Best Friends Forever

You Could Have Saved Most of Us a Lot of Time

If you had just posted the lyrics to Jethro Tull's song Locomotive Breath.
Seems to capture the essence of this tale of sadness.
All time loser.
All time winner (and bff) with his woman.
Always being put upon by those who "love" him.
Decent writing, but this story was a crock to me and far, far to long. Low marks.

The product is on trial never the producer.

I read the story through to completion skimming only part of one chapter. I kept reading just what other calamity the author could dream up. What bothered me most with the writing in early chapters was the attempt to use inconsistent vocabulary. Some words were seemingly picked from a thesaurus amongst a much much lower a level of vocabulary. Good effort!

Thank God it's Over!

I have no idea how I got through a 30 page story. Sheer ornryness I guess. To say it had significant sections of pure tedium would be an understatement. Jimmy was clearly an asshole. Sure, he was betrayed by "best friend" and wife, but you have to move on, as all his "buds" kept telling him. He virtually killed himself moving down the ladder in life when all he had to do was pack his bags, move 1000 miles away and get another job driving a truck. Good, experienced drivers are always in demand. And finding another woman is a matter of adjustment and luck and it usually comes. It's not easy, but it does come.
Now for the nitpicks (and in a 30 page tale there certainly have to be some), There's the scene when some woman is driving him to see Ann after the "accident". He has his magic car, but asks her to drive him...and then he tells us that he did the driving. In a car without hand controls. Bad! Then there's the key fact that during most of this story he's crippled and can't get around. Well wounded soldiers from time immorial have used artificial limbs. Sure, the computer controlled jobs he got at the end are really super and do a lot for people that the old peg leg didn't do, but he should have been able to get prosthetics right away. And the insurance company was willing to give him half a million cash and ALL his medical bills covered. He should have been walking around very quickly, even without computer control. This is a very bad flaw in the story. The one that is clearly off is Jimmy and Rodney watching the Dodgers-Padres game on TV... in January! Any idiot that knows something about baseball knows that no one plays baseball in January. Even Spring training doesn't start until later.
This is clearly a story about very foolish people who continually compound their mistakes. The old saying that the definition of madness is someone who repeatedly exhibits the same behavior expecting different results. Claire is constantly whispering negative comments in the background and people are saying things Jim can hear knowing how pissed off he's going to be. The daughter (Rebecca) is a real complication, but Rodney should have done his best to make amends and then Claire and he should have written Jimmy off. Jimmy was his own worst enemy and should have been allowed to sink under his own power.
I couln't read this in one sitting or even a few, but did get through it over the period of a week. I was generous and gave it 3* and promised myself to check the length of a story next time before I get into it. This was not worth my time!

Good story

I enjoyed the story and respect your writing.

long story

this was a very long story but people got to remember it was a story of a guys life. life isn't a 5 page story. this story covered many yrs and all the trials and frustrations he went through in his life. i can see how he felt cast aside in most of the story as he was in a sense. but that his take on things. true there was some false feelings there but it was meant to be so it was easier for him. so glad on how it all turned out for them cause it showed both sides of the coin. he was right in saying that she really didn't love him in the beginning she did not bring her a game into the marriage. keep writing

WOW!

This might not have been grammatically perfect and drug on in some places BUT I just spent the last two days reading it straight through. It truly is a Romance story in every sense. I just had to find out how the story in its entirety would end. I can only guess your writing will improve.

Do I get five stars?

After all I read it from beginning to end. Not as long as War and Peace, but it seemed it.
My main problem throughout is that I normally identify with the main character. Didn't work here. I thought he was a pathetic, whinging, waste of space.
I still plodded on though.
Undeniably good writing, even if repetitive, as in James was repetitively a pathetic, whinging, waste of space.
His longest perhaps but not his best.

I'M TOO OLD FOR THE TIME COMMITTMENT

I read the story from beginning to end in one sitting (with a few bathroom and smoke breaks) but was totally dismayed when I first discovered the length of it. Further, I feel the length was somewhat unnecessary as it repeated the same sub plot over and over. No doubt forgiveness is good for the soul and essential to one's own redemption, but this took ridiculously long to arrive at that forgiveness and then it had to be bought by his wife's treatment. In the end, I just did not like the story and regretted the investment of time to completely read it.

