All Comments on 'Trials of Love Pt. 01'

Is there a reason you broke it up? How long til the next chapter or are you like other writers who wait for comments to see what direction to go in?

Outstanding!! I am anxious to see where this goes!

Off like a rocket, very well written and look forward to the next chapter.

The right cliffhanger for a potentially exciting series.Keep it up man!!

I couldn't stop reading. I hope you post the follow-up soon.

I'm 75% sure I'm going to disdain the ending , but yeah , this intro has me by the lapels.

Let's face it. No kids , wife's a hot , successful musician in her prime and is phobic about not being seen as one half of couple. Who could ever guess , that things would come this current pretty pass. Lol.

Ah well the game goes on and Andyhm is giving the play by play lowdown in the beautiful people's dangerous liasons. Gotta go.Suddenly seized by urge to cue some random Rob Thomas musical elegy to heart rending affaire de coeur.

He should have gone up on the stage and announced the end of their 8 year marriage and given her his ring to seal it.

Good plot & so far well written, please keep up the good work; so many writers fall away during the middle stages & then just flop at the end. I'm so hoping you'll prove to be one of the few who can & do maintain the high standard of their first chapter. 4 ****

Looking forward to the next installment. Love the two timing drama.

Great story. Yhanks

It's very good. I want more,asap.

More please , u have me hooted on the story

Not sure where you are going but ...I will wait for now.

Right now this is totally frustrating. I need to know how this betrayal turns out before I can decide fairly what I think of it. Thank you for writing.

Guy is a prime wimp for going along with this secret marriage bullshit. The way she treated him was beyond fucked up. Yet you hint at raac ending. So 1*.

The husband seems as confused, uncertain. and pussy whipped as a guy can be. He was betrayed, no matter her excuse. If a wife doesn't want anyone to know she is married to you, it isn't much of a marriage.

You don't "peek" your interest. It is piqued.

Gave it a 4 for the writing, and the plot. But that was an ultimate slap in the face from her, and from his employee. No redemption possible for them. I know you hinted at RAAC, but it's just not possible

I wouldn't have left.

I would have run up there, pushed him away and said, "She CAN'T marry you, because she's my FUCKING wife! Or has my "loving" wife been fucking others?"

Then pulled her rings off, held them up and said "These WERE her engagement and wedding rings from me. I guess she doesn't need them anymore."

THEN left!

I’m confused – her aunt’s marriage was ruined by rumors of affairs. Well, Kay’s not being married hasn’t stopped rumors of affairs! How is their situation significantly different from Samantha’s?

I also don’t understand the hidden marriage thing anyway. I can maybe understand it with a rock star or a sex symbol movie star, and even THEY aren’t concerned about being married, LOL!

"Ah, that's what your problem is ... I thought you ..." – Probably was going to say, “I thought you knew about her lover.” She’s probably telling everyone who knows that he’s a willing cuckold!

I'll give her the benefit of the doubt that she didn't know about the engagement announcement, since she was expecting him there, but she was obviously fucking Nigel and that's why she didn't want their marriage exposed.

This story has it all......can't wait for more. Best thing on this site for months.

Fantastic start, I am really intrigued now.

Very unique plot. Please hurry with part 2.

That's always the easy part. I won't score it for now. We'll see where it goes.

But nearly all your stories suffer from a "drift" into swinging..... If you keep that bullshit out of this it might indeed be very good. Very well written BTW.

The story is well written but this guy has been a spineless pussy for 10 years. Who gives a shit what happens to him. Running to a hideout. What bullshit the only place he should run is to his lawyer.

This story is very well written, only a couple of glitches. I am looking forward to the next chapter. The tension was so dense. The characters were fine, maybe a little over the top, but a good story needs to have extraordinary people sometimes. Keep up the good work. Five stars easy

Author has an awesome writing style who makes you feel what the characters are feeling both the hurt of betrayal and the feeling of love

The two separate paths the stories probably going to take the one I am leaning towards the record company is trying to break them up to make more money from her

I like how you left us in suspense. We don't know for sure that she did have an affair. I don't like having husbands who run away and not know the facts. Why wouldn't he simply ask would " D" was and that he called. She knew her marriage was in trouble and agreed to meet after the concert. How can the management company not be on top of the reception. You need to clean this up. Look forward to the next installment.

I never comment on the actions of the characters. I comment on the writing, the build up, the ability to hold my interest. I found this story to be excellent on all those aspects. A solid 5

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Great story so far but I kinda have issues at the end. Forgetting not him bringing up D and talking to his wife, she has to know considering how pissed off he is when he walked out that even if he didn't get into the afterparty the bailing on him could be a deal breaker and further, the next day the proposal would definitely be in the newspapers/tabloids. She couldn't actually avoid him knowing even if she physically kept him away (assuming it wasn't the Recording Company playing games). Overall great story so far

#1 If it looks like a duck and quacks like a duck. Its a duck dumbass

I don't understand.

