by GentleJake
This has the beginnings of a wonderful story! Where next, oh author?
Bishop12
I hope to read more of their "roommate only" relationship. hahaha. Continue with this wonderful tale.
Wow! That made me sit up and take notice.Anxiosly await the next chapter
I applaud you, for your literary efforts.
Your character development is subtle, yet strong. I was able to actually relate to each character, yet not have to read a large amount of text that doesnt advance the plot.
Your originality, or rather use of a common theme, is well planned. You worked your story around the basic idea of a woman being attracted to a man in a situation that requires finesse.
I would also like to comment that your storyline is solid, and you have the potential for a wonderful long story text.
I would highly encourage you to further develop this story. Well done.
Hot- keep it coming! I am very much anticipating the next installment.