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Nice first post, Wicked. Definitely continue this. There are a few things that aren't my specific thing, but the overall effect of the scene is a great set up. You do an excellent job using her pov to pull the reader in. The precarious balance of excitement, lust, frustration and irritation is wonderful. Consent is apparent throughout without interfering with the action. That is important. In future chapters, be careful that Master's teasing and taunting don't overwhelm the other elements. That would turn him into simply a jerk.
Thank you very much for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed it :) I will definitely keep your advice in mind when writing future chapters! Thanks a bunch.
Really great intro!
Mmmm this was a lot of fun to read! Quite well written :)))
Waiting for the next installment
I liked this as far as it goes. There are a couple of elements in it that I am not fond of, but not everyone likes the same things or everyone's lives would be boring. Not everyone in any sexual realm likes the same things, just because a couple of things are in the story that I am not fond of does not make the story bad. The only comment I have is it has left us hanging and I hope we don't have to wait too long to see what else transpires. I think given it was short you did reveal how the submissive was feeling although for the most part, I think she was enjoying what was happening,
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