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Love the story.
One small point though. We don't say ass in Scotland. It is called an arse. We shag arses not asses. 😉
Nope!!
I enjoyed the first part, but you lost me on this one. Not my thing!! I wish you well with further chapters, but I won't be with you on them.
Not Scottish
Appreciate the comment regarding use of word arse. Unfortunately, I'm not Scottish so I may not be using all the proper words for the region. I wanted to suggest a flavor for Scotland to enhance the story, but not necessarily make it Scottish as that may be unreadable for more people. I even thought of just writing it in standard American English as that is what I'm most familiar with. But I liked the little taste of the area. I don't know how many times I've had to go back and fix a no or not or can't or don't because it wasn't natural. As this story is taking place in the 1700's, I'm also trying to avoid the use of words that I doubt existed at the time, such as pussy, and also words that aren't in frequent modern use, such as cunny, and stick with the old standby's such as cunt and sex and sheath, which were likely in use then and still in use now. Thanks to all for your comments.
WAY too close to Outlander TV show
I thought I was reading an x-rated version of Claire and Jamie's story (also set in the Highlands, same century). She is told to stay close to the castle, she disobeys because she doesn't understand the need for safety, she is captured and almost raped, he and his men have to rescue her and put themselves at risk in the process, she is punished by getting a sound spanking from her husband. The only difference here was the addition of the brothers, and the reverse virginity (Jamie was a virgin when he married Claire in Outlander). Seriously - Ah canna say't wi' more clarity than this: y'need t' be a wee bit more original, else ye may find yerself gettin' called a sleekit plagiarizer, y' ken?
Tara_Neale
This reminds me of a story by Tara_Neale called Ægir’s Captive (part 2 called Ægir’s Bride, part 3 called Ægir’s Wife) where it is 3 brother all with the same mother but different fathers. The youngest one, Bjorn, is also the one with the wife that shares her with his 2 older brothers Sven and Mikael. Hoping this one is as good as that one. 5 stars from me. ;-)
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