Produce Man's Big Meat Ch. 01

Oh dear....

Wonder what is going to happen next....

Just Guessing

You're about 17, right?

It started not good but acceptable

But someone flushed it down the crapper when and I quote, "Honestly I have fantasies to see my wife take a bigger man than me."
Don't you know the definition of fantasy.

Please do everyone in the story and the readers, with any brain power, a break. Don't ruin your reputation with a Big Meat 02 unless she up and leaves her dickhead husband taking him for all he has and then some. He is one guy who deserves the Burn The Bastard ending. you wrote a well earned 1 I wish I could have given a 5 but there are no minus stars available

I agree with some comment...

I agree with some comment...I also thought this would be a shitty story when I read: "Honestly I have fantasies to see my wife take a bigger man than me."! But it could have been different if when the husband returned home, found all his belongings outside and a sign in the door saying: "See you in court for the divorce"! That was what any normal woman would have done! But no such luck...It was even shittier than we could thought...So as some comment said: Make us a favor and save us from the following parts...1* (Where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

Pubescent teen dream??!!!MINUS 5*!!!

What a bunch of crap!!!

I hope you keep writing. Many people, including me, want to read the rest of the story.
I gave you a high vote.

thanks

At least it has some sex and a loving wife.Thats why I come here.

Ugh.

That was disgusting. The only reason to write a story like this is for hot sex. This didn't have any. Let's see, a fat ugly guy who works in a grocery store with a giant dick. Well, as long as the dick is giant, that's sexy as hell, right? In whose mind? Sounds like something Swingerjoe would write. Stupid story about stupid characters, by a stupid writer. Maybe five really weird people want to see part 2.

Has every writer on her gone fag on us

Man up and write something worth reading. This shit sucks

I can understand

That some men would like to read about a woman reduced to a sex object, What I think is unbelievable is that any woman would like this shit. Unless that woman is a man using a woman aka.

Good story

FYI, the multiple, ugly anon comments are made by one person. And, impo and pallile show up to trash every LW story. Discounting them, your critiques are pretty favorable. Keep writing.

re: Good story

"FYI, the multiple, ugly anon comments are made by one person. And, impo and pallile show up to trash every LW story. "

More precisely, you seem to show up to trash anyone who dares have an opinion that's different from yours.

BTW, this site seems to use cookies or IP addresses to track comments. This means once you post an anonymous comment, you can't post another from that IP address. The only way around that I've seen is using onion routing (e.g., Tor browser).

OK - So he wants to see her with a bigger dick. Fine, what are the consequences of that?
If you do a flow chart of this guess what hubby is down to a 20 to 25$ of fucking her on a routine basis a 5% chance of walking away with a happy monogamous marriage. That gives a 70 - 75% chance of just getting nothing all the way to divorce.
If she finds that he approves chance of marriage improves, chance of keeping respect goes to zero.

Interesting!

You have selected a very popular story line for LW even if many readers get their kicks telling writers how bad they are--to each his own.

I suggest you spend a lot more time poof reading and check out your POV. You started husband's 1st person POV and switched to 3rd person (apparently limited) viewpoint.THAT'S A BIG NO NO, good buddy.

Before you start, decide who will tell the story, what tense (for God's sake, make it either 1st or 3rd and past tense) and stick with it. Don't switch mid-story.

Good Luck and keep writing.

Woof!

Hot stuff! Keep it up, plz!

Ultimate disguise: hat, beard and sunglasses

Hahahaha.

Hey at least this was funny. Most of these repressed homosexual fantasies are stunningly dull.

Great stuff

Been a while since I've read this kind of stuff. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Loved it

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Can't wait

Next chapter would be a lot of fun.

1*

cuck shit.

5*

Ignore the haters.

love itmy

My wife will get a suprise shortly. Have to put a plan togethet

Needs Work

I like the idea of a well-endowed, ugly, "lesser man" taking a trophy wife in a moment of weakness, or as a result of some strange sexual energy that lures her to the act. Having said that, to make this work you need to add detail to several important scenes in order to allow the reader to suspend his disbelief...your pacing was too fast, with too few details given to set up each important scene. Dressing up in a "disguise from a high school play" including a beard and sunglasses was just...laughable. It would be far better to have the husband just carefully spy on his wife. No need for the disguise. In that case, the disguise actually makes the story less believable. Setting up the meeting also needed a lot of detail. No wife is going to accept that story (old high school buddy) especially after she expressed that she hates the guy. Leaving the house after he is there didn't work. You have the husband peering into the window from the outside, but then you narrate the dialogue word-for-word as if you are in the room. First/third person perspective problems. Take more time to edit your stories and they will improve. Also, you can delete individual comments that are made to your stories.

Awesome

Can't wait for the next chapter. Hurry up !

continue please!!!!!!