This is not a political forum or a political story. When my character SCREAMED her comments in my ear, I had to respect that. Let's just follow her son's advice and "Let it go." All future rabid comments will be deleted. Let's just get along.
It's YOUR story write it YOUR way! If the CHUMP cult doesn't like what you've written, let em go elsewhere! All they do is whine about how nobody respects their hateful, bigioted, and racist NOT MY PRESIDENT! The story was good. I gave it arare 5 stars
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Anonymous12/06/16
Great story
I too don't like the political commentary. The story was great. Leave out you political views on next one please.
1- Since Sue called her to come join them, I left you to connect the dots that she was a CLOSE and intimate friend. She's also a recurring character in some of my other stories. We will see Rach with mom in a follow up story.
2- Poly tics: Mom didn't mention anyone's name or even his politics. In my mind, she was commenting on Zach Taylor, 12th President. He was a hero and worked hard to end slavery so I don't understand why she was so upset about him. She too is entitled to be wrong. Yeah, that's it, Zach.
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Anonymous12/06/16
You need to leave the politics out of your stories.
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Anonymous12/06/16
1- Since Sue called her to come join them, I left you to connect the dots that she was a CLOSE and intimate friend.
Sorry, uh uh.
First of all, it is immaterial whether things such as this are easy or hard to figure out. As the writer it is YOUR job to tell what is happening. It is not the readers' job to do, well, your job for you. This is the world you created. If you don't put it there, it doesn't exist.
The same applies to her saying she can't get pregnant. At her age, it's highly doubtful that it's because of menopause and not because she had her tubes tied, but without anything to back it up, the pregnant line is just a non sequitur.
Secondly, for people to know characters from other stories is very presumptuous on your part, that your stories are so great people automatically know details of seemingly unrelated stories.
to ANON - If you leave an email @, I can respond and continue this with you.
I know YOU probably won't see this, so for everyone else:
First, thanks for taking the time to make thoughtful comments.
"First of all, it is immaterial whether things such as this are easy or hard to figure out. As the writer it is YOUR job to tell what is happening. It is not the readers' job to do, well, your job for you. This is the world you created. If you don't put it there, it doesn't exist."
= That's a question of style. I have a few stories that lay it all out and I feel they are my weakest. I believe the best movies and stories are ones that leave you asking a few questions - usually 'WHAT IF?' My 'job' is to get you to react and think about the story. My least favorite movies /stories leave me cold, saying 'That's done...what now?' 'MY FRIEND SUE' is currently pending and it deliberately leads you to a fork where you have to decide which ending suits you better. I hope it also draws some strong emotions.
"The same applies to her saying she can't get pregnant. ..., but without anything to back it up, the pregnant line is just a non sequitur."
= Her comment was to her distraught son. She consoled him and showed him proof that she could not get pregnant. Her scar backs it up, so it fits and isn't a non sequitur. Do you need more than her word that the scar is real?
"Secondly, for people to know characters from other stories is very presumptuous on your part,...."
= OK, I'll give you that. Rach is in my head for the follow up, but YOU can't know that, so I'll stay aware and make it clearer. Thanks
I loved your story , Very entertaining ! I prefer to read erotic stories than to watch films as it allows use of the imagination to make it a personal thing. The characters are perfect and the hint of things to come, with Rach, is titillating.
As for politics I don't give a toss either way.
I like anal and AtoA but balk at AtoM as it's so unhygienic. As for rimming I love to do that but it has to be very clean first.
It's good to read stories of incest with love as it should be, there are too many Rapey stories around at the moment for my liking. Keep up the good work, I will certainly read more of your stories.
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Anonymous12/08/16
Awesome story. Loved every minute of reading. Didn't even mind the bit at the end of you adding another character by name without any sort of introduction. (Though something, anything would've been nice). The only thing I didn't enjoy was the political rant in the beginning. This is a sexual story website, please leave political thoughts and rants where they belong- in political chatrooms/blogs and your own head. Other than that loved the story can't wait for a second one.
I enjoyed this story, but I think you could use the help of an editor or someone to look over it. You may not be able to see what isn't working yourself, and I think that will help in the future. If you already have one, you may need to find a better one. And nice work handling the trolls. I hope you continue to write, I think you have a lot of potential, and I look forward to seeing more work from you. Good luck.
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Anonymous12/13/16
liked it very much and voted as well for it.
