All Comments on 'Giants Wrestled'

...premise and pulled off with a fine 'war of words'. Very interesting and very enjoyable.

the giants were peace lovers and just got carried away having sex. Thanks for the fresh look!

the geological battle as it creates beauty out of the chaos. An interesting metaphor. One thing that grabbed me here was all the "ing"s. I think if you modify some of the words to a present tense it would make all this action that much more powerful: consider

"Arms and knees gouging the ground

as they rolled across its floor

thrashing"

Arms and knees gouge the ground

as they roll across its floor

thrashing...

and:

"spit drooling from their lips

from their exertion

sweat weeping from their pores"

spit drools from their lips

from their exertion

sweat weeps from their pores...

Try those few changes and change any past tense to present and see what you think. I think it will make the words more forceful.

An excellent poem here...

jim : )

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