Christmas Shopping in Fredericksburg

Swing and a Miss

It's not about the morality, it's the actual writing . Freewheel has done some competent and thoughtful stories before but here ' he ' writes in the female voice and it's just cringeworthy. This is an amateur site and it takes guts to submit a story. This experiment failed in my eyes , but perhaps reading female authors of accomplishment would help in next venture of this ilk. Good luck.

very believable...

it never takes long to have an interconnect.. or another way to look at it. Strike while the Iron is HOT thanks 4

Enjoyed Reading

I liked the story and gave it 5 stars.

Great first flash story.... Hope we can collaborate on a few more like it..!!

Excellent!

I love Fredericksburg, and your story is believable, albeit it fiction as noted in your preface. I love Christmastime there, and my fave eateries are Altdorfs (lunch) and Frank's (dinner). The wine bars are excellent, and I could easily imagine a horny woman getting fucked in the back room. Keep writing, and ignore the dicks who regularly show-up to trash stories and authors in the LW category. I'm sure impo, pallile, and one anon who makes multiple nasty posts will appear soon. Delete their comments.

Good story

It was a good descriptive story and kept me turned on.

Just too difficult to accept. But I appreciate the effort.

A guy who feels comfortable forcing himself on strange women in his bar, and this experienced married woman doesn't stop to think where his cock has been in the past few weeks, what he is depositing in her body, and what she may be passing on to her husband. The state of Maryland ranks 20th for its rate of Chlamydia and Gonorrhea. It ranks 5th for the rate of syphilis. How erotic is that?

Merry Christmas.

If she is that easy

It has happened before and will happen again, Jim knows her turn on and will tell others and set her up for his friends and customers. She will go shopping on her own during the year more and more often.... so I hope Tom gets a new wife for Christmas.... the old one can no longer be trusted..... good writing but I have a problem with weak willed sluts...I have worked with the destroyed lives they left in their wakes

Wretched

Right, she's going to just drop her drawers for a barman she just met with her husband right there, and her husband's not going to wonder why the barman didn't come right back after showing her where the restroom was.

For that matter, why would restrooms in a bar need a guide to find!

Nice story!

My wife and I have been to Fredericksburg several times, unfortunately without the excitement of your imaginary visit. Your story makes us want to visit again, and hit the wine tasting a little more aggressively. Hope to read more "reality based" stories from you... perhaps an erotic encounter at Hippie Hollow?

She gets turned on easy

Your fictional wife gets turned on easy and cums at the drop of the hats. Wish it was that easy for me. Maybe I'm not fucking the right barman. Still a good story, I enjoyed.

As a resident of Fredericksburg it was fun to read a story set here. Thank you!

Come on, don't make fun of Freewheel for being a shitty writer, he can't help it.