Wow, what I wouldn't have given to have had a mommy like this. Although I would have been happy to have traded the dom/sub relationship, depending on the whim of the day. Use and be used, that's my motto.
Although the plausibility of this story is nearly nonexistent, the fantasy of it, when looked at it that way, is fun and hot. What red blooded, horny young son wouldn't love to have an in-house cum dumpster in which he can unload his full, cum laden balls into, several times a day, especially when she is so willing to suck his sweet nut juice directly from its source.
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Anonymous12/22/16
Can't wait for more
Love the direction this series is taking. Let's see more!! And soon!
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Anonymous12/22/16
"Hurry Hurry Yum" YES !
Damn You Jaz,
You've done it again - YES ! Great plotline; beautifully erotic, explicit wordsmithing. I like the your suggested (working) titles and plot sequels with the exception of "Mommy returning to the gloryholes" and eagerly anticipate seeing them in print. Keep them cumming, please ! Small note: your editors are still permitting the use of the word "come" to slip through on occasion.
Best, Jack Auff / ON CAN
Great story, nicely written, I really enjoyed it. I chuckled when you used the phrase "personal alarm"... We think alike... https://www.literotica.com/s/my-personal-alarm-clo ck
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Anonymous12/23/16
Seriously?
This is just awful. I have read only a few of your stories, but it looks like you just write the same old crap. You use the same scenes. You use the same 'plots' if you can even call.them that. You even use the same words. OK, so you can form a complete sentence, which is more than many on this site can do. I know it's porn writing. I know it's free. But there's not an original bone in your body apparently. And yet all these people say you are awesome. Where is the one 'critique' guy who points out, "Oh you really write great stories, but?" No dummy, she really doesn't write great stories. She may have written ONE great story once, (maybe), but everything else is a cheap copy. Unoriginal crap after repeated tripe. If that is all you have got, this site is in trouble.
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Anonymous12/23/16
It's getting formulaic
I have liked some of your past work, but this is getting monotonous. The over use of double entendre is too much. "Park your Cadillac in my garage?" Srsly?
You set the standard for erotic fiction in this humble readers opinion. I cant wait for more in this genre. :) I humbly wait for more to read and to lose blood circulation to, so to speak...
Humbly Yours,
N
PS- I have a couple of ideas I wanted to talk to you about for a possible story, if youre not busy?
This is one of your best series and I wish you could turn every one of those sequel idea into a great story. You should make a choose your own adventure story, lol. Thanks for your work.
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Anonymous12/25/16
Losing your way
I am a great admirer of yours and many of your stories and so it gives me sorrow to say that I agree with the previous commentator, although I might have used kinder language. You have great talent in this genre and don't need to rehash old stories constantly, which is starting to happen more often. I wonder if you are trying to write too many and so it is not easy to generate new ideas all the time. Your key qualities are perception, originality, imagination and subtle innuendo - this story has little if any of those. Please, please for all our sakes including yours, write a little less and then only when the muse has really visited you.
Dialogue is painful to read and the same story after story
Your stories are all the same. Try something different. Resist urge to write the clever dialogue. It is painful to read. Describe more of the action, or what is in their heads.
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Anonymous02/07/17
Hot as f---
Love these stories!! Keep us cumming!! Any stories of a mom who likes to watch her son jerk off and get sprayed?
English
DRAWINGS
My dear, if possible for the rest of the episodes please illustrate. your stories then just hotter and hotter!!!! Wonderful writing keep it going!!!
This just keeps getting better.
Wow, what I wouldn't have given to have had a mommy like this. Although I would have been happy to have traded the dom/sub relationship, depending on the whim of the day. Use and be used, that's my motto.
Nerds are annoying to read
Can you do a cool son story instead of a nerd, the stammering the nervousness is irritating.
Fun fantasy
Although the plausibility of this story is nearly nonexistent, the fantasy of it, when looked at it that way, is fun and hot. What red blooded, horny young son wouldn't love to have an in-house cum dumpster in which he can unload his full, cum laden balls into, several times a day, especially when she is so willing to suck his sweet nut juice directly from its source.
Can't wait for more
Love the direction this series is taking. Let's see more!! And soon!
"Hurry Hurry Yum" YES !
Damn You Jaz,
You've done it again - YES ! Great plotline; beautifully erotic, explicit wordsmithing. I like the your suggested (working) titles and plot sequels with the exception of "Mommy returning to the gloryholes" and eagerly anticipate seeing them in print. Keep them cumming, please ! Small note: your editors are still permitting the use of the word "come" to slip through on occasion.
Best, Jack Auff / ON CAN
another great one
well they just keep coming . can't wait for more , they all look like more great stories but I expect nothing less from you keep up the great work.
PS: ave a great christmas
Nicely written
Great story, nicely written, I really enjoyed it. I chuckled when you used the phrase "personal alarm"... We think alike... https://www.literotica.com/s/my-personal-alarm-clo ck
Seriously?
This is just awful. I have read only a few of your stories, but it looks like you just write the same old crap. You use the same scenes. You use the same 'plots' if you can even call.them that. You even use the same words. OK, so you can form a complete sentence, which is more than many on this site can do. I know it's porn writing. I know it's free. But there's not an original bone in your body apparently. And yet all these people say you are awesome. Where is the one 'critique' guy who points out, "Oh you really write great stories, but?" No dummy, she really doesn't write great stories. She may have written ONE great story once, (maybe), but everything else is a cheap copy. Unoriginal crap after repeated tripe. If that is all you have got, this site is in trouble.
It's getting formulaic
I have liked some of your past work, but this is getting monotonous. The over use of double entendre is too much. "Park your Cadillac in my garage?" Srsly?
MORE SEQUELS
I HAVE ENJOYED MANY OF YOUR STORIES, ESPECIALLY ANY THAT INVOLVE MOM DOING SONS, SONS FRIENDS ROAD TRIPS ETC. KEEP ADDING SEQUELS, PLEASE!!!!
The Master has blew another one out of the park!
You set the standard for erotic fiction in this humble readers opinion. I cant wait for more in this genre. :) I humbly wait for more to read and to lose blood circulation to, so to speak...
Humbly Yours,
N
PS- I have a couple of ideas I wanted to talk to you about for a possible story, if youre not busy?
Another Great One!
This is one of your best series and I wish you could turn every one of those sequel idea into a great story. You should make a choose your own adventure story, lol. Thanks for your work.
Losing your way
I am a great admirer of yours and many of your stories and so it gives me sorrow to say that I agree with the previous commentator, although I might have used kinder language. You have great talent in this genre and don't need to rehash old stories constantly, which is starting to happen more often. I wonder if you are trying to write too many and so it is not easy to generate new ideas all the time. Your key qualities are perception, originality, imagination and subtle innuendo - this story has little if any of those. Please, please for all our sakes including yours, write a little less and then only when the muse has really visited you.
Dialogue is painful to read and the same story after story
Your stories are all the same. Try something different. Resist urge to write the clever dialogue. It is painful to read. Describe more of the action, or what is in their heads.
Hot as f---
Love these stories!! Keep us cumming!! Any stories of a mom who likes to watch her son jerk off and get sprayed?
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