The Birthday Gift

Jimmy Choo's?

Loved the story, but that little bit stuck out. What man would know the shoes were Jimmy Choo's unless he worked in the fashion industry?

RE: Jimmy Choo's

While I would agree that most men wouldn't be able to pick a pair of Jimmy Choo's out of a lineup, I have found that a lot of women who buy Jimmy Choo's love to talk about Jimmy Choo's, especially to their friends. Sometimes guys are around to pick up on that information.

With that said, I always do my best to add details to the story and throwing the Jimmy Choo brand in there was sure to perk up any female readers' ears and even guys that never heard of the brand would get that Jimmy Choo was a brand.

I'm glad you liked the story, thanks for reading and commenting!

Good

I enjoyed the story. I didn't really see the cheating wife thing coming. I know Jimmy Choo shoes and I'm a 70 year old, average, straight, white guy.

I Gave you a 4

It could have been a 5 but you made the husband so stupid you took it away from yourself.
No way would I put up with the wifes shit. What he did at the end he should have done about the second week. Then call the movers and move all HIS shit and him back to LA.

Suggestion. Give hubby some balls as well as size of cock. You write good.

shame really

there was a really good cheating wife story behind all the fantasy crap.
your writing is nice to read, but real life situations beat this fantasy stuff hands down.

if you re wrote this story purely as a betrayal and BTB or RAAC story it would be a winner.
5 points though because i like the characters and there is a good story behind it.

I Didn't Really Like This

I was pretty sure that Lisa was having a strong affair with Tom. But, still, it felt like she was pimping Natalie.

Awesome

Loved the writing. A story really worth reading through. I especially appreciated the character development part. :)

Creative

5 stars for the Who-vian universe!

5* And i hate si-fi