I'm only on page 19...

but I just have to comment: It's pretty hard to see through an opaque window.

If someone else has noted this, I'm sorry, but I certainly don't have time to read through >120 comments.

A story from Matt Moreau is always an event

Yes, it is a long story, but it contained a lot of information.

It was a complex story and very well told.

And worth every one of the 5 stars.

don't care who you are

with a wife and best friend like that, who needs enemies?

I am ok with the length of the story, 734 pages on the android app (read it on my phone.) I usually do not read in this category, but the title made me hope for a happy ending. The story held my interest, and eventually got to the happy ending.

I read the story first, and had these thoughts before coming to the comments page. I do have some tips, in my humble non-writer opinion. I will share one here.

One thing that nagged at the back of my reading, is the ages-time-years-passing feels like it does not match. I started thinking that I should have kept a spread sheet matching divorce age, Rebecca's age, and Anne's age to the passing years. One example Rebecca was 9 at one point in the story, and 6 years passed and she is 13. As my brain picked up on this, it became distracting.

I am wanting to be helpful and positive. Thank you for writing!

One of your better ones

I normally read any this long< but then there not many this long. I enjoyed every word. You did make me cry again, several times.

This guy is one of my favorite authors but this story made me want to throw up. Too long, overused emphasis on the smaller guy being...just pathetic. What is the author's bias against smaller guys...being weak, unsuccessful and small equipment (Absolutely WRONG) and big/tall guys being strong, successful, conceited and getting all the girls and BTW: having big equipment for the ladies. Matt who dropped acid in your soup? Find a new line this one is getting 'REAL" old. You should make one of the small guys a Navy Seal incognito and let him render some real smoke (the butt kicking his parents should have given him) to the cheater friend. You're a great writer and I commend anyone who can come up with this stuff. But this story (not the writing) was way off the mark. I had to force myself to finish it. I'll read some of the author's other stories and hopefully they'll be more uplifting. This one was a gut wrenching story for anyone with common decency.

You could have removed the middle third and not had any substantial impact...

...on this story. It was so redundant and repetitive, it became an exercise in dogged determination to finish it. I respect your work that much. In the end, it wandered and was far too cyclical to keep people engaged.
The Pollards were stuck in the Jimmy zone well past any reason. No normal people would have carried on that long. Jimmy was also a piece of work. It's almost as if the universe rewarded his suffering betrayal at the hands of his wife and best friend with a mountain of further grief and suffering. It was just too much, and so, lost itself in the suspension of disbelief category.
Lots of gaping holes in this story. I won't waste your time describing them....I think you know what most of them are and where they lurk.
I would ask that you strive to eliminate one nagging characteristic of your characters....when asked a question, the nearly always answer, "Yes, yes I did"....or some variation of it. After so many repetitions, it becomes trite.....several more and begins to annoy.....a few dozen more and becomes a show stopper. People just don't do that. It is too contrived to be anything but an affectation, and a bad one at that.
That all said, I enjoyed the story overall...or at least the apparent intent of it. And I'm glad it all worked out in the end.....
Thank you.

Sometimes I was not sure...

I was sometimes not sure about the story. It was a case of hating everyone. Jim being a wimp, thick-headed, stubborn and angry. Claire and Rod being selfish and disrespectful to both Jim, Nadine and even Ann. Whoring out friends and those they had power over. Besides, really how basically disrespectful was the point of view that all he needed was a woman. How much can one person be expected to do for someone? He needed more than just a lover but needed perspective to get his
heads together.

The truth is that as strange as it sounds, Jim made the initial decision. He chose to leave. Now, he was being fooled but the question is based on what? We don't know what promises she made to him, what actual vows they took. I know it is possible to live in a polyamorous relationship. I have done so for many years. Multiple wives and multiple husbands we live together share everything include each other. We are strictly heterosexual but we share love with each other. Is this for everyone? No. Does it always work? No, unfortunately, we have had members of our unusual situation find that they simply could not cope or share and have been lost to us, we have had couples enter our family and have one of them leave their original spouse to go their own way. We mourn for their loss from our lives but we wish them well and hope and pray they find the relationship they desire. Would it work for Rod, Claire, and Jim? Probably not since Jim was so jealous but I would be interesting if the author wrote a parallel history story of what might have been.

