Always Call First

Utter rubbish.

wtf

What a lot of sick fucks in LW these days with numerous cuck authors & readers, whatever happened to all the REAL men in the world. 1 *

Idiotic cuck crap by a pubescent author!!! MINUS 5*!!!

Only laughable!!!

The situation could have happened, but...

The situation could have happened, until she spotted her son...but the reaction of any mother would have been very different, unless she was a mentally deranged person...And the place for mentally deranged people is in an asylum. From that point the story only went lower and lower...1*

Also today a new baboon.........

Of course 1*

Don't insult the baboons!

Yep, brain transplant failed.

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stupid shit.

"Your so sexy baby."

An indication of how badly this story needs and editor.

This needs to be in incest/taboo

You may get a better reception in I/T . It really does belong there.

kdcee79Real Men

Real men do not come to sex sites to read about vulgar fifthy sex.Real men stay home and love their wives!!!

Wish there was a minus -10

Awful

another monkey found a keyboard

"What are you doing."

Yeah, that was my thought, pretty much.

Not going to mark this one.

and so???

ya got a ways to go before this one's done but it's a good start.

LOVING WIVES ? ?

This is an incest story ! Getting off watching two guys plugging his mother ? His own wife would make it under the chosen category. ( if he was married ! )

Not much here

A vignette at best. If this is a stand-alone story it is in serious need of more information to give it a beginning, a fuller middle and an ending showing resolution between the parents and son. Barely 3 stars.

"an old fat ugly fag fool"

Guess I've been outed. God is that embarrassing! OK, not as embarrassing as writing, or enjoying, this pathetic drek, but still, you hurt my feelings. Except I can't believe I can feel myself getting hard after reading your words. I'm just not sure which are more arousing, the fat, or the ugly, or the fag, or the fool.

At least let me congratulate you on your erudite succinct communication. You remind me of Albert Einstein. He's brain dead too.

I WOULD HAVE TO SAY

Insanely Happy, TK U MLJ LV NV

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Vote 1* for 𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐅𝐀𝐓 𝐃𝐔𝐌𝐁 𝐓𝐑𝐀𝐍𝐍𝐘 𝐖𝐇𝐎𝐑𝐄™ (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka NEEDYOU200 aka 5+ANNONY!

FIRST EFFORT?

Welcome to the Loving Wives category. I don’t know if you wanted criticism but you sure got it—almost all negative, and not much constructive criticism in the batch. I’ll try to change that.
@ Read the category description carefully. Remember any story you can fit in any category other than LW will probably get a better review. LW’s readers are a take-no-prisoners gang. Strictly speaking this could be pried into LW, but is a much better fit in Incest/Taboo.
@ In any case, you need to finish the story; by that I don’t just mean the ending. It’s hard, but we writer wannabes should always try to make the characters believable. Tell us something about what motivates them—showing by dialogue or actions are even better. Having Mom just keep on keeping on after she spies her son watching maybe could be sold, but you have to set up the situation. (How would take a lot of thought on my part and it’s your story.)
@ All stories need a beginning, middle, and ending. Seems to me you skipped the first and last and was very stingy with the middle.
Don’t let the negative comments discourage you. I think you have the making of a good Taboo story here. You might have the same with LW but I think massive changes would be needed.
There is one thing I’m sure of—this advice is worth at least what it cost you. Good luck and keep writing. We may soon need fresh blood to replace those who tire of the ‘Eat shit and Die’ crowd.

If the author does not think this belongs in Incest/Taboo then...

he needs to go back to school to redo English Comprehension.

ok

I thought it was not so bad. It could very well have happened just that way. Not sure why people keep reading something then complain they didn't like it.

Great story; great start

Don't listen to the nay-sayers, whiners, and moral superiors (LOL!). You idea was hot and interesting. The dynamics though, was seen from son to mother; not from husband to wife, and so may indeed have been better off in the Incest/Taboo category. I'm pretty lenient with the categories - as many here like to throw fire & brimstone at anything other than monogamous sex, despite the category description. Develop your characters a bit. WHY would she not be so devastated that her son caught her? So horny? Has had thoughts of son before? Doesn't care about son? Thinks son is a wimp? Too much left hanging. I hate though when the naysayers jump on a new writer & instead of being helpful, they are so critical. I hope you try again!

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Where is part two? :-)

That was a great first page, where is the rest of the story ?

my case

Remember to had sex with my mother and heir friend - great memory:-)

Trash, waste of time

Stick to reading, stay away from the keyboard.

good premise so far

too short...but interested in more.

Significant number of errors. Too short. Could have been a 5 star

Massage and not message
You are not your.
Story could have been more ellaborate. You write pretty good. Need another part where mom fucks him.