Please don't write anymore of this illiterate rubbish.
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Anonymous01/06/17
What is good for the goose
is good for the gander. Way to go buddy. This is a porn site after all!
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Anonymous01/06/17
5 stars
although the editing was pathetic, the story and the concept was 5 stars. Gave it a 5, although i wanted to give it a 4, due to bad editing and a hurried plot line. However, the above mentioned rating was given to offset all the cucks out there who hate this. Keep writing, but, make sure you writer longer stories. This seemed too hurried. The wife deserved some more punishment.
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Anonymous01/06/17
Slept through all your English classes?
Poor grammar ruined the potential of this story.
If you wish to continue, use a spell/grammar check and/or get an editor.
Sorry I didn't liked it...why? 1st - "Her boss' house turned out to be a fucking mansion" and all the drunk couples couldn't sleep there? He had to take them home? Was he an employee too? 2nd - The boss had a fucking limousine and no chauffeur? Really? He was the one driving it? 3rd - He wanted some pay back...why the need for him to use lube to fuck her in her more than fucked ass the previous night? 4th - Did he think that taking this path he would save their marriage? It was dead as soon as she became her boss' whore. 5th - Finally the poor grammar...so no more than 1*
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Anonymous01/06/17
English clearly isn't the author's native language
But even so, this is a poor excuse for a story.
You might do better writing gay stories since that is obviously your true interest.
My suggestion is to proofread your story for typos etc. I saw "seen" misused several times. Also just writing a sex scene doesn't make for much of a story, if you use a worn out plot put a new twist on it.
I just don't understand how he could stay with her after what she has done. She obviously has been doing this for quite awhile and with several people. Dump the bosses whore and move on with your life. Don't tell me she loves him, after what she has been doing. He did say he love her, which I think is now just lust and sex- He could never trust her again.
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Anonymous01/07/17
I think you have something with the limo driving.
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Anonymous01/07/17
New Author: Welcome to the Literotica Loving Wives War Zone !
From you Bio, it appears you just started here and this is your first or second story. So Five (5) stars for a new writer. The raters and commentators here tend to fall into two camps. One group is so misogynistic that if Mathew or Mark's account of the birth of Jesus without having sex with her husband Joseph were entered here, they would demand that Mary be hanged, drawn and quartered, then crucified, then burned at the stake; and then hang, draw, quarter, crucified and burned at the stake a second time; all for being such a slut as to allow God to impregnate her! (The "Burn-The-Bitch [BTB] crowd.) At the other end of the spectrum, there are the raters and commentators who appear to be heavily into femdom, cuckold humilation, small penis humiliation, black male sexual superiority (realy a strange form of white subservience). This group will downgrade you of you don't have the boss and son big black men with 14" long by 3" diameter cocks who force the protagonist to suck their semen out of both women, and then make him suck their cocks clean after vaginal and anal sex, amd make him wear a penis cage, and women's limgerie. (The BTB group calls these authors wimps, RAAC (Reconcilliation At Any Cost) and the like.
Needless to say, the two groups rate according to their prejudices. Write a story the BTB crowd likes and the cuckolds will one-star you, call it (and you) garbage amd wish death and destruction upon you, your wife, your mother, your father, your children, your employer, your country, your next door neighbors, and the last bartender who poured you a beer. Ditto for the opposite camp, although generally not quire so strong.
The webmasters here apparently enjoy this divisiveness, and don't split "Loving Wives" into separate categories for each camp.
Might I suggest you choose which camp you prefer and write in accordance with you preferences; posting a warning at the beginning that either the BTB or the reconcilliation crowd won't like it.
Turing to the mechanics of writing, there were a significant number of typographical , pronoun (e.g., stating "he" or "him" when "she" or "her" was meant and vice vers) andd other errors which slow down and distract the reader's train of thought. Also many of the sentences stated the opposite of what was intended. (He wasn't going to make her suck his fecal-laden cock, but you wrote he was.) You need to proofread and get an editor. I understand the Writers's Forum can help you find one.
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Anonymous01/07/17
So...
the harsh critics with Lit user names don't write any stories but trash the authors and their stories. Check out their profiles for yourself. Coincidence? I doubt it. Malevolent moralists exposed.
by
Anonymous01/07/17
Lol..
Is you are so disturb about this writer why are u reading all this comments..
Why why why
First, read several writers like Ohio, Hard Days Knight, and Just Plain Bob. They write shorter LW stories, and with your occupation they'll be more convenient. Their stories will help you find a groove, plus they're entertaining.
Second, do you have spell check on your computer? If you don't get it, and use it. It might help clean up some of your mechanical problems too.
Third, you need 'back story'. I met my wife way back when. She's a real... We've had our differences in the past. I met her boss before and thought... I work real hard as a... (You are a truck driver. What better?)
Fourth, the best LW stories read more like mysteries. I see that here a little bit, but practice makes perfect.
Fifth, Literotica offers a list of volunteer editors. Get one if you can.
Last, don't be discouraged if you get shitty comments. That's how some people get their rocks off.
English
Utter Crap!
Please don't write anymore of this illiterate rubbish.
What is good for the goose
is good for the gander. Way to go buddy. This is a porn site after all!
5 stars
although the editing was pathetic, the story and the concept was 5 stars. Gave it a 5, although i wanted to give it a 4, due to bad editing and a hurried plot line. However, the above mentioned rating was given to offset all the cucks out there who hate this. Keep writing, but, make sure you writer longer stories. This seemed too hurried. The wife deserved some more punishment.
Slept through all your English classes?
Poor grammar ruined the potential of this story.
