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Seriously?
You get your character raped and go straight to the 'romance'? 🤦
Familiar story line without the rape scene
Sorry, even with the rape, as a friend you wouldn't go there like that, yeah she cried but where was the emotion of being raped and blacking out, did he use protection, basically there's no depth, no build up, the rape then the lesbian sex are too close together, rewrite it, not even a quick fix
not bad
and yes it seems I read this type of story before, but I would have let Roni kick the crap out of him for doing that, raping a girl should never be let go no matter what, no man has the right to do that to a girl when she says no
The storyline needs work, and is not believable.
Please in the future before you share your work have someone else proofread for content, and grammar. The storyline of a rape occurring, and then sex taking place only a short time later was not believable, and was written in very poor taste.
Could have been better
Sadly your story was spoiled by bad grammar and spelling: you should do more than one draft correcting errors as you go. As for the story it was good, but again it was not long enough.
To be honest I don't believe rape should enter into the Erotica Genre: rape is violence without consent. Erotica is both sexually stimulating and arousing and for this reason rape should not be a part of it. Regardless, I felt that your story could have been longer and more descriptive.
I believe that you can write more chapters. For example why not bring Aunt Taylor onto the scene? Early in the read, well before the unfortunate rape I felt that that was where you were leading us.
Don't get put off by the poor, almost insulting reviews because your story does have a lot of hope for the future. Five Stars and Good Luckj
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