Talk about a blast from the past! Glad to see the series ended; not loving that Katherine got knocked off. I am hoping you follow up with their adventures in Belize - hopefully sooner than three years from now!
I apologize for the large gap of time in getting this story finished. Life, work and a health issue got into the way.
I did struggle with exactly how to end this series, killing off the wife did seem a bit harsh to me at first but I kept playing the scenarios over and over again in my mind. The more I did the more it just felt right to have Katherine go to the same manic edge that Ashley appeared to be nearing.
In the end, I felt it was more about the competition between Ashley and Katherine and a showdown that ended with anything less than a big bang, pun intended, just did not feel right.
I hope everyone who has read the series has enjoyed it, it was my first attempt at doing anything like this. I already have a new short story in the queue and hope to continue exploring the genre. I've started to set up a patreon page if anyone is interested in buying me a cup of coffee to help me cover the time it takes to write these stories.
I would love to hear more input from the readers, either in the comments here or in the feedback form emails. Hope everyone has a great 2017!
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Anonymous01/09/17
Awesome!
Love this series very much, just give us an epilogue to fill in some final details. Or better yet, a new series about their adventures in Belize would be awesome! Wow Jahoo
by
Anonymous01/09/17
Ashley
Is still a crazed, violent, manipulative threat to Brian. Lindsey is close behind. Sleep lightly, Brian. Very creative, well-written series.
by
Anonymous01/10/17
Kill the wife!
Leave it to a man every time. After all a man wrote the story. It was a good story until the end! I hope he sleeps with one eye open.
esp for a first effort. It is a shame you didnt post it in loving wives section, as that section generates the most comments, both intelligent and otherwise. For The reader's there this would've been red meat for the lions.
While I love all comments, I wish that more people that comment would register for an account so I could reply to them privately at times.
It's your prerogative to say that the story was great up until the moment the wife was killed off, I'm sure if I took a poll you wouldn't be alone. Of course, there seemed to be just as large of a group, or an even larger one, that wanted to see Ashley walk away the winner. I thought about all the scenarios and felt this worked best. Actually, I thought about writing three different endings in the vein of the "Choose Your Own Adventure" stories I read as a kid and still may do so at some point.
RE: Ashley is a crazed, violent, manipulative threat
Isn't that what makes her the most fun? :-)
It was a lot of fun to consider just how much your average middle aged married guy would be willing to put up with to fuck an extremely hot, teenage girl. There was an episode of "How I Met Your Mother" where Barney had a chart showing that as a woman's hotness score rose so did the acceptable craziness score, I just took that to an extreme here.
The point of fiction, at least for me, is to push the boundaries of reality a bit. If everything written here was completely realistic the stories would be boring, the sex scenes would be a LOT shorter and the married guy would almost never wind up in bed with a sexy blonde and a sexy redhead at the same time!
Thanks for reading!
by
Anonymous01/13/17
Part 2
Please continue the story. There is a lot of potential for more.
I never saw it coming to an end in this chapter or ending the way that it did. I really was not expecting any of what happened in this chapter and just kept saying to myself that this is pretty fucked up.
Thank you for writing such a captivating, erotic and surprising story. I loved every bit of it.
The author wrote what seems to be the final chapter 29 months after the last one. At least he figured out an interesting way to bring this story to a conclusion.
English
Finally...whew!
Well I'm glad it was resolved with the missus being found out and Ash getting her man, but killing? Oh well.
well then....
Talk about a blast from the past! Glad to see the series ended; not loving that Katherine got knocked off. I am hoping you follow up with their adventures in Belize - hopefully sooner than three years from now!
Thanks for the comments!
I apologize for the large gap of time in getting this story finished. Life, work and a health issue got into the way.
I did struggle with exactly how to end this series, killing off the wife did seem a bit harsh to me at first but I kept playing the scenarios over and over again in my mind. The more I did the more it just felt right to have Katherine go to the same manic edge that Ashley appeared to be nearing.
In the end, I felt it was more about the competition between Ashley and Katherine and a showdown that ended with anything less than a big bang, pun intended, just did not feel right.
I hope everyone who has read the series has enjoyed it, it was my first attempt at doing anything like this. I already have a new short story in the queue and hope to continue exploring the genre. I've started to set up a patreon page if anyone is interested in buying me a cup of coffee to help me cover the time it takes to write these stories.
I would love to hear more input from the readers, either in the comments here or in the feedback form emails. Hope everyone has a great 2017!
Awesome!
Love this series very much, just give us an epilogue to fill in some final details. Or better yet, a new series about their adventures in Belize would be awesome! Wow Jahoo
Ashley
Is still a crazed, violent, manipulative threat to Brian. Lindsey is close behind. Sleep lightly, Brian. Very creative, well-written series.
Kill the wife!
Leave it to a man every time. After all a man wrote the story. It was a good story until the end! I hope he sleeps with one eye open.
That was pretty good
esp for a first effort. It is a shame you didnt post it in loving wives section, as that section generates the most comments, both intelligent and otherwise. For The reader's there this would've been red meat for the lions.
Re; Kill The Wife
While I love all comments, I wish that more people that comment would register for an account so I could reply to them privately at times.
It's your prerogative to say that the story was great up until the moment the wife was killed off, I'm sure if I took a poll you wouldn't be alone. Of course, there seemed to be just as large of a group, or an even larger one, that wanted to see Ashley walk away the winner. I thought about all the scenarios and felt this worked best. Actually, I thought about writing three different endings in the vein of the "Choose Your Own Adventure" stories I read as a kid and still may do so at some point.
Thanks for reading!
RE: Ashley is a crazed, violent, manipulative threat
Isn't that what makes her the most fun? :-)
It was a lot of fun to consider just how much your average middle aged married guy would be willing to put up with to fuck an extremely hot, teenage girl. There was an episode of "How I Met Your Mother" where Barney had a chart showing that as a woman's hotness score rose so did the acceptable craziness score, I just took that to an extreme here.
The point of fiction, at least for me, is to push the boundaries of reality a bit. If everything written here was completely realistic the stories would be boring, the sex scenes would be a LOT shorter and the married guy would almost never wind up in bed with a sexy blonde and a sexy redhead at the same time!
Thanks for reading!
Part 2
Please continue the story. There is a lot of potential for more.
Pretty Fucked Up!
I never saw it coming to an end in this chapter or ending the way that it did. I really was not expecting any of what happened in this chapter and just kept saying to myself that this is pretty fucked up.
Thank you for writing such a captivating, erotic and surprising story. I loved every bit of it.
Thank you for posting here.
Three shoots
Three shots and three girls hmmm who exactly wounded Ashley? OR who fired twice?
I am surprised and amazed
The author wrote what seems to be the final chapter 29 months after the last one. At least he figured out an interesting way to bring this story to a conclusion.
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