Just Accept It...

Percect

Would like to have more but why mess with perfection. It's good to have talented special friends.

Burn bitch, burn

best story I've read in a while :)

Brutal......

... Don't change a GD thing. I love scorched earth revenge stories like this.

Yo BigGuy

You did good. Fuck that skanky cunt.

Five Stars

Ending seemed a bit rushed...?

Instead of the quick description of the mechanics of escape, would have liked to see more time words devoted to descriptions of houses being foreclosed on, cars repossessed, quality of life disintegrating. Every couple of years an unmarked envelope containing photos of the children traveling the world being slipped under the door of the trailer they moved into after losing their homes. The just desserts.

recit magnifique

Now that's a story...best damn LW story in a long long time.

What revenge?

Where was the revenge. The bitch is still breathing, the inlaws get off scot free and the male protagonists are still walking around. Monetary shortfalls aside, If you're going to BTB someone at least castrate the bitch/bastard so it can't enjoy sex anymore.

really good but too short

I liked it...bit it needed a little more...

I liked it...but it needed a little more...The writer put in the story the wife's POV arriving home after the cheating night. So what is missing is her POV of the aftermath effects on her and her parents life...How would they surpass all the difficulties? All the pain of never again be with her children, not be present in their growing up? But we have to accept it because this is just a flash story...4*

Good Move

This is an enjoyable variant on the theme. I liked the idea of taking the in law's retirement money as revenge and as a solution to having enough money to stay under the radar. Good job, you have pushed the theme a bit further.

Thanks

Always enjoy reading your stories. 5 *

Bullshit

Not even valid as a fantasy, seriously dipshit you watch too much television.

Might be a flash, might have wholes, but the best story in LW for MONTHS.

1*

every possible dumb cliché here.

well the revenge was good, 3 girls, names kept getting confused

Again a woman thinking with her cunt, and thinking its the only golden one.

Thoughts

Okay, I know this is just a silly little fun story, but I'm going to address a few things as if this were real.

First, the "I can have/need more sex than any man can give me" excuse. By that [il]logic, when she gets older and her libido drops and she doesn't want sex as much as her husband does, he is entitled to have outside lovers, right?

Second, accepting the unbelievable that she loves her husband and is just doing this to satisfy a sexual need, why changing her body to suit her lover, why reserve her pussy for the lover, why the cream pies.

Which brings me to the last that I can think of right now, IF a husband somehow accepted this, even to the point of AT SOME POINT accepting cream pies, how she could think that he would go near her skanky pussy, let alone eat her cream pie on the very first night is beyond me.

Lilly, Riley, Janie, and Lucy?

This is a story where the writer fills in the blanks. You simply filled a couple of blanks in wrong. There must be a template for this posted someplace on Lit.

Yes!

I'm sure the candy ass wimp cock suckers in the audience hates this story. That's why I loved it. It beats the hell out of the wimp bullshit that dominates this site.

i liked BUT

when you write a story... before posting read aloud!! this will help having wrong names etc i gave you a 5

ONLY Cucks

Only a husband who has been cuckold could enjoy a story like this.I guess thats why so many here love B.T.B stories.

Thanks for the offering.

The names are not wrong.

If you read the story, he changes his name and those of his daughters. That's why their names are different after he leaves.

Short and nasty. I liked it. Would have liked a bit more aftermath to show how the bitches suffer but still great as it stands.

A bread and circuses solution for the Loving Wives unwashed rabble

I unwillingly enjoyed it myself with much the same pleasure others get in singing " Dixie ". As a template for life surrrrre. Good job by author distilling fear and anger wrought by family and divorce so-called justice system into fictional moonshine.

liked it

I do not know why women think they have the best one between their legs.
They all have one and with out love or feelings it is only a place to visit or
use. If you want you can rent one for a little money. BTB tale but in
real live people get stuck paying for sluts and man whores under our laws.

