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a bit...
of an abrupt ending but nice anyways
I'm glad you added another chapter
.... any more?
It was
Ok
I have to agree with "of an abrupt ending but nice anyways"
Especially for two factors.
The first was that the Samantha/Jessica interaction seemed a little out of left field. I guess this could have been covered by adding something along the lines of Sam telling him that she felt she had to rectify things and it was a spur of the moment actions.
The big one was that it seems the son was complete forgotten. Him being around was a big factor in the previous chapters, Couple that with the part about Jessica wanting the bedroom door open, and I have to wonder when they had the opportunities for, "Over the next few months, we made love regularly..."
It's as if you wanted to end the story ASAP.
Not a great ending
Chapter 2 was sexy as hell. Chapter 3 was hurried and didn't make much sense.
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