Long, Convoluted and an Absolute Waste of time

This story is so downbeat, long and convoluted that I wonder if anyone actually read it to the end. The wife and best friend were snakes in the grass who should have been dealt with swiftly and decisively. Sleeping with Rodney behind Jim's back from the onset of the marriage is a betrayal of the worst kind and is unforgivable. This story was really disgusting and went on and on for no apparent reason. I don't know of any reasonable man who would accept another man in his marital bed unless he just doesn't care about his wife or marriage. At the very least, Claire should have told Jim she wanted Rodney and divorced him. Those two lovers were just plain delusional. The author could have saved 28 pages by having Jim shoot Rodney and Claire, then himself and saved us all a lot of trouble trying to follow this wimp throughout his miserable life.

The making of a Book or movie

Great story line, should be consider/turning this story into a book or movie.

Ok story full of a wide range of emotions

First and fore most it was refreshing knowing that you got Jimmy to finally forgive Rod and Claire even if they never really did have true regret. What they did was always for themselves never turly for Jimmy. Your ending proved the point Claire did what she did in the date for her own self and not one bit of it was for Jimmy. She wanted and Rod wanted that everything they did to be ok. Guess what it wasn't not one bit of it. If they wanted to include Jimmy as they said then why didn't they before they were caught. The fact that all the stuff that they tried to do for him was about recompense was bullshit. It was about making themselves feel better and looking for a way to make Jimmy feel better. So that they could themselves. The reality is when something is done that is so wrong and recompense is what you are truly seeking. You are not doing it for your own benifit. Very long read and yes it was all over the place but it was interesting enough to keep my attention through to the end.

A tale of betrayal destroying a decent man

A well written story of acute betrayal and the depths a person can sink to as the bitterness consumes his life. An very enjoyable yarn

Painful

I'm sorry.
I assume you put a lot of time and effort into writing this epic tale (but not much into editing - but we'll let that go) and as an author on here myself I know how difficult it can be but as it grew ever more repetitive I'm afraid I just lost interest.
In the end I gave up after 4 pages and went straight to page 30 to find out that I was right in my expectations as to how it would all turn out.
If nothing else I saved myself about 2 hours of reading.
Shame because there was a half decent story hidden in all that verbiage.

Need editing......and yes I read it to the end.......

you even lost track of characters in this epic. One friend lost his wife toward the end, Not killed off no she just disappeared. Unnecessary characters were introduced, then poof gone.
And the plot, Over and Over hit on the head, figuratively beating a dead horse. Normally you wrap something like this up in 5 or 6 pages.

he should forcefully take the ex and dick face, torture them by cutting off their feet and hands, cit long gashes into their flesh, just short of killing them. store them away, while keeping them alive for as long as possible

Along lament

Good writing but a tedious and repetitive theme.

It took twenty five or so years to get a pair of prosthetics. Absolute crap. He was riding around in a fancy dancy wheel chair and driving a car with lifts and hand controls but couldn't get a pair of tin legs.

Douglas Bader flew Spitfires in WW II with a pair of tin legs. Oscar Pretorius, the blade runner, ran in Olympic 400 metres . (Oh he's now in jail for murdering his girl friend). I know an army officer who lost his legs as a young officer and retired as a Lt Gen passing his annual physical test every year.

Dragging!!!!

Some pity to the main guy. He lives to be bothered by them. He should do the moving when he has his two legs. Doesn't occurred to him that all the crap he had was just bcoz he stayed connected with them. Should move on a long time and out of their lives.

Stupid

Let me see... she was in the sack with him the week after the honeymoon and that was the first time? Quite a slut with no value of commitment... or the two timing started well before the wedding.... this is the probable and James was too stupid to ask?

really enjoyed it!

maybe one of the best I hae read on this site

An ugly story that never got pretty.