Plagirized

I don't remember the name of the other story, but the first half of this is pretty much a word-for-word copy of that story.

The second page of this story is just pretty much trash.

The story this was stolen from continued on for many pages and was pretty well written. This copy was just an excuse to quickly create a very-superficially constructed BTB ending for that other tale.

If you are going to steal someone else's work, please have the decency to give a link to the story you stole from.

Go MGTOW

MGTOW in the face of slores!

Probably not actually plagiarized

but there is an almost identical story already on LW....

4 Names

Equals 2 Daughters Old Name New Name. Ones the Home folks will know and 2 they won't know. as for the rest I Loved the Fact he left the Father-in-Law to Deal with the 2 whiny women and the Bill's of dealing with the Daughter back in the House. I would bet the women's day's of living it easy are Long Gone.

Limited Plots

For those who think this story was plagiarized remember that there are limited plots in this genre. The author stated in the beginning that there was no new ground here. The writing was fine and entertaining. That is all you need on this site.

Lmao !!! Love this !

Has anyone who's talking about plagerism even looked at this category in the last week ????
Those Cuckold / Slutwife/ Swinger stories are just as cookie cutter as this storyline .
At least this one isn't posted 20 times a week !
Thank you author , for the break from the crap that's been in this category for the last few weeks ( or months ).

@ HDK I wish this "template" got used much more often than it does . Why do you not make the same remarks when it's a cookie cutter Willing Cuck / Hot wife story ? God knows they're plenty of them posted daily .

CrkCppr

I don't call cuck stories "cookie cutter" because I seldom read them and even more seldom comment on them. This story is the type of story I read. Comments are welcome, so I chose to make one. I try to not complain about stories that do not interest me. How helpful is the "cuck wimp shit" comment to anyone? Different people have different kinks and pleasures and I accept that. If a guy named Cucktom posts a story, I am not going to bitch about it having a cuckold theme. That would make me an even bigger idiot than I already am. (I did miss the name change of the kids, but it happens.) Please allow me the freedom to decide on which stories I comment, and what I say in my comments.

That said, I find some wife sharing stories erotic. The humiliation fetish in cuckold stories is something I cannot understand or enjoy, and many cuck stories are based on humiliation. Thus I do not read or comment on that sort of story, for the most part.

Yes, they can be similar

Are you guys kidding me? I watch a lot of old movies on TCM and I'm constantly amazed that there are films from the 30's and 40's with the same plots as LW stories. (especially from the pre-code 30's) Misunderstanding and revenge - check. Winning her back from another man - check. Keeping her from consumating an affair - check. Losing her and finding a better life - check. And so on.
My point is that there are only so many plots, broadly speaking. What's important is what you can do with them. Eddie Van Halen and I both play guitar. Same guitar (down to the paint scheme in fact) but he does so ever much more with his version.

Great Expectations

Thanks for setting expectations for this tale. I do have a few critiques, given those expectations. While I appreciate living without her children is meant to be sufficient just desserts for the evil wifey, I cannot help but feel that certain essential components of a good LW tale are lacking:

1) There’s no consideration shown to the poor, single male saps back in the US who might be similarly duped by this monster. Which brings me to point that there needs to be some form of public shaming (a scarlet letter, if you will) both to raise suitable alarm and to bring on the power of peer pressure from societal norms. Make the bad wifey explain herself to work colleagues, friends and extended family and/or feel the pain of being shunned.
2) The just desserts (i.e., of having children withheld from the bad wifey) was suitably motivated and created a delectable symmetry that I loved. However, from the reader’s perspective, the pain and anguish of the evil wifey was over all too quick. We readers would like to see multiple forms of just desserts and have them draw out the feelings of hopelessness and anguish from the wifey. After all, these stories thrive on building up a sense of hopelessness and anguish from the good hubby’s perspective. Thus, it only serves to create a better sense of balance if the denouement incorporates a plethora of just desserts for the wifey to gag upon. Expand upon her misery and lament. Let us really get a sense of her realization and acknowledgement of just how bad she was – and just how full of regret and remorse she is now. Alternatively, one might show, through a long series of mishaps, just how clueless and evil she really is; demonstrate the impact of karma as she lives impoverished and alone in a one-bedroom flat with her pet cat – both eating tuna from a can.
3) Lastly, I would encourage you to develop your “brand” as an author – by using your own “catch phrase events” over and over again in each of your tales to signal (especially for the skimmers out there) a critical turning point in the story. Examples of “catch phrase events” might include:
a. The hubby taking a long drive in his favorite vehicle, a Ford Taurus;
b. The hubby readying for his Rambo-style mission by prepping his favorite weapon;
c. A bubblegum-chewing process server delivering papers to an unsuspecting evil wifey;
d. Someone, pretty much anyone, eating tuna from a can.

