There were some subtle, subliminal messaging going here relating to family relationships across the board. This was a short story with some pretty big topics, a psychologist would have a field day. I like it when an author leaves the reader enough to fuel their own imagination. On reflection: you are my favourite author on here, but, for me personally, this was the best yet. Thank you.
I could see what was coming, subtle, but there nonetheless. I actually saw a few minor spelling errors, unusual. There is so much more to this story that you have left untold. Women like Claire are usually scarred by what happened to them and it does not just go away, which might explain why she is still single after a number of years.
I'm familiar with the author's work, so I'm maybe not quite as blown away by this effort as I would have been had it been written by someone else. This is an outstanding example of how a skilled wordcrafter can draw the reader into the virtual reality of a story!
At first I thought there might have been an incestuous relationship between Richard and Claire, or even Dean and Richard (in declaring he is gay),
I did not see Claire coming with her father in a relationship forced by Dean. I understand that Goose has remained faithful to Claire, just like she to him.
Happy ending for a dramatic story.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
I interpreted it two ways, and there is probably a third.
"You'd better call me Rebecca from now on. It'll be official soon enough, anyway."
"Rebecca?"
"Yes. . .. . "It's just who I am."
Her brother Rickie/Richard had transitioned fully and was now her sister Rebecca.
and
" . . she wouldn't see her mother if Rickie was anywhere around. "
By not recognizing Rebecca, Claire couldn't accept the change, Rickie was gone so she longer had a brother or sister.
AL always gets my full attention. His older stories were usually so complex that I had to
think about them! This one was easier to follow but still delicious,
English
I love the way your mind
makes mine work.
Another excellent story
thank you
Great writing!!
One question: You write: "She's not my brother anymore, remember?"
A typo or twist?
Always an enjoyable read!
Correct me if I'm wrong:
There were some subtle, subliminal messaging going here relating to family relationships across the board. This was a short story with some pretty big topics, a psychologist would have a field day. I like it when an author leaves the reader enough to fuel their own imagination. On reflection: you are my favourite author on here, but, for me personally, this was the best yet. Thank you.
I could see what was coming, subtle, but there nonetheless. I actually saw a few minor spelling errors, unusual. There is so much more to this story that you have left untold. Women like Claire are usually scarred by what happened to them and it does not just go away, which might explain why she is still single after a number of years.
Enthralling
I'm familiar with the author's work, so I'm maybe not quite as blown away by this effort as I would have been had it been written by someone else. This is an outstanding example of how a skilled wordcrafter can draw the reader into the virtual reality of a story!
Great
I'm glad to see several of your high quality stories recently.
Very good story.
At first I thought there might have been an incestuous relationship between Richard and Claire, or even Dean and Richard (in declaring he is gay),
I did not see Claire coming with her father in a relationship forced by Dean. I understand that Goose has remained faithful to Claire, just like she to him.
Happy ending for a dramatic story.
5 * for you.
I apologize for my English (yet), is not my native language.
UnicornofLove
I interpreted it two ways, and there is probably a third.
"You'd better call me Rebecca from now on. It'll be official soon enough, anyway."
"Rebecca?"
"Yes. . .. . "It's just who I am."
Her brother Rickie/Richard had transitioned fully and was now her sister Rebecca.
and
" . . she wouldn't see her mother if Rickie was anywhere around. "
By not recognizing Rebecca, Claire couldn't accept the change, Rickie was gone so she longer had a brother or sister.
A complex story
And, as usual, very well told.
I got a bit confused but I enjoyed it.
Thank You
HP
Very excellent writing!
I'm looking forward to reading some of your other fine work!
Now that's
the AL that I really enjoy. Thanks for a great read.
A well written Tale
AL always gets my full attention. His older stories were usually so complex that I had to
think about them! This one was easier to follow but still delicious,
Beautiful pearl in a silty oyster
Wonderful story that is full of desperate horror and ends beautifully. 5*.
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