Your story got me so wet. I've wanted to get my stepdad to fuck me too. Teased him for years, but still nothing. I'm stacy18_bi at Hotmail. Hit me up if you want another sexy stepdaughter to fuck with.
I apologize for the lack of dialogue, but, the story didn't really call for a lot. I would also like to say, this is my very first attempt at writing anything, so, I do appreciate any and all feedback, and will use it to write better in the future, thank you.
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Anonymous12/30/16
Fantastic
Would have been a little better if he had let her know he was awake while she was straddling him!
Loved this - brilliant first story. The timing for me was perfect- the right amount of build up and anticipation. There are just a few editing issues with past/present tense and some minor grammatical mistakes but nothing that took me out of the story/mood.
I have to say the 'no dialogue' comment made me chuckle. The guy was pretending to be asleep! What scope for dialogue is there?
I enjoyed it a lot, so thanks from me (and my very wet and freshly satisfied nether regions).
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Anonymous12/31/16
Fanfuckingtastic !
Great for your first time out ! Really enjoyed it. You should continue with this story. You certainly seem to have a knack for it..
I was totally into this hot story, sure it's pure fantasy, but a very hot one.
I was more surprised that this was a first submission, but I certainly hope, not the last.
So please submit more of your stories, either with new ones, or continue this story.
My only disappointment, was seeing, it end. Was hoping for a Chapter two,
I see from the other comments, I'm not alone, so please carry on, I can hardly wait, for more from you.
This step father is jerking off in his living room? Seriously? Then, he doesn't realize that his dick was hard when he only partially pulled up his underware? Finally, he puts a pillow over his head to look like he's sleeping? Who does that?
It doesn't much matter what you post here, some readers will love anything that gets their nut off. Try to do better the next time of give it up.
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Anonymous01/23/17
No!
What an awkward fucker (and writer)! She should have used the pillow to suffocate the moron--after she bit his dick for playing like he was asleep!
I can't believe some of the crap people post here. After one has read several of these stories, they become monotonous. It's like all the authors are using the same formular. Most are boring, few show any real creativity.
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Anonymous02/23/17
wow...
"I'm 7 ½ inches and a little over 3 inches around."
No, you're not.
English
Hot story.....dad
Your story got me so wet. I've wanted to get my stepdad to fuck me too. Teased him for years, but still nothing. I'm stacy18_bi at Hotmail. Hit me up if you want another sexy stepdaughter to fuck with.
No dialog and this reads like a users manual.
Great story! Can't wait to hear more
It'll be really hot if he got her pregnant. While she was trying to be sneaky. 🔥
No Dialogue...
I apologize for the lack of dialogue, but, the story didn't really call for a lot. I would also like to say, this is my very first attempt at writing anything, so, I do appreciate any and all feedback, and will use it to write better in the future, thank you.
Fantastic
Would have been a little better if he had let her know he was awake while she was straddling him!
was she a virgin? tight
will you continue? please do
Well damn
That's one hell of a start for a first story! You sir, are bookmarked. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Hold tight
Any guy that could stay quiet and not participate in that show is unnatural.
Loved this - brilliant first story. The timing for me was perfect- the right amount of build up and anticipation. There are just a few editing issues with past/present tense and some minor grammatical mistakes but nothing that took me out of the story/mood.
I have to say the 'no dialogue' comment made me chuckle. The guy was pretending to be asleep! What scope for dialogue is there?
I enjoyed it a lot, so thanks from me (and my very wet and freshly satisfied nether regions).
Fanfuckingtastic !
Great for your first time out ! Really enjoyed it. You should continue with this story. You certainly seem to have a knack for it..
Well written and Erotic
I was totally into this hot story, sure it's pure fantasy, but a very hot one.
I was more surprised that this was a first submission, but I certainly hope, not the last.
So please submit more of your stories, either with new ones, or continue this story.
My only disappointment, was seeing, it end. Was hoping for a Chapter two,
I see from the other comments, I'm not alone, so please carry on, I can hardly wait, for more from you.
Was she a virgin?
You said she was very tight and he had to plunge into your cock. Was that here hymen or simply a tight pussy.
Great story! I really like the simple and concise writing.
Sorry, but...
This step father is jerking off in his living room? Seriously? Then, he doesn't realize that his dick was hard when he only partially pulled up his underware? Finally, he puts a pillow over his head to look like he's sleeping? Who does that?
It doesn't much matter what you post here, some readers will love anything that gets their nut off. Try to do better the next time of give it up.
No!
What an awkward fucker (and writer)! She should have used the pillow to suffocate the moron--after she bit his dick for playing like he was asleep!
I can't believe some of the crap people post here. After one has read several of these stories, they become monotonous. It's like all the authors are using the same formular. Most are boring, few show any real creativity.
wow...
"I'm 7 ½ inches and a little over 3 inches around."
No, you're not.
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