I’m glad you had fun writing it. I had fun reading it too. I’m just not skilled enough with the written word to convey how much my tongue was firmly planted in my cheek while scribbling the above critique. I guess the lesson here is that setting expectations is best done in the forward as opposed to the author’s postscript.

Plus, isn’t it only fair that we readers/commenters get to go off the rails and write a bit of whimsy every so often too?
;)

Loved it!!!!!!

I think too many people are digging too deeply into this story. Just enjoy it as a story that has a proud man who will not accept the humiliation that his wife wants to heap upon him. It was a great short story.

Lovely Fantasy

The crime and punishment seems nicely balanced here. The way she started out it would require too many bullets to balance the books in the old fashioned way.

@HDK re: names changing.

The daughters received new names on the plane, their mother called after that time, that is why they are called by different names at the end of the story.

BigGuy33, fun read. Not as dark as some that have followed this storyline, nor as humorous as others that have done so, but I found it to be a very good story.

For those who claim plagiarism, there are probably hundreds of stories in LW that follow this same storyline. So there are probably quite a few that sound very similar to this story. That's not plagiarism, that is simply showing the limited number of ways a story like this can go.

If you include all of the different basic premises from all of the different subgroups within LW you'll end up with what, maybe 50 to 60 different options? And I believe that's being generous.

Whether it's btb, consequence, swinger, swapping, cuckold, or wittol, there are only a limited number of ways for the tales to go, so they are going to seem similar because they are.

Now he's the criminal!

If he doesn't do some public BTB all he will be known for is a kidnapper depriving a mother of her children and grandparents of their grandchildren.

Yeah he has his bases covered with leaving the country and getting new names but eventually the children will want to know about their mother when they get older. What's he gonna do then?

I would've liked to have read a little about what kind of aftermath the bitches and the wimp bastard went through.

The intial problem

I read the JPB story first. Enough said.

I like emotionally driven, growth and conflict driven stories. This had none of these aspects. This is a 'whack a pell' story (a pell is a Medieval stick in the ground that a Knight practiced whacking with a sword.) Like a pell, this lady was unable to fight back. Where is the excitement? So I am LESS fond of stories such as this (this is different from 'dislike')

The writing was clear, there wasn't any craft in it, but a nice direct voice, and the story stayed consistent with the assumed situation and characters. Two and a half stars? Maybe three? I KINDA liked it.

The problem is one of verisimilitude. I do NOT believe in this woman or situation. I believe a woman can want or even try to do this. However a woman would not pull this shit without being ABSOLUTELY SURE that the man will put his man panties on and jerk off while she is gone. As portrayed, the man is nothing like this, so the woman has to be both stupid and crazy to try this.

So as a male power fantasy, it is a Twinkie of a story: light, full of empty sugary 'feel good' calories, bland and without any interesting flavors or meat in its substance. But who doesn't like a Twinkie on occasion?

I recall another 'heist' story. The protag faked his death and framed his wife and her boyfriend for the crime. While the cheaters were similarly powerless, there was a step by step analysis of EXACTLY what he did (holding my interest), the investigation and trial (showing the victims FIGHTING his revenge), the consequences, and last but far from least; the constant threat that the Law was leering over his shoulder, ready to pounce on him if he made the SLIGHTEST mistake. There was a THREAT to the protag. Tension. Drama.