An excruciatingly protracted and ultimately unsatisfying tale for a number of reasons:

1) The depressing repetitiveness that needed a strong dose of editing.

2) The sheer volume and degree of serial misery heaped upon the poor schnook of a protagonist, James.

3) An ex-wife, Claire, who seemed to have felt no more than guilt rather than remorse over the pain she willingly and callously inflicted on her ex-husband.

4) The cuckold aspect, expressed by Claire toward the end of her marriage to James and touched on briefly thereafter in places, was never really explored, perhaps because she seemed as incapable of being truly honest with her ex-husband as he was in not being a self-imposed prisoner of the past.

5) Although given a seemingly happy ending, one gets the impression that James will in a sense always be cuckolded by an ex-wife and re-friend that, for their own reasons, just won't stop exploiting his fragile emotions and let him stop being haunted by a past they made for him.

Re: Dubby49 comment of 1/4/17!

Old Buddy, one of us can’t read. The story I read did not have Ex Hubby in the fancy car and with the bionic legs until after he got his head out it of his ass and stopped letting a 25 year old incident ruin the rest of his life.
I admit this one had me hooked, even though MM could have trimmed a lot and said the same thing more effective.
I gave MM a well-deserved 5***** on this one, while agreeing with many of the problems mentioned by those who offered constructive criticism.
THANKS FOR THE READ!

burn in hell pollards

god wat a slut an id rather b best friends with the devil than rodney an then little shit becca,people like this think they can treat anyone like shit cause they have money,they have no morals watsoever an jim utter wimp no woman is worth hurting .now would u risk your life to help them ,no fuckin way they still treated him like shit

I Can't Believe I Am Doing This

For several years I have read the comments from readers who ripped apart writers for their "reconsiliation-at-all-cost" submissions. And it pained me that writers were treated so unfairly. But we were treated to 30 chapters, provimg that Rodney was guilty of turning his best friend James' wife Claire into his sex toy. Since Rodney apparently couldn't produce offspring,Jimmy was needed to produce Rebecca, whom Rodney kidnapped and raised as his own daughter, to the point that she had no choice but to accept Rodney as her "real" father. Children who were kidnapped as babies have grown attached to their kidnappers as their real parents. Such is the case of Rebecca toward her mother's lover and second husband ( but, in no way was Rodney her father or Daddy). And all three of the Pollard's treated Jimmy as a loser cuckold. And he was. Deservedly so.

Was Jim worth the effort?

I guess the answer to that is debatable. I for one think that he was a whining piece of shit. He bemoaned the fact that another man was father to his child. Let's be honest he proved he was totally inept at looking after himself. Even able bodied he lost his job through being a drunk. Then had the audacity to blame them. Speaking as a Mom I'd not let a loser like that near any child I gave birth to. Sadly most men seem to think that women-kind are beholden to them. Here's a wake up guys we're NOT! However, it was interesting to see how he progressed. Even at the end we learn that deep down he just has a need to be looked after. He lets Ann take the lead he even refers to her as the boss. A relationship/marriage should be give and take. Is he man enough to accept that? On his 'last date' with Clair he goes through his feelings. Which once again is the same regurgitated shit from before. So with that in mind I wonder if he is still able to live up to the promises he made. With that in mind he now has two babies to think of. Maybe that is his incentive. That said it will not make any difference if he still plays the oneupmanship games.

Find an editor

Story could have been 10 pages shorter and still carried the same emotional involvement.

This one really made me think.

I really enjoyed the story and couldn't stop once I got into the characters. The plot really made me think and for me that's definitely the mark of a great story. I found myself thinking what I would do in that situation, and it was a real dilemma. I just had to stick with it to see how it finished off, and I wasn't disappointed. I was initially attracted by the large number of comments and that usually means the story includes a bit of controversy and is something different... And it definitely was.

Don't be put off by the length of the story because there are many other tales on this site that are even longer. The only difference is that this story was made in one submission and not spread over many. This story was also split into chapters, so it was left to the reader to decide when to stop, rather than wait until the next installment was posted.

