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You make me go outside naked?
Why don't I remember any of this? I live in Colorado? I don't remember moving! I must be loosing my mind! No, wait, it's the author who decide to write in th stupid second person.
You decide to write a story.
You write it partially in present tense. You use the two words "you" and "your" hundreds of times. You look through the glass table and you see "their crotch", since they have but one. You think the story reads pretty good. You look for kind comments. You are disappointed.
Two new baboons today
1* of course
Prescott PD and your Owners Association would
like you and your wife to stop by and see them.... I think you won a contest?
Because they both said they have papers you need to sign.
All said in the other comments...
All said in the other comments...1*
All not said in the other comments...
All not said in the other comments...5*****
1*
typical LW trash, expect many more, the year has just started
1*
stupid cuck shit.
good
been there, done it, loved it ! ignore the idiots
2nd person
...is hard to pull off and it be good. Almost.
Who are these critics?
I read the story without judgement, and like others who have left comments found it to be a bit lacking in the writing department. HOWEVER: I also found it to be beyond hot. Author Red Hat showed an extremely erotic imagination throughout. it got me aroused and kept me there, the measure of a good erotic (fantasy) story. why readers of erotica feel the need to pass negative judgement on others is beyond me. if you don't like the theme, read something else! Cuckhold stories in particular seem to attract attack. Lighten up and enjoy...or move on. I gave it a 5.
Nice first story
I enjoyed your first story, RedHat. It was well conceived and executed, and shows you have the talent for this type of writing. I hope to see more submissions from you with longer formats to allow you to develop the characters and story lines, and I encourage you to ignore the negative comments from the cuck story haters. Unfortunately, we have to share this category with them.
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