In BigGuy33's story, the FBI and the Army are so cash strapped, feckless and uninterested in Army people kidnapping kids, the protag in this story could put him and his kids on fucking Facebook with pictures in front of 'La Hotel De Cabo' and the authorities would still be scratching their heads in bafflement. This makes for a less dramatic story.

Please keep writing.

A good story

That is a difficult to find in LW nowadays.

A bad attempt at parody

So horribly written and absurd as to become unreadable. It isn't funny, but can't be taken seriously. I have no idea why anyone would write this. It's embarrassing to people who enjoy reading, especially people who enjoy stories that involve the loving wives genre. I like stories with drama, tension, where conflict is resolved, where betrayal has consequences. I do not like this grotesque burlesque. An abortion of everything good in the genre.

A real man

doesn't need an army. Such far out behavior might well be put in fantasy. This was too simple minded for my taste, but there is an audience for it, thank heavens for their sake, that the lord god loves them all.

sad

nothing else fits.

@ kimmi . Fd45 . Hdk

Shut your cream pie eating holes . HDK IS A FAG ,WE ALL KNOW THIS. Kimmi is just a fat man hating whore. Fd45 is a has been writer turned cucky boy. To you 3 shitheads I say. . Here eat my used condoms .

This is a great story where a guy won . We like these type of stories the scores show it. Little faggy cucky story get what 1 point scores lol fuck all you cucky fags

5* for effort

i love this scenario but to do it justice needs to be longer with more emotion from all the characters and the husband needs to be just a regular guy, blindsided by his wifes lack of respect. he needs to be put into hell before slowly clawing his way out of his dire situation. that way us readers can experience anger,frustration,sadness which makes the revenge that much sweeter.

i like most of your cheating wife stories and theres a nasty lack of new ones around at the moment.
how about a really horrific one? a real bitch of a wife and a mild mannered hubby always works best.

Very good short story

I'd really like for you to do a follow-up /continuation on this story. If I read your "character " Laura correctly, she won't quit. I'm betting you could do a great follow-up.

Fun short.

Would have Iiked more follow up but almost funny.

Is it too much to ask

Is it too much to ask that someone write this story with a none superhuman ex spec ops protagonist? I mean really how many times have we seen this team assembled. Fuck it I'm going to write it myself so all you anon cucks can call me a cum guzzler for not lighting the bitch wife on fire or something.

To anonymous that suggested that I

eat his used condoms. I must respectfully decline. My doctor has made it very clear that I need to reduce the number of condoms I ingest. He has me down to just three a week and hopes by the end of the month, that he will have me totally off used condoms. He also insists I get down to only one cream pie a week. Doc is convinced my general health will improve with a smarter diet, especially since I am allergic to latex. Thanks for the thoughtful, generous, and imaginative offer. Few people can be as clever, humorous, and articulate as you appear to be, Mr. Anonymous.

One star because it was something no one could relate with.

How many times has the hero been a member of an elite squad of super soldiers who would carry out any act, no matter how illegal, because their fellow soldier had a cheating wife? Bank reposses your house because our at war? Too bad. Lost your job while overseas, too bad. Get your cock blown off by an IED? Life sucks. But your wife is cheating on you?!? HOLY FUCK! Call out the cavalry boys, we're going to fuck the bitch up!

I'm glad you enjoyed writing it because I hated reading it. You want a story? write about how some average guy finds his wife cheating on him and then she fucks him over in court and he spends he next 18 years lamenting the loss of his house, half his income, his time with their children and lives alone while she marries some new guy and his kids start calling their step father dad.

@ anonymous FD45

Never teach a pig to sing. It wastes your time and annoys the pig.

Not that I would care if I annoyed you But the time wastage is important.