You've set 'em up for fucking each other's brains out in his "sleep", just have 'im shove his dick in her ass & go to it!
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Anonymous06/22/04
Just a Chapter
This must be just the first chapter, cause theres no way in hell the author can honestly think that people are gonna enjoy this.
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Anonymous06/22/04
Ignore the comment "just a chapter".
Don't be put off by the negative comments. This story may not have the wild, gasping, best-sex-ever, happy ever after scenario of many of the genre but that is exactly why it is good. Perfect endings can get boring after a while. Your ending makes a really refreshing change.
Keep it up.
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Anonymous06/22/04
Very well written.
Although not full of 'swinging from the light fitting' sex, it was without a doubt erotic.
It was also believable. I for one have shared a bed with a friend (not a sister) and had to go and jerk off, cos my cock was so hard and the situation so charged. Let's face it whilst incest stories turn many of us on, most of us just wouldn't do it in real life because of the repercussions.
I enjoyed it thoroughly and applaud the honesty of the piece.
Some of the comments, I believe are just from frustration. I too wanted the situation to come to a completion, but it was so nicely written that I will be looking for more of the story. Good start and keep writing!!
Tis a rather nice tale with a feeling of honesty and very real frustrations. This could work as a stand alone story, or it could become a first chapter.
A fairly honest approach confronting the spectre of incest.
Well written.
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Anonymous06/22/04
Great story of incest and passion
This Story is one of the few that actually hit on the point of incest and passion as one. I'm sure that we all had or have a crush on a blood family member. How we all wish that we could spend our lifes with that person, but alas she or he or even you is promised to another. This is the price of the love or incest of a family member.
The tension must have been building for a while before this incident, perhaps there werw other minor incidents that both twins preferred to think never happened. A story idea there?
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Anonymous06/23/04
Well written and all...
but there's something definitely false: "They were one soul driven apart in their mother's womb into two bodies" which imho refers to identical twins. This can only happen, if ever, with one egged siblings which always are of the same gender. These two emerged from two eggs and two seperate spermatozoons - in other words: they are normal siblings just actually fathered at nearly the same moment...
I really enjoyed this---Great writing--Erotic as can be--but, sad and real to life--
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Anonymous02/22/08
why
why is this story "FORBIDDEN PASSION" in the incest area they didn't do anything it's not incest if you don't do anything but sleep what was the point if he wasn't going to fuck her then the story may as well of not been written it was a waste of time and space
English
Oh, f'Chis'sakes...
You've set 'em up for fucking each other's brains out in his "sleep", just have 'im shove his dick in her ass & go to it!
Just a Chapter
This must be just the first chapter, cause theres no way in hell the author can honestly think that people are gonna enjoy this.
Ignore the comment "just a chapter".
Don't be put off by the negative comments. This story may not have the wild, gasping, best-sex-ever, happy ever after scenario of many of the genre but that is exactly why it is good. Perfect endings can get boring after a while. Your ending makes a really refreshing change.
Keep it up.
Very well written.
Although not full of 'swinging from the light fitting' sex, it was without a doubt erotic.
It was also believable. I for one have shared a bed with a friend (not a sister) and had to go and jerk off, cos my cock was so hard and the situation so charged. Let's face it whilst incest stories turn many of us on, most of us just wouldn't do it in real life because of the repercussions.
I enjoyed it thoroughly and applaud the honesty of the piece.
Very nice start
Some of the comments, I believe are just from frustration. I too wanted the situation to come to a completion, but it was so nicely written that I will be looking for more of the story. Good start and keep writing!!
quite nice
Tis a rather nice tale with a feeling of honesty and very real frustrations. This could work as a stand alone story, or it could become a first chapter.
Either way it was a delightful short read.
Honest
A fairly honest approach confronting the spectre of incest.
Well written.
Great story of incest and passion
This Story is one of the few that actually hit on the point of incest and passion as one. I'm sure that we all had or have a crush on a blood family member. How we all wish that we could spend our lifes with that person, but alas she or he or even you is promised to another. This is the price of the love or incest of a family member.
Awesome concept - suppressed love is so true
The tension must have been building for a while before this incident, perhaps there werw other minor incidents that both twins preferred to think never happened. A story idea there?
Well written and all...
but there's something definitely false: "They were one soul driven apart in their mother's womb into two bodies" which imho refers to identical twins. This can only happen, if ever, with one egged siblings which always are of the same gender. These two emerged from two eggs and two seperate spermatozoons - in other words: they are normal siblings just actually fathered at nearly the same moment...
Good luck...
A short erotic read. Well done!
Great Story---Sexy, Sad--but great!
I really enjoyed this---Great writing--Erotic as can be--but, sad and real to life--
why
why is this story "FORBIDDEN PASSION" in the incest area they didn't do anything it's not incest if you don't do anything but sleep what was the point if he wasn't going to fuck her then the story may as well of not been written it was a waste of time and space
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