Hello just read your latest story "Help Me, Mom!",and liked it very much and voted as well for it.
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Anonymous12/15/16
Zachary Taylor, my a$$
If you really believed her comments referenced a president from 150 years ago, then why did you say RECENT presidential election?
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Anonymous12/15/16
Me too!
I don't believe the Taylor comment either, but I read it as tongue-in-cheekz. I went back and re-read it and I don't see any solid reference to what year it is set in. Being a work of fiction, I'm OK with the possibilty of any year since electricity. It holds up nicely in the 2nd read and I can't wait to see how much Rach temps 'mom'. ;-))
Thanks for your thoughtful comments. I nearly left out the lit up Xmas tree just to expand the possible time frame, but my muse, in her wisdom, wouldn't let me. Now I know why. So MMMaybe it wasn't about Zach.
Someone commented that I didn't know what 'conservative' means. I realized he thought I meant politically not sexually conservative. Her comments were not political. There were 2 comments that should have made that clear:
Mom- "you saw me as a conservative old lady, "
Son- "Did my religious, conservative mom just curse?! "
'Mom' didn't make any POLITICAL comments, she made observations about someone's character and his proven lies. No more politics here. Enjoy the story.
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Anonymous12/26/16
lame
Keep politics out of your stories , if you dont you risk pissing off half your reader base every time , why limit yourself like that.
Typical Anonymous... no spine to back up his 'Lame' comment. So with your use of politics, I think it actually added dimension and realisim to your splendid story. It worked big-time and I look forward to the next episode.
fuck politics. it is a story so get over yourself.
if ya have nothing to contribute constructively or are just here to bad talk and down grade, it is far better to shut the fuck up and not show your iq ta be smaller than the pride of your anatomy
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Anonymous01/22/17
Nice story
Sorry there are no pictures to see. Just when i thought it was over, there was more. Then I'd think its over and yet more and more. It sure turned me on. Nicely done.
English
Mom
Aside from your mom's liberal political views , I thought it was a great story .
Laffin
Great story they won and still have issues .... SMDH
No poly tics here!
This is not a political forum or a political story. When my character SCREAMED her comments in my ear, I had to respect that. Let's just follow her son's advice and "Let it go." All future rabid comments will be deleted. Let's just get along.
Oh Mama!
I thoroughly enjoyed your story and hope you will continue expanding it. As an aside, the Drump reaction from Mom... priceless!
A Great Story
Well written. Waiting for next chapter. Thanks
Who's Rach?
Deleting the comment doesn't change the fact the name came out of nowhere.
HOT READ****
Very entertaining. Thanks for sharing,
Good story , but the politics was a bit much! Who is Rach?
IGNORE THE ADOLPH CHUMP CULTISTS
It's YOUR story write it YOUR way! If the CHUMP cult doesn't like what you've written, let em go elsewhere! All they do is whine about how nobody respects their hateful, bigioted, and racist NOT MY PRESIDENT! The story was good. I gave it arare 5 stars
Great story
I too don't like the political commentary. The story was great. Leave out you political views on next one please.
Who's Rach??
1- Since Sue called her to come join them, I left you to connect the dots that she was a CLOSE and intimate friend. She's also a recurring character in some of my other stories. We will see Rach with mom in a follow up story.
2- Poly tics: Mom didn't mention anyone's name or even his politics. In my mind, she was commenting on Zach Taylor, 12th President. He was a hero and worked hard to end slavery so I don't understand why she was so upset about him. She too is entitled to be wrong. Yeah, that's it, Zach.
You need to leave the politics out of your stories.
1- Since Sue called her to come join them, I left you to connect the dots that she was a CLOSE and intimate friend.
Sorry, uh uh.
First of all, it is immaterial whether things such as this are easy or hard to figure out. As the writer it is YOUR job to tell what is happening. It is not the readers' job to do, well, your job for you. This is the world you created. If you don't put it there, it doesn't exist.
The same applies to her saying she can't get pregnant. At her age, it's highly doubtful that it's because of menopause and not because she had her tubes tied, but without anything to back it up, the pregnant line is just a non sequitur.
Secondly, for people to know characters from other stories is very presumptuous on your part, that your stories are so great people automatically know details of seemingly unrelated stories.
to ANON - If you leave an email @, I can respond and continue this with you.
I know YOU probably won't see this, so for everyone else:
First, thanks for taking the time to make thoughtful comments.
