The Birthday Gift

You MOTHERFUCKER!!

I just used Doctor Who in my finale for Ingrams and you, you utter bastard, stole the thunder.

I hope a fucking green death maggot munchies your bits off.

Also, Clara Oswald??? Pah. Everyone knows Sarah Jane is the One True Companion.

Jazzas

Or what ever . Fuck Dr who gives a shit. Both you guys write a good BTB now . And we will see who is better ! Don't cuck it up like HDK would .

Sad

Two people who were wrong for each other from the start

The Tardis Delivers

Fantastic story. Hope we can hear about the London convention. Can't wait for my birthday gift to be brought by the Tardis. When it lands I want to see Leela step out.

Good Story

I liked the way you added the Dr Who plot with Natalia, and all along I thought Scott's wife was playing around. By the way, the Alons-y quote was made by David Tennant's doctor. Matt Smith's doctor was the one who discovered the soufflé girl. Still I gave you 5*

Great Story

She does deserve a spanking for lying to him. Maybe in the next chapter.

Loved it

Fun story..I was so happy for Scott and Natalia. Thoroughly enjoyed the story and throwing in Dr. Who. I'm a Whovian myself.

Delicious Tale

I was afraid after four pages that the moral majority would chew our hero up, but then when he caught Lisa everything went back to equality. Strangely enough I am a great Sci-Fi fan and read thousand of stories but I am unfamiliar with Dr. Who as being good SF. I will look into it. By the way everyman should have a woman who shares more than the bed with him.

So the so called hero is a massive hypocrite..

So he cheated on her without knowing she was cheating, yet he took a moral stance when he caught her. Yeh, that really justifies his actions. A tale of three cheaters, no one to like here. If Natalie is willing to cheat with him, hopefully she will cheat on the big hypocrite as well.

Well written but morally corrupt tale 3*

Almost too much of a cliche to find Lisa sucking her bosses cock when he arrives to break things off, but it did put a neat bow on things in just a few sentences.

No excuse for such terrible spelling

These days with Google and even Bing there is really no excuse for butchering the spelling of words like hors d'oeuvres, It shouldn't take more than a few minutes to learn the correct spelling. Or is it that you just don't care? Minus one star for that.

Cosplay

How current, havent noticed that at this site before. Good employment of that theme. Some of those cosplay ladies are amazingly hot. 5 star. And, i can live with the odd spelling and grammer error, rather easy to do with tiny keys and that fucking automatic spell checker./suggested spelling thing. Shoulda had a pic of clara.

My "Horrible" Spelling

I really should apologize to "Anonymous' for my horrible overall spelling because I got the word hors d'oeuvres wrong. I spelled it h’orderves. I did Google it, there were over 63,000 results with the spelling that I used. I ran my story through Grammarly, GradeProof, LanguageTool, and the built-in spellchecker in Google Docs, none of which flagged the word as spelled incorrectly so I assumed it was an acceptable abbreviation. I feel great shame for getting 1 word out of 17,487 wrong. I will strive to do better in the future.

Sidney43 - I agree

I agree that it was more than a bit cliche, but I thought it gave the story the proper ending. I enjoyed giving Scott the opportunity to laugh at the whole situation and realize that he was right to decide to leave his wife even before he found out she was cheating. I also thought it added an interesting question that I wanted to leave up to the readers and that is did Natalia know that Scott's wife was cheating on him?

Thanks for reading and commenting!

Mary Tamm and Tom. Baker

Romana and The Doctor; the six part Key to Time. That's the ticket ...

What Moral Ground Did Scott Take?

I'm not sure what moral stance Scott took when he found his wife cheating, he laughed and laughed hard. His wife had very little time for him and that was the reason he cheated and why he decided to leave her even before he knew she was cheating.

I'm not sure how anyone can be surprised to find morally corrupt behavior in a section of the site specifically set out for extra-marital activities. It seems like by default you're going to get some in here.

And, I believe there are varying degrees of cheating. Here, Natalia fell in love with Scott and Scott fell in love with Natalia, it happens. I understand my writing style is usually larger than life, it is because I believe most people reading stories here want a story that goes beyond the normal everyday lives of people. They want sizzle of some sort, and I understand my version of that may not be what you're after and I can respect that. There are all types of stories here and I'm sure you can find some to your liking.

Thanks for reading!

Rc68 - Amy Pond is awesome

I love Amy Pond as well, but Natalia looked much more like Clara. I do have a hot redhead in my "Ashley's Revenge" series named Lindsey that would warrant her own spin-off, she'd make a perfect Amelia Pond!

Thanks for reading and commenting!

onlythelonelylove - YES!

My first two thoughts when thinking about incorporating Dr. Who into the story was either Romana or Leela. Tom Baker is my first, and favorite, Doctor so you may see references pop up in future stories.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

bruce22 - Give Who A Try

Doctor Who is not for everyone, and each incarnation is a bit different. I still have a fondness for earlier Who where the special effects were nearly non-existent but the new reboot has had some spectacular moments. Each new Doctor brings a bit of a different spin to the show, which has been around over 50 years now.

