Turn Around and Do as I Say

Good overall

This doesn't have a bdsm feel to it. Nothing bad about posting it here, but there is an Anal category that might appreciate it even more. The begining was first person then you abruptly switched to third person. That felt odd.
Female feedback? I'm not into screaming and yelling, in RL or stories. I find it to be eye rolling melodrama. Kills my lady wood. The scene was interesting as it is. To me, it would have been hotter with begging that wasn't screamed. On the plus side, you used only words and a few exclamation points to show that - no caps lock abuse. :)