The Observer

Not sure what to make of this

it is different, utilizing highly descriptive language and somewhat sinister and other worldly. But definitely a high quality piece for which I give 4*

@HIV

You're looking for reality here?

I guess you didn't like "The Twilight Zone" or "Star Wars" or "Raiders of the Lost Ark" either?

@sbrooks103x

There is a little unreality here. The difference is, this was meant to be here. All those Navy SEAL, super-spy, electronic wizard, assault everyone involved stories are unrealistic, but it's because they did it by accident. They didn't mean to be unrealistic, they just weren't good enough at writing to pull it off.

Faithful wife going to sloppy slut in an hour and cuckolding a man who was normal the day before? Talk about unrealistic, but it's by accident. They were going for realistic but didn't have the know how to get there.

This guy wrote something I think is spectacular with a haunted house. He did it on purpose. Real authors do things on purpose. Wannabes do it by accident. By the way, "HIV?" LOL, that's hilarious, dude.

Neatly done

I came late to reading the story after reading the multitude of favourable comments. A nicely-crafted story The comments were well deserved.

As others have said, WhatDreamsMayCome has provided readers with remarkable variety in just four stories. This one perhaps his best?

I stand in awe of this author's creativity.

Lue

Spellbinding story

This was riveting , certainly not something one would expect to find on a free erotica website .
To me , this author makes me think that we have a professional " ringer " amongst us ,Stephen King as some have said ? No in my mind this reads more like Dean Koontz straight from his " Book of Counted Sorrows " , which just so happens to be one of my guilty pleasures .
Whomever our newly arrived author is , professional who has a secret "sexy" alt , or just a very talented amateur , I certainly hope and pray ( that prayer is just to spite HIV) that he continues to share his wonderful creations with us . Top marks from me.

Imaginative

I thought this was neatly done and commendably brief but I don't believe in supernatural intervention so this does not do it for me.
Erotic Horror is probably your best bet.

Good Read***

Thanks for sharing.

Agree with last anon

This is too good, too polished to be just another guy.

This guy is someone with a huge writing background. I like the "sexy" alt theory. In that case, how embarrassing is it for a guy like Impo to be giving it a three. Imagine giving Dean Kontz a three!

I didn't expect to find this kind of quality here, either. I just read the stories and try to enjoy them, but this guy. There's something special. I read "Corporate Whores." Laptopwriter is right. This guy can write! "Corporate Whores" had me amazed at the amount of snark that had. I was chuckling all the way through. This sent the chills up my spine. What will the house do for an encore?

Amazing story. I gave it 5. Looking forward to more.

Brilliantly written

I am amazed at how much is inferred in such a short little tale of erotic horror. Others have praised the skill of the writer, I concur. Sparse, brief terse, evocative, and illustrative. The hints, asides, and inferences pull the reader in deeper and deeper till the whole scenario comes crashing down around the cheaters. The husband might not have been there, but they were not alone.

Okay

It is brilliantly written. A feel from a far distant style of writing. Something like Poe or some of the other Gothic writers of the 19th century.

Why do I get the sense of something even farther back "Even the trees and the rocks will shout out with voices "Here is a cheater, hiding behind me. Come and kill him!"

Except in this case, the house didn't need to yell. It took care of business itself.

quality

its worth all the thumbing through page after page of dross on this site to find a real writer of quality, and not just another semi-literate stroke merchant. well done

Guess I missed this yesterday

Reading what was posted today and then going back and finding this! What a beautiful little gem of a story.

Looking over the stories that get posted made me aware of how rare this story is. An author with a vocabulary! Someone who knows how to paint a picture with words. Someone who knows how to tell a story. This is rare, indeed. I agree with what Laptopwriter said. "This is a masterpiece," and I can't believe that it isn't somewhere up around 4.6 or 7. Just real quality writing. This is quality I would expect to see in some literary magazine. I hope you stick around and write many more stories. Thank you.

