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Sarah? Jane?
Not 100% sure, but it certainly seemed that several times it said "Sarah" when it should have said "Jane" and vice-versa. But with this family, that may not really matter. I expect that eventually everyone will be doing everyone else - each guy with each woman, each woman with each woman, and each guy with each guy - all bi-sexual.
mistakes made ... who cares!
who cares if there are some mistakes? this is a good storyline that reads easy and is a follow up to the first chapter. a hot wife, a hot mother-in-law, a hot sister-in-law ... no problem. who cares about a few little mistakes? not me!
Confusing
Switching Sarah and Jane back and forth is confusing. That's why people care. I agree it is a very hot story. And I overlook typos, grammar errors, etc. But switching the two back and forth makes you stop to think when Jane is blowing him and Jane sits on his face. She can't be two places at once. Otherwise, full marks. Sarah slyly looking at Jane each time she touches her in front of her husband confirms what I guessed after ch 1. Sarah is not averse to Jane touching her. She just questions her doing it in front of him. They have their own secrets. Jane probably knows about him and her mom too. She just doesn't confront him because of her own secret with Sarah. I agree with the earlier guy somewhat. Eventually he can nail them all, but leave out the brother.
re mistakes made ... who cares!
People with brains, which seemingly omits you.
Thanks for the input - Nathan
I believe I corrected most of the confusing name mix ups. It should be less confusing to read now.
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