Working Under the Neighbor

Sucked the big one

Just about as bad as a story could possibly be. Every stupid fucking cliche in the book in this one. Really, just the worst.

i agree this sucked

verry stupid plot

HOT!!

Loved it! part 2?

How less of a man could he possibly be

Obviously you get off of making a weak willed, submissive male the focus of your plot. That's fine as you can write whatever you want. However the story has no redeeming charactures whatsoever which makes it difficult to involve reality to any degree.
From whose angle are we expected to follow the plot? You dither from each of the three and then introduce a forth. Illogical.

You deserve a very painful cancer

1*

Offbeat

I don't mind offbeat themes if they have something to say but this is just an excuse for girl on girl sex. Why would you imagine that Loving Wives readers would be interested?

I second Twentyseven's comment.

What an idiotic bunch of cuck crap!!! MINUS 5*!!!

That author has to be a brain sick people or an ugly old bag!!! That cuckold/wimp crap is only for perverts to wank off!!!

Dont bother reading

# 1

Dysfunctional?

Perhaps the John and Jan should consider their lifestyle as a reason their daughter is fucked up. There is no believable happy ending to this story.

Definitely

should have been in the Humour & Satire section; or maybe Erotic Couplings; or maybe Incest/Taboo. Still hilarious.

Only a mentally ill person could post this garbage.

Emotionally ill, also. Definitely intellectually challenged.

Denial

A repressed homosexual fantasy. Wants his woman to be taken away by a "manly" muscular woman.

The incest at the end simply highlights the author's ambivalence towards women.

Well-written and weird isn't bad

But when you throw in some incest for laughs, it is time to consider the category. You have a lesbian relationship with a loving wife and so arguably it fits in this category, even a clever twist on the cuckold genre, but when you add incest to the mix it then goes over the line. That puts it in the incest category. Please move this or put future installments in that category if you are going to continue with the slut wife incest subplot. 2* for springing that on me.

Addressing Some Of The Feedback

I'd like to address a few of the points brought up as far as some of the comments made on this story. I'm not going to nuke anyone's opinion as I feel if you take the time to write it, you must feel pretty strongly in the right. However, I've run afoul of the Your Kink Is Not My Kink crew before so:

Choice of category. All the subjects broached in this story are tagged themes within the category. If you search for stories by tags, which I often do, you'll find that the Loving Wives category has ample examples of all of the elements presented in the story, whereas if I had posted it under the Lesbian category it would have rained hellfire for having at dick in it. Really. Go into the tags in this category and, for instance, incest probably has 30 to 40 stories represented there. On to the story.

First of all, the original idea was to pen an alternative to the classically stereotypical BBC Cuckold stories that abound here and on other sites. The twist, correctly surmised by a commenter is that the Bull in this case is a Woman rather than a Man. This part of the story is loosely based on a couple we've known for five or six years wherein she decided in her late forties after family and all, to experiment with a woman, and she quickly came to the conclusion that she A. was lesbian, but B. still loved her husband and didn't want to leave him. Dysfunctional? In some ways yes, in other ways you wouldn't pick them out as such unless you knew as they're very close to each other in conventional non-sexual ways.

A second element that some have trouble with is the wife being "marked" by the Bull. However I know one woman personally who is tattooed as such and has only had sex with Black males for around 9 years or so, which her husband knows and approves of. Again. Dysfunctional? Probably for most of us. Seems to work okay for them although they are both pretty high strung to begin with.

Finally the incest element. Yeah, I probably should have left this one out, but I wanted to create and entree for a potential continuation. The fact that the loving wife is the primary instigator of this I didn't feel created an inconsistency with the genre. The idea was one that was actually the reverse of a young woman we've known for several years, who's sister's girlfriend convinced her to have sex, which led to a relationship which included both sisters, and eventually the mother as well. Granted the parents were swingers prior to all this, and none of it happened under age. But it did happen for reals. Dysfunctional? Again...yeppers, but it seems to work for them, although they all seem to view sex more as activity rather than as a means of achieving emotional intimacy.