"First of all, it is immaterial whether things such as this are easy or hard to figure out. As the writer it is YOUR job to tell what is happening. It is not the readers' job to do, well, your job for you. This is the world you created. If you don't put it there, it doesn't exist."
= That's a question of style. I have a few stories that lay it all out and I feel they are my weakest. I believe the best movies and stories are ones that leave you asking a few questions - usually 'WHAT IF?' My 'job' is to get you to react and think about the story. My least favorite movies /stories leave me cold, saying 'That's done...what now?' 'MY FRIEND SUE' is currently pending and it deliberately leads you to a fork where you have to decide which ending suits you better. I hope it also draws some strong emotions.
"The same applies to her saying she can't get pregnant. ..., but without anything to back it up, the pregnant line is just a non sequitur."
= Her comment was to her distraught son. She consoled him and showed him proof that she could not get pregnant. Her scar backs it up, so it fits and isn't a non sequitur. Do you need more than her word that the scar is real?
"Secondly, for people to know characters from other stories is very presumptuous on your part,...."
= OK, I'll give you that. Rach is in my head for the follow up, but YOU can't know that, so I'll stay aware and make it clearer. Thanks
Tut tut , Picky People !!
I loved your story , Very entertaining ! I prefer to read erotic stories than to watch films as it allows use of the imagination to make it a personal thing. The characters are perfect and the hint of things to come, with Rach, is titillating.
As for politics I don't give a toss either way.
I like anal and AtoA but balk at AtoM as it's so unhygienic. As for rimming I love to do that but it has to be very clean first.
It's good to read stories of incest with love as it should be, there are too many Rapey stories around at the moment for my liking. Keep up the good work, I will certainly read more of your stories.
Awesome story. Loved every minute of reading. Didn't even mind the bit at the end of you adding another character by name without any sort of introduction. (Though something, anything would've been nice). The only thing I didn't enjoy was the political rant in the beginning. This is a sexual story website, please leave political thoughts and rants where they belong- in political chatrooms/blogs and your own head. Other than that loved the story can't wait for a second one.
Get an editor
I enjoyed this story, but I think you could use the help of an editor or someone to look over it. You may not be able to see what isn't working yourself, and I think that will help in the future. If you already have one, you may need to find a better one. And nice work handling the trolls. I hope you continue to write, I think you have a lot of potential, and I look forward to seeing more work from you. Good luck.
liked it very much and voted as well for it.
Hello just read your latest story "Help Me, Mom!",and liked it very much and voted as well for it.
Zachary Taylor, my a$$
If you really believed her comments referenced a president from 150 years ago, then why did you say RECENT presidential election?
Me too!
I don't believe the Taylor comment either, but I read it as tongue-in-cheekz. I went back and re-read it and I don't see any solid reference to what year it is set in. Being a work of fiction, I'm OK with the possibilty of any year since electricity. It holds up nicely in the 2nd read and I can't wait to see how much Rach temps 'mom'. ;-))
For 'ME TOO' et al...
Thanks for your thoughtful comments. I nearly left out the lit up Xmas tree just to expand the possible time frame, but my muse, in her wisdom, wouldn't let me. Now I know why. So MMMaybe it wasn't about Zach.
Someone commented that I didn't know what 'conservative' means. I realized he thought I meant politically not sexually conservative. Her comments were not political. There were 2 comments that should have made that clear:
Mom- "you saw me as a conservative old lady, "
Son- "Did my religious, conservative mom just curse?! "
'Mom' didn't make any POLITICAL comments, she made observations about someone's character and his proven lies. No more politics here. Enjoy the story.
lame
Keep politics out of your stories , if you dont you risk pissing off half your reader base every time , why limit yourself like that.
Politics in Erotica - Yes
Typical Anonymous... no spine to back up his 'Lame' comment. So with your use of politics, I think it actually added dimension and realisim to your splendid story. It worked big-time and I look forward to the next episode.
fuck politics. it is a story so get over yourself.
if ya have nothing to contribute constructively or are just here to bad talk and down grade, it is far better to shut the fuck up and not show your iq ta be smaller than the pride of your anatomy
Nice story
Sorry there are no pictures to see. Just when i thought it was over, there was more. Then I'd think its over and yet more and more. It sure turned me on. Nicely done.
B
Nice Story ???
WHAT!? No pictures? I have several in my copy...... ;-))
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