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So far, so good
I am really enjoying the storyline so far, but frankly the spelling is driving me crazy. You desperately need an editor to help you with that, because a spell-checker won't correct the mistakes you are making. That aside, I find the story very interesting, and with a lot of promise. Keep it coming!
Good plot
I like the plot, although you did make an error in
names in part 2 - went from Katherine to Rachael to Katherine again. (And by the way, you are freaking me out as Katherine is my name and Rachael is my niece's name) be that as it may, looking forward to more of this tale.
wow how did that get there!
I have no idea how that Rachael showed up instead of Katherine in my story. I don't even usually spell Rachael right. How very odd. Thanks for pointing that out.
who cares about her age changing
it's far worse when her name changes from Katherine to Rachel (first paragraph) and then back to Katherine.
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