So Geezums. I understand the push back, but cut me some slack. It's FICTION. It's a second person narrative from the viewpoint of the husband, with included first person dialogue brought in to allow some of the other character's to augment the story with their own viewpoints....Ya know....kinda like Charles Dickens used to do (not that I'm that caliber a writer). The story is twisted, but the character's I think are all genuinely engaged in mostly healthy ways with each other, which is a big point to make here, as I look around and see folks who won't cross the lines of convention social mores and would rather live in stagnant relationships where the passion has flatlined rather than having to try and explore things. YMMV

Wow what horrifying characters!

This is the most perfect humiliation of a husband and a father that I have read. Besides you gave it all away in two lead-in paragraphs.

Not my cup of tea

NdP, I read your response to postings and see your point of view. For me this story was too far afield my reading pleasure.
Let's see, you've covered in one story, Loving Wives, BSDM, Incest/Taboo, Interacial and I'm sure one or two more I've left out. I believe that without too much trouble you could work in a Gay Male being dropped into the scene by aliens and all becoming swingers with the Mature group.

I understood your original idea...

I understood the writer original idea to try to "pen an alternative to the classically stereotypical BBC Cuckold stories"...and it wasn't a bad idea...It had potential...But at some point he/she lost the track and the story derailed: 1st - The wife being "marked" by the Bull (in this case would have been by the Cow), but in this case the wife drift to be bi, not because her lover was a black woman, but because she was a woman! 2nd - "it wasn't long before the kids were aware that there was something a little unconventional going on between her and their mom" so what @rixels says is 100% accurate: "Perhaps the John and Jan should consider their lifestyle as a reason their daughter is fucked up"! 3rd - finally the incest touch...the pot was already full of cuckold, lesbian, fetishs (fisting, milking) so when the writer throw in the pot the incest the story spilled all over and lost any meaning at all...1*

Let's educate sandy the right way

Jan has for all purposes become a lesbian but partly bi and now she is teaching her daughter Sandy how to become a lesbian since Sandy is confused about her sexuality. Since Jan is teaching Sandy all about being a lesbian it should be her fathers duty to show his daughter the pleasure in having a real cock in her pussy and what it is like to be loved by a man. That way she can chose or lez or hetro or bi.

not realistic at all.

cant see this happening. I can see a divorce or a tragedy on the 6 o'clock news being reported.

WOW! Dare I say

I liked the story for the most part. I would have liked John to get to fuck Nikki! But I, as also the writer of this tale, know that there are (as trite as this sounds) different strokes for different folks. These people are all around you wherever you live. In most cases, you do not notice anything different about these folks. To most others, they appear just like other couples. I also have met and discovered the truth about some of these out-of-the-ordinary couples. So I'll admit I gave the story 5 stars and await the scorn of others, which shall supply me with good reasons to shake my head and enjoy a good laugh.

Too many sidetracks for this train to run.

Ive read the comments and agree, although this is a well structured story, it leaves too many holes and questions to be close to complete. I believe it should have been longer, maybe multi parted, but certainly two pages longer. The extra pages giving details only skimmed over, like how was it that this lezbian taught anyone how to give better head. (Deepthroating takes practice) Obviously another man was involved, but in what capacity? the ending also twisted the entire story and added additional confusion, seemingly in and attempt to offer something for everyone, but missing the mark. I do give the author kudos for the atypical cuckolding, but any horny man in bed with a woman who has admitted to having been with men, and wanting to get pregnant would have insisted on fucking her himself. He wasn't portrayed as a sissy, only nieve or stupid. as to the daughter, is she confused or gay? Does mom want to foster her into lesbianism or experimentation, and with whom? Dad or the mystery male Nikki had to have been hiding?
Overall an ok read 3.5 stars, defiantly not a stroke story.

Cuckold

Men trying write from a woman's point of view just doesn't work, let alone from a lesbian's point of view. Try writing cuckold stories from the man's perspective.

Good story , but!

Would have loved to see more detail on Jan's seduction! It didn't just happen and the details could be exquisite!