Editor, editor and editor. Read your story out loud to yourself a few times.
You've messed up some tenses and perhaps a few typos here and there.
You did let your readers know this would be short.
I would not consider this long enough to be a chapter.
I'm getting a hint that English may not be your first language because of sentence structure and wording.
I do look forward to seeing where you go with this.
English
Just a few things....
Editor, editor and editor. Read your story out loud to yourself a few times.
You've messed up some tenses and perhaps a few typos here and there.
You did let your readers know this would be short.
I would not consider this long enough to be a chapter.
I'm getting a hint that English may not be your first language because of sentence structure and wording.
I do look forward to seeing where you go with this.
More please!!!
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