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Dead Friends... with Benefits? Pt. 03

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by Anonymous01/18/17

You can do better

The degree to which I'm enjoying these makes me wish you'd put a little more effort into them. If you're not going to get an editor on here, then at least take a moment to read what you have before you post it. The shifts between third- and first-person perspective took me out of the story.

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