All Comments on 'Girl with The Wind in her Hair'

Just sugar, no spice.

Very sensual but not slutty. Classy and entertaining. Love it! Hope you do more!

A pleasant story.

I suggest that you consider removing that first paragraph. It really does nothing to advance the story or capture interest. The second paragraph (Jason enters the party) is where the story really begins, and it would make a strong opening.

Apart from a couple of typing errors, taut is the wording that you we're looking for.

Thank you for describing a classy man that we can aspire to be more like. And a lovely young lady, yet unafraid to live her life.

very wonderful tale to make us all envious of his actions

I hate the petty bastards who always have to find something to pick at

because they do not have a pinch of your talent