I'm up in mind of Poe's "A Cask of Amantillado" and similar stories. In this case,

the Supernatural awareness of the house, the weather and the space within combine in seemingly random events to settle the score for a betrayal as it progresses.
The finality of the answer is chilling and, as I said above, it leaves one feeling a little outside normal reality.
Thank you.
Please continue.

GREAT!

To all who have said LW just has the same old same old, who have asked for a story with imagination, here it is. This one is a solid 5!

To Harryin VA: Did you know you're mentioned in the Bible? It clearly says something like this, "The fool has said in his heart there is no God." Remember Tom Clancy's line--when you decide to kick the tiger in the ass, you better have a plan for dealing with his teeth.

Now this is how to write a story

If you're like me and don't read much over the weekend, don't miss this one. I was just scanning down the list and noticed I hadn't looked at this. Lots of people have made references to Poe, King, Kuntz, Hitchcock (I think).

That's not a joke. This guy is that good!!. I think it's like H.P. Lovecraft, or maybe Ambrose Bierce. That sense of brooding watchfulness was just powerful. I hope like hell you write more of this. If not, I'll look forward to reading something else by you, because you are a beast of a writer. Congrats.

Edgar Allan Poe would Love it. Keep at it.

@Anonymous Re; Unreality

I agree with you! I was disagreeing with Harry's criticism.

Re: HIV, hey, Harry chose the name, I'm sure it's not the first time he's seen it abbreviated like that!

Top marks

This is the best story posted here since, well, forever. Come on, it's like those other guys said. You're some sort of pro, slumming with us here on literotica, right? If not, you should me. This was freaking erotic twilight zone.

Looks like everyone likes this

So do I. Great story, imagination out the wazoo, a house that's awake, great writing, not a mistake anywhere in it, every word is the right word to make you see the picture. I don't know how it could be any better. Yes, I do, come to think of it. Tell the story of the great aunt the husband got the house from. Maybe how the place woke up. Are there more episodes? That's the only thing I think would improve this story. More stories. Or write a different one. I love everything you've written.

A perfect story

They do not get much better than this.

Very different

very good.

Masterful!!!

Lord! Finally, a story that's worth paying without a thought. This is the best written story of the year for the LW section. Technically, superbly constructed, full of allegories, with the correct words for each sentence to bring out the the scenes to the fore conveying the contrasting duality of the cold fury of the house versus the hot passion of the lovers. Undoubtedly, this author is a pro. The scene of the statue of cupid with the tip of the arrow piercing the cheating wife's breast is nothing but, short of masterful. I do agreed with some of the sentiments that their death is to easy of a punishment, a life of suffering and regrets works better to my likings.

I agree with nearly all the comments

I agree with @Carolinadreamer. I can't believe I just said that. I read these stories because of the drama. Unfortunately, day after day, you see the same old tired stories written. Plot after plot, exactly the same, whether it's cuck stories all the way over to BTB and RAAC. Just change the names and places and you've got the same old tired stuff. Then, something as fucking amazing as this comes along. It's like life gets pumped back into the place.

All the people, like me, who moan and bitch about the same old shit being written, this isn't the same old shit. Maybe this guy can keep up the amazing variety he's given us, maybe not. For now, this is, for me, the best story in this category, the freshest, for 2016. I wish I could give it ten stars. I don't know who down votes it, but you need to fucking stop. I want this guy around!

You seem to be the exception

Most of these writers seem to have to write stories that piss people off to get this many comments. You seem to write stories that people love so much that they comment. I guess that's the difference between a real author and people who just write. From looking at your stories, you seem to get a 100 comments on a regular basis. Ninety five percent of them are positive. You're doing something right,

This story was, as the last comment said, a work of art. I've not read better writing on here, anyway. Even the guys that usually piss all over other authors love this story. This is how it should be done. Great story, great author. Keep then coming.

hello

i must say a superb way of story please wright more i love to read your work

A True Story Teller

Excellent! All three characters were beutifully created: the woman, the man and the house.

UNIQUE

Excellent writing

Awesome

It's just too bad they didn't suffer longer. Great job