Your writing is rather choppy but I attribute that to my suspicion that you're not completely fluent in English. The STORY line is new to me, and I read a lot, so you're what I call an "original" writer. I like your innocence and your ability to tell a tale. You don't have to use street slang ~ like "what the fuck" ~ because your story isn't a street story and you have words in your "native" language that would help with the lingo/lango barrier. Look up definitions or get a thesaurus for assistance. You can do this. It "is" as complex as rocket science ~ but you can still do it. Tell us more stories.
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Your writing is rather choppy but I attribute that to my suspicion that you're not completely fluent in English. The STORY line is new to me, and I read a lot, so you're what I call an "original" writer. I like your innocence and your ability to tell a tale. You don't have to use street slang ~ like "what the fuck" ~ because your story isn't a street story and you have words in your "native" language that would help with the lingo/lango barrier. Look up definitions or get a thesaurus for assistance. You can do this. It "is" as complex as rocket science ~ but you can still do it. Tell us more stories.
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