I have been trying to figure out why I have found this story so much harder to engage with than some of your others? I think it is because there is no strong underlying story holding it all together so with no compelling 'what happens next' I am not compelled. Without the motivation I am finding myself skip-reading most of the sex as it has no context looking for the underlying architecture which isn't obviously present.
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Anonymous12/31/16
Frogs are different
Fast Company magazine used to have something called the consultant debunking unit. They actually did the frog in the boiling water experiment. It seems that when you put a frog in boiling water it dies immediately because the water is so hot. It has no opportunity to get its feet anywhere if they can jump off from before it dies. If you put a frog in a pan of cool water and turn the heat on it jumps out as soon as it becomes bored or feels uncomfortable. It has plenty of time to get oriented and nowhere to put its feet so it can jump.
Even with that slight error, this episode is as good as the rest. Keep on writing!
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Anonymous12/31/16
mark hadnt nothing but house cleaning statements for his part of the story. with still no actual love story other than she knows i love her because the author wrote out that i love her in a paragraph and that shows this is a love story where we screw other people with not actually showing any actual loving moments with the character point of views. another lackluster chapter i scanned through awaiting something of a plot. i still have yet to fathom how your ratings havent dropped into the 2s as bad as this has been. obviously most of these readers have no clue what an actual plot line looks like when they are reading. there hasnt been one in this for over 25 chapters.
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Difficult engagement
I have been trying to figure out why I have found this story so much harder to engage with than some of your others? I think it is because there is no strong underlying story holding it all together so with no compelling 'what happens next' I am not compelled. Without the motivation I am finding myself skip-reading most of the sex as it has no context looking for the underlying architecture which isn't obviously present.
Frogs are different
Fast Company magazine used to have something called the consultant debunking unit. They actually did the frog in the boiling water experiment. It seems that when you put a frog in boiling water it dies immediately because the water is so hot. It has no opportunity to get its feet anywhere if they can jump off from before it dies. If you put a frog in a pan of cool water and turn the heat on it jumps out as soon as it becomes bored or feels uncomfortable. It has plenty of time to get oriented and nowhere to put its feet so it can jump.
Even with that slight error, this episode is as good as the rest. Keep on writing!
mark hadnt nothing but house cleaning statements for his part of the story. with still no actual love story other than she knows i love her because the author wrote out that i love her in a paragraph and that shows this is a love story where we screw other people with not actually showing any actual loving moments with the character point of views. another lackluster chapter i scanned through awaiting something of a plot. i still have yet to fathom how your ratings havent dropped into the 2s as bad as this has been. obviously most of these readers have no clue what an actual plot line looks like when they are reading. there hasnt been one in this for over 25 chapters.
Fun
This chapter was entertaining. I got a few chuckles out of Elsa teasing Sean.
Enjoyed it.
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