If you wish to continue, use a spell/grammar check and/or get an editor.
Sorry I didn't liked it...
Sorry I didn't liked it...why? 1st - "Her boss' house turned out to be a fucking mansion" and all the drunk couples couldn't sleep there? He had to take them home? Was he an employee too? 2nd - The boss had a fucking limousine and no chauffeur? Really? He was the one driving it? 3rd - He wanted some pay back...why the need for him to use lube to fuck her in her more than fucked ass the previous night? 4th - Did he think that taking this path he would save their marriage? It was dead as soon as she became her boss' whore. 5th - Finally the poor grammar...so no more than 1*
English clearly isn't the author's native language
But even so, this is a poor excuse for a story.
You might do better writing gay stories since that is obviously your true interest.
Hay fair is fair
If she still want a man at home she needs to share.
Man lets his cheating whore wife continue to fuck around
Another chuck story. Wife is a whore for cock and husband becomes complisent in her affair. After finding her doing her boss and son. Sick story
Just more sewerage for LW
Steaming pile of crap! Another writer who hates husbands and has to turn them into sissies. Pathetic
great story line
it would have been nice to get an editor. Atrocious language.
Lots of diseases in their futures
Disgusting people. Who dies first?
Writer Should Change His Nom de Plume
To dumbcuckhusband.
Story is crap. Hub is more interested in driving a limo than the fact his wife is a whore.
maybe this isn't for you
If you don't know the difference between would and wouldn't or ever and never to tell when to use which one maybe writing is not for you.
It's bad enough that people are so stupid they write this shit
But what amazes me more is that 10 people favorited it.
Apparently the writer isn't the only one crawling in the mud.
1*
Why? Why do people come to this category which clearly states "Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more"
complain when they find stories that cover: "Married extra-marital fun: swinging, sharing & more"?
What IS the point?
Doesn't deserve a comment...1*
Doesn't deserve a comment...1*
Nothing new here
My suggestion is to proofread your story for typos etc. I saw "seen" misused several times. Also just writing a sex scene doesn't make for much of a story, if you use a worn out plot put a new twist on it.
So .......
Does wifey still teach dance classes?
2nd Place
I just don't understand how he could stay with her after what she has done. She obviously has been doing this for quite awhile and with several people. Dump the bosses whore and move on with your life. Don't tell me she loves him, after what she has been doing. He did say he love her, which I think is now just lust and sex- He could never trust her again.
I think you have something with the limo driving.
New Author: Welcome to the Literotica Loving Wives War Zone !
From you Bio, it appears you just started here and this is your first or second story. So Five (5) stars for a new writer. The raters and commentators here tend to fall into two camps. One group is so misogynistic that if Mathew or Mark's account of the birth of Jesus without having sex with her husband Joseph were entered here, they would demand that Mary be hanged, drawn and quartered, then crucified, then burned at the stake; and then hang, draw, quarter, crucified and burned at the stake a second time; all for being such a slut as to allow God to impregnate her! (The "Burn-The-Bitch [BTB] crowd.) At the other end of the spectrum, there are the raters and commentators who appear to be heavily into femdom, cuckold humilation, small penis humiliation, black male sexual superiority (realy a strange form of white subservience). This group will downgrade you of you don't have the boss and son big black men with 14" long by 3" diameter cocks who force the protagonist to suck their semen out of both women, and then make him suck their cocks clean after vaginal and anal sex, amd make him wear a penis cage, and women's limgerie. (The BTB group calls these authors wimps, RAAC (Reconcilliation At Any Cost) and the like.
Needless to say, the two groups rate according to their prejudices. Write a story the BTB crowd likes and the cuckolds will one-star you, call it (and you) garbage amd wish death and destruction upon you, your wife, your mother, your father, your children, your employer, your country, your next door neighbors, and the last bartender who poured you a beer. Ditto for the opposite camp, although generally not quire so strong.
The webmasters here apparently enjoy this divisiveness, and don't split "Loving Wives" into separate categories for each camp.
Might I suggest you choose which camp you prefer and write in accordance with you preferences; posting a warning at the beginning that either the BTB or the reconcilliation crowd won't like it.
Turing to the mechanics of writing, there were a significant number of typographical , pronoun (e.g., stating "he" or "him" when "she" or "her" was meant and vice vers) andd other errors which slow down and distract the reader's train of thought. Also many of the sentences stated the opposite of what was intended. (He wasn't going to make her suck his fecal-laden cock, but you wrote he was.) You need to proofread and get an editor. I understand the Writers's Forum can help you find one.
So...
the harsh critics with Lit user names don't write any stories but trash the authors and their stories. Check out their profiles for yourself. Coincidence? I doubt it. Malevolent moralists exposed.
Lol..
Is you are so disturb about this writer why are u reading all this comments..
Why why why
stone cold
so unreal . no real marriage here, just crap.
You could use some help...
First, read several writers like Ohio, Hard Days Knight, and Just Plain Bob. They write shorter LW stories, and with your occupation they'll be more convenient. Their stories will help you find a groove, plus they're entertaining.
Second, do you have spell check on your computer? If you don't get it, and use it. It might help clean up some of your mechanical problems too.
Third, you need 'back story'. I met my wife way back when. She's a real... We've had our differences in the past. I met her boss before and thought... I work real hard as a... (You are a truck driver. What better?)
Fourth, the best LW stories read more like mysteries. I see that here a little bit, but practice makes perfect.
Fifth, Literotica offers a list of volunteer editors. Get one if you can.
Last, don't be discouraged if you get shitty comments. That's how some people get their rocks off.
Good luck. Don't quit.
Jedd Clampett
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