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Knight has Fallen Ch. 02

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by theelovely1glo12/30/16

Hilarious...

Great start; but, check subject/verb agreement and homophones.
Looking forward to the intensity and sparks...

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by bwwm4me01/04/17

Great ideas, just need fine tuned.

i have read all the stories you submitted. You have some good ideas, and with a bit of care they can be developed into something great. But you do need to work on a few things. If i may suggest, running them by one of the editors to polish them up a bit would eliminate most of the problems. Like i said, the ideas are there and should be developed into something great.

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by greenconstant01/24/17

Clean it Up

I love the idea of this, but I am getting confused with all the POV switches. There is also verb and word agreement. I would suggest getting an editor, so they can help polish your fabulous ideas. But I love Aiden's character

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