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a powerful love story

thank you.

Thanks***

For sharing.

Very lackluster

Just a maudlin and sickly sentimental tear jerker of an attempt at a story. Not very much of a story other than the pity party.

LIFE MUST AND WILL GO ON

even while the world spins and some mortals survive TK U MLJ LV NV

Very hooky setup and sympathetic characters but ....

the difficulty of 9 months separation was largely glossed over. Any drama was shortcircuted by husband and wife being such unwavering paragons of true love. It's like laptopwriter ( who I've five starred in past ) decided to transpose the classic ' Lives of the Saints ' for Loving Wives. Heathens and threats of martyrdom have their place in pumping up dramatic tension.

It was gutsy to give husband spinal bifada, we all know it must be difficult, but don't know how. A love scene would have definite carnal and mechanical complications that a ambitious writer would have explored. Nope. laptopwriter wasn't feeling it. As a result , I didn't either.

We can safely ignore everything lordsuckpuppy says

Any reader whose writing Gods are RichardGerald, Matt M and Swingerjoe is someone without a shred of credibility. His long-winded, pompous theatrics might be great for children's theatre, though his extensive referral to his thesaurus might irritate even second graders. He has quickly become the Armond White of Literotica. The only question is if he is the worst commentator on loving wives ore the worst on the whole site.

As for this story, it is an attempt on the part of the writer to evoke the same emotions he got with "The last chimes of fall," except this doesn't get there. Three stars.

Damn

Sometimes love actually wins out.

Five Stars

One word

Perfect.

Exceptional People

From my experience, about 10% of the population are truly saints. When you find two of them married to each other, it is amazing. They are great people to be around. I hope your friend has such a wife.

Well Done

Damn well done.

Thanks

Great way to start the new year. Tearful thank you.

Thank You

You are a true artist

One that truly has the meaning of loving wives.

great

Now that is true love. Great writing.

LW section needs more stories like this!

Warm story

But if did seem to have a head and a tail with nothing in between and I like to have something to chew.

Good Job. Loved it.

Most of the stories these days are written about black men dreaming of white women and Cheating women who have gay husbands waiting at home. Total cesspool. Keep writing .

Packing so much into so little

4* and I'm not even going to complain about the "wrong category"

What a great short story. I especially liked this:

"Nine months ago neither Jim nor Cathleen would have suspected their time apart would actually enrich their lives and bring them closer, but it did-through the power of words. Each and every day, they told each other things they never felt it necessary to say in person, the things that went unsaid before."

Another outstanding story.

I love reading your stories.

Thanks. That was a really special 5* story,

A great way to end the day with.

Very Nice

Thank you for a wonderful warm story on this cold January day.

Very heart felt love story

Loved it. 5 *

A real Xmas story...

A real Xmas story...Thank you...5*

beautiful

so simple yet so beautiful. thanks for sharing.
love you brother :)

Excellent

This one got to me. A welcome change from the cheating stories. A real love story that brings out emotions and remembrances from my past. Been there, not to his extent, but, been there. Thank you.

Thank you.

Thank you for writing such a story.

It's a nice change of pace from the normal LW stories. A truly loving wife in LW, who'd have thunk it.

5 stars, easily.

A Five but...

Well written. Pulls the old strings. Pushes the right buttons, but...

I wrote something titled "Too Clever by a Mile' about a hospice for children with leukemia. I finished, looked back, and realized how totally inappropriate it was to put something like that on a site like Literotica. It just wasn't right. My oldest daughter is often my editor, and she was horrified. I've left it up, but am ashamed of it.

There's just something wrong about capitalizing on other peoples' very real suffering. Next time try something different, a comedy.

Jedd Clampett

Very nice

Nice to see a happy ending without the drama.

@ Jed

Jed, how about all the stories that capitalize on the suffering of a husband whose been betrayed by his wife? All stories capitalize on something. This was written per request from a friend of mine who suffers from the disease and who also reads Literotica. He asked if I'd write a story just for him. He didn't feel I was capitalizing on his suffering and I don't feel that way either.

thank you for sharing. you are a master of this type of story-telling.

4 good stories and this excellent one in the same day in LW?

Is the world about to end? Thank you for this beautiful story.

Very nice

Emotional impact, well written, thanks for posting. Randi.

Didn't do it for me

Your writing is usually pretty good, but not so much for this one. I was looking for a plot and didn't find any. Couple separated for 9 months, wife returns. ??? That was it. If the separation caused ether of them any particular problems, we didn't read about them.

Oh well, can't please everyone.

Chilley

Sweet

Cool break

A beautiful piece of evocative writing!

Nice turnaround on the 'Loving Wives' category title, too.

Cloying

Saccharine dipped in honey and sprinkled with powdered sugar

No meat

Gave It a 4, but

it seemed to belong in Romance.

Why the high scores?

This was terrible, given the heightened expectations i had when I saw the author posted a story. I mean is written in a very basic manner, and has no dramatic tension.

Wrong category

Romance

Two great characters

What a pleasure to meet Jim and Cathleen. I'd be honored to shake their hands. You tell their story well, honestly and with well-described emotion. The only thing that would have made it better for me was for you to have described some of the trials they went through while they were apart. Not to envision them failing, just to make their ultimate victory sweeter for being dearly won. As for the category: if they're going to call it "loving wives," then they had better expect a truly loving wife to show up from time to time. I, for one, enjoy it when she does.

Loved it!

Brings back memories of my deployment during Desert Storm. The four months my wife and I were apart seemed like 20 years. Thanks.

Awwww!

And then again, Awwww!

It is not much of a story. There's barely anything I would call a plot. It feels more like the first and final scene of a story was mashed together.

Thanks 5*

I kept waiting for some tragedy like most stories on this site but, you gave us a true love story and I don't care what catagory its put in - it is a great short story.

Well Done.

Well done indeed!