Are the wife and the D. guy really lovers? Do they plan to marry for real? If not, and if it was only some PR stunt, how did she expect to hide it from her husband? How could she explain such a mess? Is she really so incredibly dumb? What kind of marriage is that, when they are separated for months and people don't know about it?

To sum it up: weak, pussy-whipped husband + stupid crazy cheating wife + absurd premise = lame raac ending.

This is the kind of story that keeps you on the edge. You can feel the emotion. These are the kind of stories i like to read in Loving Wifes. It is just not a fuck story but really gets you involved in the story. Cannt wait till he gets the next part out The difference between a good writer and a great one

and infuriating. The reconciliation will not be popular since the husband has been deceived badly by his wife as well as his partner. Whatever explanation they give, I don't think it can excuse leaving him so far out of the loop. Even if they did not tell him because they knew he would not go along, it is condescending at best, and infuriating at least. The guy has had no real marriage. Of course we have the old "I stopped using birth control" gambit and in any story in here, that is a declaration of pregnancy, either existing or about to be. That gives the writer the leverage the wife needs to control the guy, if it turns out to be his kid. It ramps up the pain and agony if there is betrayal. If she tries to tell the husband in chapter two or three that the other guy got her pregnant, but it was a mistake and she loves hubby, well,,, there will be some pissed readers. We all need to wait on this to see where it goes, but the treatment of the husband, and how he allowed it, does not allow for much sympathy for any of the characters.

I don’t see how her being miserable about the breakup of her marriage is going to make money for the record company. I don’t think that classical music fans buy albums because their titillated by the love lives of the artists!

He needs to formulate a plan of action to deal with betrayal by his wife and management team. The lies and deception by all parties are unacceptable and unforgivable, even if it's only a publicity stunt. Leave the wife, fire the management team, move on with your life.

really erotic as hell. a stupid plot invented to tell the usual unreotic story. 4 pages of garbage and more to come.

How many cliches can you cram into one story? Topped of by "I'm running away and never coming back".

The author is obviously talented, but has horrendous taste in subject matter.

How a secret marriage can help them... I've no idea.

I don't like this couple. They have no real marriage. She treats him like crap and he lets her.

No rating for now.

Wonderful! Loved the start. Could be another The woodworkers

Wife

Asked on the start I don't think she gets what she deserves but I hope the cheating cunt and all around her who knew the secret pay the price. Hope jobs are lost contracts broken a divorce and a happy ending for the hubby who got humiliated and abused. Hope he publicly destroys them and their reputations.

when i first started to read this story it seemed like it would turn into a wife watching story. but boy was i wrong on that one. very well written and just enough mystery to keep u reading it. hope for next chapter soon

All I can say is WOW!

Wow is right. I can only hope to build the tension that you build in your stories. Thank you for showing me how its done.

Great beginning. Well crafted characters, entirely plausable when we consider the morals of The Glitterati. They have none. Easy to get emotionally invested in the protagonists plight. You write well and this is enhanced by the fact that we have been suffering through a long period of literary drought on LW. Looking forward to the additional offerings.

I have read this one before and can guess how it turns out.hope he goes off to have his own private life.

The next installment really needs to be quick! What a cliffhanger, kudos dude! AND REALLY, Post the next one quick!

How does Peter figure that he is still majority owner of the management company? It appears that Kayla would own 30% while her co-conspirator Stephen owns 40% (70% total). I'm not sure that a guy with 30% ownership of a company gets to do the hiring and firing.

I could be wrong.

I would burn every one of the motherfuckers down and the cheating cunt would be one of them!

I would release all the marital records and destroy her image and everyone attached to it.

Stephen would be living out of a box and Nigel would be lucky to be living at all!

This story got to me!

Well done! 5*

I had to vent my emotions in my last post. Great job for hooking me in emotionally!

@Harddaysknight very eloquently expressed thoughts that I also had.

Good start but please no reconciliation. Making believe she's not married for 8 years allowed other people in the industry to hit on her 100 x more and all rumors ok because that's how she keeps hubby off balance. There's no way to down play the rumors, phone call , two phones, changing of the SIM card , the kiss at end of both concerts, flowers, hand holding, sneaky party they left him out of and the lovers announced love and proposal. He should of laid the guy out holding his arm then screamed out he was her hubby and she could say yes to her lover because he's filing for divorce on the grounds of adultry anyway then walk out. Me I'd send a recorded statement to all the news stations telling all to shove it up Their asses. There is nothing that could get me to stay in that marriage. Please do the right thing by hubby , anyone one can be humiliated but you can come out on top if you show some self respect and balls and end it immediately upon finding out .

