This has the promise of a great story, but one page leaves a lot to be desired. I can't even rate it because it's not even a complete story. Please flesh it out some more.
This story needs to be longer. I understand this is chapter 1 of it but you needed to add more to it before posting. Also can you fix the name mistake you stated Kim takes out her phone to show a photo but it's not her phone.
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This has the promise of a great story, but one page leaves a lot to be desired. I can't even rate it because it's not even a complete story. Please flesh it out some more.
it has potential
This story needs to be longer. I understand this is chapter 1 of it but you needed to add more to it before posting. Also can you fix the name mistake you stated Kim takes out her phone to show a photo but it's not her phone.
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