I hope you can continue this erotic relationship for a few more chapters.
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Anonymous01/22/17
More please
Hopefully we will more chapters real soon.
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Anonymous01/22/17
Pretty Stupid of a girl, taking pills that she doesn't even know what they are. She is 18, she could go to a Gynecologist and get pills that she KNOWS are birth control pills. Otherwise a good story, I hope you continue just make sure the characters are Not So STUPID.
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Anonymous01/23/17
crappy grammar detracts from story
The basic story was a bit fun, but you seriously need to learn about pronoun cases and how to use them.
I had a thing with a cousin also, but it didn't ever go anywhere. I hope you continue this story...
Maybe AJ and Ellie will be able to get in on the act when the families get together again. You should let, us in on what AJ and Ellie got up to at "the movies."
......you really need help with prepositions and their objects.
"5" for content, and "3" for grammar equals a "4" overall.
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Anonymous01/23/17
Not the least believable
In chapter 1 they have sex in the same room as their siblings yet in this chapter they are afraid to be found out. Nevermind the idiotic pill part. Her mom gives her pills but doesn't tell her why. Also, in chapter 1, the parents don't notice that the vodka has been replaced with water?
great story
I hope you can continue this erotic relationship for a few more chapters.
More please
Hopefully we will more chapters real soon.
Pretty Stupid of a girl, taking pills that she doesn't even know what they are. She is 18, she could go to a Gynecologist and get pills that she KNOWS are birth control pills. Otherwise a good story, I hope you continue just make sure the characters are Not So STUPID.
crappy grammar detracts from story
The basic story was a bit fun, but you seriously need to learn about pronoun cases and how to use them.
I liked it.
I had a thing with a cousin also, but it didn't ever go anywhere. I hope you continue this story...
Maybe AJ and Ellie will be able to get in on the act when the families get together again. You should let, us in on what AJ and Ellie got up to at "the movies."
Good story nicely story but...............
......you really need help with prepositions and their objects.
"5" for content, and "3" for grammar equals a "4" overall.
Not the least believable
In chapter 1 they have sex in the same room as their siblings yet in this chapter they are afraid to be found out. Nevermind the idiotic pill part. Her mom gives her pills but doesn't tell her why. Also, in chapter 1, the parents don't notice that the vodka has been replaced with water?
so hot
I really wish I was Rachel
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