by Stories_From_the_TV
How did you write so much worse than a lot of your other stories? You seemed to forget stuff like dialog and character development.
Very well done. A little lacking in development, but I think it's a solid story.
For those commenting on lack of development, is there a specific story of mine you felt did that well? And if so what differed from this one? Because I feel I put in roughly the same if not more buildup in this then most of my other stories and would love to know what I could improve on?
This was really well done, despite the little dialog it was very emotive. It never felt lacking because of it. I think with the personality clashes of these two, it would read a lot less loving had more been included . description was spot on and allows readers to easily visualize. 10/10. Looking forward to part 2.
maybe do 1 with Claire and Gloria, with Gloria not have gone through the change
Love all your stories, but you read my mind with this one. I'm the guy that gave you the idea for the Pam/Jan story. I think we both know that "The Office" with shemales is gold. Pam with a dick is too perfect. Please make it happen. Thanks.
Good story which is hopefully continued.
How about a story about Stargate SG-1 with Futa (Col. Samanta Carter) or JAG with Futa (Lt. Sarah MacKenzie)
Two series I've already looked at.
i agree with about Claire and Gloria or Claire and Alex, Claire still the only 1 of them have changed