleefully tell the other wives what was going on and sit back and watch the 'fireworks'. Christmas for divorce lawyers.

Overdose

To ingest that much semen in one session and keep it all down in ones stomach is impossible. He's be in the local emergency later in the day to have his stomach pumped out. Cute story line though.

go die you filthy faggot cuck.

Eat shit and die, author.

Hopefully someone will piss in your mouth to wash the shit down as you die.

MisCategorized

Fetish.
If this activity makes him happy and gratifies his desires, seems to me that this expression of his inclination(s) is well within the substance and spirit of this website. I don't understand the Venom of the Critics.
I found the theme and practices outlined in the piece to be Repulsive.
The Freedom to CHOOSE what the Reader reads is Fundamental.
Little or Nothing to focus on the Wife except her Facility in bringing a partner to climax; A LOT on a FETISH fOr Bodily Fluids. Just Sayin'...

????

Maybe you should decide just what you want from your writing. Do you want to improve and hope to do so by submitting here and studying the comments for ways to improve? If so you either have to change your story line or change the category. Here in LW you’ll only get the ‘eat shit and die’ comments—nothing that will help you improve.

If, on the other hand, your goal is to piss off a bunch of Trolls and Boo Birds, you’re doing GREAT! It does seem such a waste of time though. They are what they are and they can’t change. The damage was too great.

I’ll vote on this one when and if I find the answer to the above questions.

So, CarolinaDreamer

How will you vote if Khatch46 decides that he really does want to "piss off a bunch of Trolls and Boo Birds", rather than merely looking for comments that will help improve his writing?

Lue

I'm not a Troll or a Boo Bird

But I still think this story is crap. If the author wanted to make it interesting he would have developed both characters to like or dislike and a plot worth reading. He did neither

Queer shit

# 1 Psycho fag crap

So hot

I love this story. Great. Wonderful. Sexy. Erotic. Hot.

@thecarolinadreamer: Troll or a Boo Bird...

Is like this how he sees himself when looks in a mirror? Or when he sucks his friends as soon as they had fucked his wife while he just jerks off?

So fucking hot

I can't imagine ever being able to live this life, but I live vicariously through you.
My biggest fantasy is watching another man or two fuck my wife and me clean her up after.

Oh god

How can I become this guy