I don't know about you, but I smell a lie detector test in the future.

And would someone tell me what exactly the initials RAAC stand for? I know what it is but not the words represented by the initials.

RAAC - Reconciliation At All/Any Cost

“We are no longer just business colleagues, we are so much more." – Key question: “we are so much more.” HOW much more? It could be anything from a dear friendship that he has over blown in his own mind to an all out affair!

“No wonder she hadn't wanted me to be there tonight” – Huh? She DID want him there! She wasn’t going to perform if he wasn’t! It was Nigel who kept him off the guest list.

Second part is submitted. Last part will be submitted later this evening

I have no idea what the last anonymous comment was about - just seemed to be a random selection of quotes from the story so I'm going to delete it

You better have her being blackmailed or something good like a sham affair and marriage to D in order to have a hidden second life. other wise she's just a cheating bitch.

Oh and she went off birth control a month ago. I guess she's pregnant with D's child and needs Cucky to raise it!

I'll keep reading to see where this goes...5* so far but that maybe revised if hubby doesn't throw a pair.

Looking forward to the next chapter. For what it is worth, I prefer cheating wife stories in which the husband does not wimp out, although that does not mean "burn the bitch". Or anyway, I think the most interesting aspect of such stories is the dialog between the husband and wife, in which the wife comes to realize what she lost. Stories that focus on revenge are generally stupid and boring, to me. Thanks for posting.

Needed something like this

Love it so far!

I just hate that I have to wait to read more.

Had a different middle.

why run, stay and find out what is going on. i doubt she screwed Nigel but she differently led him on. and he should have staid and seen what she did about his proposal. you made him look like a weak man. so she is off the pill , no way can she say and love him and have affair at the same time. it doesn't seem plausible. we will find out. again why run , only weak,cowards,insecure men run. is he a man or a wimp. the way you portrayed him?

She can be totally loyal and misunderstood, or the biggest whore in the world, its your plot. But to lean on his failure to get her and Stephen's explanations is really lame. Why did Stephen suddenly become superman in holding him back from approaching the stage? And the whole concept of the crowd blocking him from approaching his wife is just bizarre. Its a fucking classical music event, not a rage concert. You simply sucker punch Stephen than say excuse me as you walk through the crowed toward the stage.

So you are going to use the tired old trope of his dithering and wondering what the hell is going on, except he's not going to ask his wife, To Whom He Is Married, why some guy named Nigel thinks he can propose marriage. And we will have her all in a dither as to how she got herself into this situation that she so far has denied and concealed from Her Husband. And this is drama and suspense? No, this is just needless delay and phony drama, until some chapters later you, finally, have them reconnect and communicate, and Then we find out what the fuck is going on. All the drama and suspense in between his running and their finally talking is just stupid phony filler.

Since it is what it is, and they are all adults, why can't he just ask her what the fuck is going on, then either come to understand and maybe forgive, or kick her skank ass to the curb and feel lucky no children are to be hurt in the breakup. Except she is already pregnant, surprise surprise.

I will wait to rate this once I see the whole story. Surprise me.

Really need to know what's happening.

Betrayed by everyone. Damn.

Even at this stage the narrative skill of the author is beyond question.tThe principal characters are both original and fully realized.I am ,of course,speculating but I think they are both being conned.i don't believe for a moment that Kay is being unfaithful but the recording company has set them up to believe that.. I hope Richard can discern the truth. They have too much to lose. Ps celebrate not celibate

So far it's a mixed bag. I assume because he was specifically left out of the reception that her "lover" D knew who he was. So if he knew about him why is he asking her to marry him. I have to warn you. If your just gonna have it be a simple misunderstanding. Than you can expect a 1* from me.

I'm sorry I started reading this now. It's one of those stories where you start it, and you can't put it down until it's finished. Unfortunately I have to put it down until Part 2 arrives. 5*. Keep up the good work.

Please don't wait a long time before continuing this story. Marvelous

While many of us go with the fight option, not all are wired initially that way.

I don't empathize with his initial reaction or his silly attitude about putting up with being ignored as her husband for 8 years but this story isn't about me.

I'm really hoping this character is not weak or wimpy at all but the writing is engaging and entertaining.

Some of us would lay waste and devastation after being fucked with but some would choose to run and maybe regroup.

looking forward to parts 2 and 3

It’s bad enough that he doesn’t ask her who “D” is, but when she says it was “her” when he knows it was a man, how can he let that slide?

"I don't hear the shower," – Since he knows she’s lying, why not turn on the shower but not get in, then go back and eavesdrop?

I STILL don’t understand their marriage being secret changes anything! The paparazzi are still gossiping about her “lovers”, so why would that hurt Pete any less?