Ignore the Trolls and ake your own mind up. For me it was definitely 5 stars. Thank you MM for a very enjoyable read.

-5*

I can't believe I wasted my time reading this crap. I quit reading MM stores a long time ago, because not matter what the husband did MM make him a cuckold wimp. And here we are again, 30 chapters of the wife telling him " I love you, but I need a bigger dick so get on board . If not I will kick you to the curb and it will your fault because you couldn't be a man about it ". I guess what I am to say is This story is bullshit!

a cuckold story??? no matter how u dress it up

This story was a bit different from your others but in essence it was just another cuckold story, wasn't it...the same as all your other frustrating cuckold stories?

You are an excellent writer Matt. I read 30 damm pages! That's commitment!

But I'm pissed that yet again you made the hero a wimp. you made the whore just another whore getting away so scot free to enjoy her life. another ungrateful daughter. and the lover is the typical stereotype.....this sums it up doesn't it.

epic story

One of the best I have ever read FOR SURE

Longest story I have read on literotica

I rarely comment or judge writers, if I like someone I 'd rate, nothing else and if didn't I simple ignore. But this one moved me write a comment. Its absolutely brilliant and IMHO surely one of the best of this website. Thanks MM for this and wish you best of luck and happy new year.

Regards

Lots of words, little story!

3* Read the whole damned thing. You ran out of story somewhere around midpoint and belabored on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on.

Won't read any more of you drivel.

epic story

Good apart from his input at the final 'date'. There are a lot more questions I would have had and wanted answers to

Great

Wonderful story loved it keep up the good work

A true MM story

To paraphrase the old Alkaser commercial; I can't believe I read the whole story.

A Really Great Read....but

I like to think that I am a forgiving guy....but I really don't think I could ever forgive Rod and Claire! Three years of screwing Rod behind James's back and to really put the icing on the cake started fucking each other right after they got back from their honeymoon....Talk about ripping a guys heart out! Then Claire has Becca and never finds out who the father is for 6 years...c'mon get real! She was a real work of art! Anyway I enjoyed the story and have always been a sucker for a happy ending.

Pls read full comment matt moreau

I read many stories but this is my first comment
The story is good but the Jimmy character is made to take the pain but I am wondering how come a man take such pain and did not become a person every one fears . I feel that whenever a person takes a hit the morality in a person dies little bit and his moral compass gets down.
Every bad person is made by situation very few are bad by their own they have a name called psychopaths
I wish u rewrite this i am not asking for revenge or how he becomes rich
See if this jimmy guy of yours has lost his moral balance bcs i am sure that would be my case if that happens

WAY TO LONG

And when you consider that the cheating bitch and "best friend" live life to the full while our wronged husband gets the shit, it just wasn't worth the time. Best friend or not heads should have been bashed and I'm talking as soon as Jimmy walked into his house to hear that whore fucking someone else. Never believable when you write that shit. And I have to wonder if the writer is living that lifestyle and is waging a war to try to make it acceptable to the world or maybe justify it in his own mind?
Matt Moreau, are you a cuckold? Now would be a great time to come out of the closet.

Let's consider this

No matter what your point of view is about MM and his stories he seems to have mastered one thing well. He is able to attract a lot of readers and can generate enough comments to fill a small book.

I Accept The Story in the End

At first, like many, I thought it was too long and was impatient with Jim. In the end I accept and like it. Of course, I am partial to MM's work. I do think his best are the 3-5 pagers not the 20-30 page whales.

Well, this is the third and last of your stories that I can stand to read. I did make it to the third page, in hopes that it would have been different from the first two stores. I was wrong. Same crap. No way I was going to make it through 30 pages to get the same results. This is just one mans opinion but, if others are similar, I would look for another hobby.

Worst Story EVER!

i forced myself to get to page 9 and couldn't stomach anymore. He's only the sperm donor not the kid's father!

That man was put though living hell. 3/4 of the way though I felt so bad for him. What his X and best friend did after the affair was despicable. If I was him I would of shot both of them than myself. Very depressing story.