All Comments on 'when it thunders'

I love the repetition and the pictures you paint. Edit just a bit and it would be great!

I grew up in New Jersey, but now live in Los Angeles. Besides fireflies on a summer night, I also miss thunder and lightning storms.....the storms that bring relief to humidity like the lovemaking you describe does to horniness.

I like the rhythms and compact storytelling of this poem.

Syndra and Sapphos,

Thank you for reading my work and for taking the time to make comments. When I read a sampling of your work I believe you are both being way too kind in your reviews. But I thank you both anyway!

Syndra, my problem with cleaning up poetry is that I'm torn between capturing the initial feel and worrying that I may edit it away. I tend to be a bit impulsive with my poetry as far as submitting it here. I am a bit more careful with my stories. I'll have to keep an eye on that. Thanks for pointing out the need to clean it up a bit.

Sapphos, Even your reviews of my work seem more poetic than my own words! Thank you!

Have a great week! Janine