What Had I Done Ch. 01

Sorry...not even funny...

Sorry...not even funny...Why continue? Wasn't it all said in this part? 1*

What had I done?

This should be in Exhibitionism.

Uh, we ALL know where this is going. How long before they are demonstrating the sex toys?

Why not save yourself a lot of embarrassment and just forget it. Or put it in the category where it belongs.

1* couldn't get past the first 2 sentences.

LOVED IT

Hope you add more parts .It is fun to see a normal guy let loose

2*

Two men Allen and Andrew confused me.

I really wanted to like this story, but you make it difficult.

Literally difficult: Your approach to punctuation seems to be, "Run on sentence, run on sentence, and hey, it's been a while since I used a comma. I guess I'll toss one in here. In the middle, of a sentence."

The reason people (specifically, me) complain about poor punctuation is that it actually MATTERS where you put those commas and periods and what-not. It matters because the meaning can be completely different, depending on where you break up a sentence with a period, a comma, a colon, etc., AND where you DON'T.

Skimming some of your other story submissions, I see shitty punctuation skills seems to be a constant with you. I'd really suggest you work on that.

Amazed by some of these comments.

Amazed by some of these comments. Surely we don't need punctuation nazis patrolling this site and those who are confused by two separate husbands sharing an initial should perhaps work through their confusion before commenting. I enjoyed this story almost as much as Allan....

More details, plesse.

I love CFNM stories and loved this one but I would have liked more datails across the sex scenes: how his swimsuit or underwear wss taken off, how he was groped by those hungry women, what each of them did, the very moment of cumming, etc. But, that said, the story is hot, sexy and gets me hopfuly interested.