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Single clergy have feelings too
Been there, did that. Love is really weird when you wear a collar. The world looks, judges, and still doesn't quite accept that you are human after all and when you finally do act as a human does . . .
Thank you for going there. You have a special gift.
Very enjoyable.
Will there be any more chapters? I hope so.
There will be a sequel
Thanks to the two anonymous comments and to answer one there will be a sequel to this story as I feel these characters are intriguing and I do want to know more about where they go next. Stay tuned!
Biblical
An amazing story,,, loved it,,, would love it to continue
Ver, very good!
A wonderful story; well written and a totally original plot! I do hope there's more of this story! Thank you!
Wow
Your writing is what I crave to read. i look for you and I am truly becoming a big fan of your work. Your characters are always so intelligent and sexy. Great great job, I'll be looking forward to your next piece of writting.
Blown away
If I could remember my password I wouldn't be anon. That was simply beautiful. It was crafted brilliantly with wonderful characterisation. Thank you. I am excited by the prospect of the sequel. Rheged6
Pretty Good
I like that you take the time to set the scene and explore thoughts, feelings and motivations. Your writing is very enjoyable.
Just one piece of constructive criticism if I may. You sometimes switch the POV of the story, and you often use a whole series of pronouns in the same paragraph. Basically if I have to stop reading and go back in the story to figure out whether it was Janine who has just had her blouse unbuttoned, or it was Janine doing the unbuttoning then that takes me out of the moment, ruins the flow of the story and makes the whole experience less satisfying.
Keep it up.. I will definitely keep an eye open for more of your work.
Promising
This is a promising story with an interesting theme although it tends to be a little jerky in parts. And some of your punctuation could do with some careful editing. While reading the story I had decided to comment on your excessive use of pronouns (in places it was hard to determine who was speaking/acting) and I see that the previous comment had picked up on the same thing (again, careful editing could overcome this problem---there are plenty of ways you could get round the constant use of 'she' and 'her'). But I'm sufficiently taken with the story to look forward to Chapter 2.
If fictional Kate does hand her property to a refugee family she will be doing better than many real-life politicians/celebrities who have very publicly made the same promise but have failed to come across.
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