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Dude, don't put this - at the start of EVERY paragraph. This just read like an outline to a story, it got boring quick.
Honestly, I have understood the story.
It is true, I have understood the story and what it represents.
Maybe because my wife and I spent the same thing when I was pregnant, it was one of our best sex times ever. The union we had then was incredible.
I do not know if this is a short story or the beginning of a series, but I liked the set of feelings expressed here.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
Good story. I liked the detailed sex scene at the end. I agree with the comment about starting every paragraph with a dash, like you would in an outline or a list. It's distracting and unnecessary.
Dashes
Beardmann here. Thanks for the feedback! This is my first submission, done on an iPhone. I don't know what caused the dashes, but I'm not a fan either. Can a story be edited after submission? Thanks all!
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Lovely story.
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