Getting Mom Naked

gmn

fair story, but lose, "the end".n If you've written the story properly, we'll know.
That's ten-year old stuff.

It's a start and of course his Mom later on; may be thinking things over, like his cock is big and his balls too plus his general physique. Maybe his Mom might even get aroused and after calming down; might want to explore his body for her own needs? Many possibilities too. Especially if she is horny. Hopefully, something good will come from her son's clumsy initial efforts. Thanks.

Run On Sentences!

Dude! You've got some PARAGRAPHS that are just one, long, run on sentence. And by the end of the paragraph, your readers have forgotten the beginning! That's a JV mistake. Your second mistake (admittedly, this is more of a personal opinion) is the abrupt (and arguably pointless) ending. So, he made his mom strip before letting her enter the bathroom to piss? And so she pisses, and leaves, and... that's it? And this is "Incest/Taboo"? More like "Exhibitionism/Voyeurism".

Now, if he'd begun to experience an erection while his naked mom was watching, and if she had commented on it? That's progressing a storyline, AND getting closer to incest than two naked people looking at one another. So, let's say she comments on his growing erection and obligingly opens her legs further, giving him a better view and a reason to become fully erect. THEN, she might have informed him his punishment was due for being such a jerk, and ordered him to lay across her lap for a spanking. With both of them nude, she might trap his erect penis between her thighs, which would afford him the opportunity to pump that erect penis between those thighs with each blow, until he cums all over his mom's legs.

And THAT would have given his mom a reason to join him in his bath, which would have let things continue...

But instead, what we got was "He made her strip, then he watched her piss, and then she left". Oh, and "THE END", for those who didn't realize the story was over.

Junior Varsity, all the way. You don't seem to be ready for the Varsity team yet, kid. Maybe you should hold off on erotica until you've got some more "personal experience" in sexual matters. You think?

Please continue!!

You have a flair for good story telling. It cannot be the end! Is there any tension between them afterwards? Is the tension going to be resolved, if there is? I would like to see how you get us there without forcing the story to make it happen, unnaturally.
Thank you once again for a good read.

Epiphany Jones W.T.F.

Go back under your rock in L.W. and leave us alone here.You yourself made three mistakes in your comments trying to tell another writer how you would do it.GOD,Get a LIFE.

Why do....

British writers always seem to write like they are gay?

Shitty story

Your story is one long piece of shit!

not incest

this is not incest there was no sex at all

Wrong Catagory

This should be under exhibitionist and voyeur. The ending sucks. What happened over the next week besides you wanking all the time? To make it a good story, play it out and get down and dirty.

I believe that she really showed her pussy for cock teasing revenge. Hewill be pissed off that he seen her pussy and cant get any. He shoukl tell his dad that she showed her pussy. She will say that she had to , to keep pissing on herself. Her husband should say justpiss on yourself then. The kick the son's ass out. The pervert sob. He tells his mother that he will fuck her sister if she doesn't relent to let him back in to the house & her pussy. She relents.

Real story my ass!

Lame! *

I Loved it !!!!!

Seriously that is a swell story keep it up ....so to speak

Huh?

Total non erotic no incest crap. Any follow up could only be worse. Please stop writing this drivel.

Ugh

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Unreadable

Horrible grammar and sentence structure. So bad I only skimmed, errors everywhere.

Stupid

Go On With It

Keep on with the story. Develope on how he schemes to see her naked again. Maybe he gets into the clothes hamper to check out her underwear and sniff her panties. She catches him and the story goes on...

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You cheeky little shit! You deserved a thumping.

take the cake

I've read some dumb stories here, with some dumb methods for the guy to get his mother naked or interested in having sex with him, but this may be the dumbest.

Why doesn't the mother just force her way into the bathroom once he's unlocked the door? Because if she did then there wouldn't be a story, so the author had to make her so stupid that she would stand there, desperate to urinate, but unwilling to push her way into the bathroom, in the house that she owns (at least more than the son does). Dumb, dumb, dumb.

And what 18 year old guy is having a bath???

A complete waste of my time.