He should have said that he would go to the concert only if Kayla promised to introduce him from the stage! And if she broke that promise that he would stand up and do it himself!

There’s also no reason for her to have left backstage when she was expecting him there; unless Nigel lied to her and said that Pete would be at the other reception, but in that case, why didn’t she question it when he wasn’t there, maybe text him?

“Stephen said you'd decided not to go” – Stephen’s a lying sack of shit! He’s the one that said she wouldn’t play if he WASN’T going!

“There was a disturbance in the crowd as we pulled away from the kerb” – Probably Kay, a little late to be concerned about him!

“She'd made hers and in such a public way. Something she'd refused me for the past ten years” – Technically, SHE didn’t, and it’s STILL possible that she didn’t know what Nigel had planned.

Simply great!

I am enthralled by it . Well done 5 star so far don't cuck it up from here boy

star, very interested to see where it goes from here

are not conducive to any long term relationships, TK U MLJ LV NV

Her husband being in hiding (at least from the divorce papers) is going to mess up her wedding plans for a while. People will wonder.

How could this be anything but LW? And a good one (potentially great) at that!

Can't wait for the following chapters

Very good first chapter...it makes us want to read the whole story in one time...But we have to wait for the next days to read it...4* for this part...

A fantastic tale so far with mystery and confusion. Please let us have more.

This rocks. More, more more, and soon! Thanks for writing.

is that you dont release the full story at once. wtf is up with that?

The wife has been playing the husband for a fool since the beginning of their relationship. She uses Kay Ryan as her married name so her fans won't find out that Kayla is married. When she didn't want acknowledge him before her peers while they were dating, he should have headed for the exit and never looked back. Then they get married in the Maldives out in the middle of the Indian Ocean as far away from civilization as possible. I've read that those islands may be underwater by 2100 as the sea level rises. Probably all the rumors about her lovers are true.

But how long must we wait for the next chapter?

Very well set up. I'm eager to see the next installments. Well written!

Great start, lots of intrigue, an apparently big slut wife .... yehaa!

You are a talented writer. Great start to your story and I am looking forward to the next installment.

I won't rate a multipart story until I've read it all.

What can I say... I hope that you have the entire story finished and plan on continuing it on some sort of regular basis — like a chapter every couple of days or so!

Great start to a story. A different twist to what appears to be a cheating wife story. I like it. Can't wait to read the next two parts.

Will read the rest. Good so far.

Really... what's the possible excuse that the wife can use here? That this was all a publicity stunt? Well if that's the case why wouldn't the husband be in on it? After all the husband has been in all this fake publicity marriage for a number of years already so why wouldn't she tell him?

What possible excuse could she have for not meeting the husband backstage after the big dramatic blowout they had where he walked out.? Surely she realizes how tenuous her marriage is so why would she risk causing another big thing to happen after promising to meet him at Backstage after the concert?

Hiw can she explain the lying? The new phone? THE SIM card... the deleted phone logs?

It's an interesting start and I would be surprised if there wasn't an unexpected surprise around the corner. I really don't understand why people are so negative about the wife when it's obvious she loves him. After all, she was so upset that she threatened to cancel the concert if he didn't show up and mouths that she loves him. Sadly, some people only enjoy BTB stories and can't stand stories about reconciliation. Thank you and I look forward to the next episode.

Hope there is a chapter 2 soon?

Hopefully you post it soon. A very good start.

@mike9698 - EXCELLENT point! NIgel HAS to know she's married. It's going top be a real red herring if it turns out to be a joke or publicity stunt; her smile and apparent running after him hints that it may be, but the business with her lying about Nigel's call still bugs me!

@Anonymous Re: "Interesting Start" - The problem I have is with the deliberate misdirection. First, I believe the story when it tells us that she really loves him. But then we have the lies about the phone call, the refusal to go along with the AGREED upon reveal of the marriage, her apparent lack of concern about his being left behind at the concert hall. She should have flat out REFUSED to leave until he was backstage! The story is putting up these big neon arrows pointing at her flashing "CHEATER" in big red letters, and I think it's going to pull the plug and give us a big "Gotcha"!

Enjoyed it so far. Looking forward to see how it ends. Based on the intro, can guess how it turns out but looking forward to reading how it does.

with bated breath

5 so far.

Looks like parts 2 & 3 will both be live on the 6th

Andyhm

One of the few stories on here that has had my heart pumping 50 to the dozen, whilst I want the narrator to be happy I can understand if he was to kill her and her lover, but does the lover know she's married, obviously not as he has asked her to marry him, or he does but wants her to divorce, good story as it has me one the edge of my seat. What a bitch! Wish you had published all in one go. 5*

JJ

I can not wait to get the next chapter. You are indeed a gifted story teller!