The rule is the bigger penis or tits are then less points. More believable is easier to read than fairy tales. They are fantasy but as near reality as possible, please.
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Anonymous12/13/16
4 Stars!
It easily could have been 5 Stars - IF not for the typos.
But keep writing, you have talent, just need to refine it a little. (& maybe a proof-reader)
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Anonymous12/13/16
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My only criticism is the story is too damn short. Other than that good start to a sexy incestuous series.
my favorite part was this: Jack thought about this for a moment, then looked her in the eyes.
"Do you love her?"
"Yes. We love each other completely. She means everything to me."
"Then I don't have a problem. I'm happy for you both."
"Thanks Jack." She exclaimed,
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The rule is the bigger penis or tits are then less points. More believable is easier to read than fairy tales. They are fantasy but as near reality as possible, please.
4 Stars!
It easily could have been 5 Stars - IF not for the typos.
But keep writing, you have talent, just need to refine it a little. (& maybe a proof-reader)
More
My only criticism is the story is too damn short. Other than that good start to a sexy incestuous series.
looking forward to Fern getting that cock
Nice story, short and to the point, looking forward to the next instalment
Keep it up..
favorite part
my favorite part was this: Jack thought about this for a moment, then looked her in the eyes.
"Do you love her?"
"Yes. We love each other completely. She means everything to me."
"Then I don't have a problem. I'm happy for you both."
"Thanks Jack." She exclaimed,
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