Thanks for reading and for your comments on the story, glad you liked it!

dreamer3366 - Thanks!

I did question for a moment including Doctor Who as I'm sure there are plenty of Lit readers who have no idea the show exists but I hope I explained it well enough and they found the cosplay to be a fun scene no matter what!

Thanks for reading and commenting!

PearDrop3 - You are correct!

You are absolutely correct on the allons-y quote being Tennant's, I admit I was taking liberties because Natalia looked so much like Clara and I love the allons-y (French saying that translates to "let's go") line as it worked so good in the story. I should have known a Whovian would point out the contradiction!

Thanks for reading and commenting!

Enjoyed the story

But it needed more pain from the wife and more explaining about just how much she had been up to. I want to see her cry more for what she lost.

bayoux - Leela, yes!

Tom Baker was the first Doctor Who I ever saw, and if I remember right Leela was the companion. I remember at the time, even though I was only around 12 years old that my jaw hit the floor.

I was not thinking about this story continuing, but I suppose it could be fun to follow Scott and Natalia for a while and see what they get into now that they're free to travel the world and geek out together!

I hope the Tardis does deliver Leela to you for your birthday, what an adventure that would be!

Thanks for reading and commenting!

I remember

The very, very, very first episode of Dr Who, way back in the middle sixties, with William Hartnell! That might make me old, but it's all relative. Star trek and all the others simply don't compare. I have ..... sorry if this makes other effectianadoes (????) jealous, been inside and operated an original Dalek, that the TV company leant our university (Loughborough), for our rag week. Apologies to those who this may sound like gobbledygook to, but to those who know, then they will understand!

Sooo many perfect hits...

Would have given it 6 stars but 5 is all I get.

Well written, fun, great characters.

Dr Who references fantastic
Hitchhikers Guide another win
Fuck the Cubs - was a great line and I can understand why an LA guy whose still burning about Kershaw's final game failure would make him say this in context of the story -- but here in the windy city we are all still high from our win and refuse to let it go
No sweater from the Great One has ever been ridiculed in Chicago - sure maybe in Detroit but we all hate those "hockey town" bastards but never in Chicago - again the contextual LA reference makes it the only one he should wearing from that team - excellent work

I absolutely enjoyed reading this,

Great Story, F*ck the Cubs, I'm a White Sox Fan

Excellent story with great SciFi references. The ending was priceless!

Cheater's Paradise

Let me say that this was a very fine, and well crafted story. Thank you very much for your efforts. The ideas of incorporating so much Dr. Who stuff in it? Well for a pretty large target audience here, no one can say that it was poor judgement. This story worked on many levels. I sincerely think you should be proud of your results.

Many Anons here fall into a trap of trying to use the comments section as a way of telling the author what they SHOULD have done. Still, many do manage to find a way to tactfully offer a suggestion of what MIGHT have been done. I think if a reader reads a story and THINKS "oh, well it should have been this or..." even " I would have enjoyed it more if was that...", I think an author CAN use that as reference for a future project, or NOT! Really, it is up to the writers to actually do the writing.

I often vacillate back and forth on the idea of whether anyone would be interested in what "I" would have done with this plotline. But really it doesn't matter if "I" am not the one writing it.

That said, there IS something intrinsic about art, in that it is at its best when it inspires.
And I think a reader does the author a favor when they let them know, that their work has inspired them to think deeper about these events, and how they might have handled them. Whether in real life, OR even just in the prose of the fiction world.

I want to say that your writing of the characters (probably the hardest aspect of penning these stories) was good enough that after reading, I felt that I could come up with my own alternate narrative, and STILL manage to (I feel) stay "inside" of the framework of the characters as provided. Upon completion of the 5 pages, I went out for a reflectionary smoke, and started to reimagine the conversation at the hotel when Nat becomes his birthday present. I also re-imagined the final confrontation scene at Lisa's office.

But I ALSO realized it isn't nearly as important to let you or others know how I had altered it more geared towards my personal tastes; but rather simply to inform you of the generated effect of the inspiration I felt to spend even just a little more time with the ideas of this story well after the fact.

Thanks again. It could well have been done differently, but probably not done much better.

Hope to read more from you soon.

Good, but ...

A good story, and you're a great writer, but the story line about 2/3rds the way through left me a bit. When Natalie showed up at the hotel room door, and explained that she was his gift for the weekend, my response would have been to get extremely pissed. His Wife blew him off again (even if it was really a trip to vegas), and he never reacted to that. That response didn't seem real to me.

Otherwise, good story. Thanks for writing.

You Needed

Just to describe that some more time passed before he became so attracted to another woman while he was still in love with his wife. By doing so, his decision to leave Lisa would be more believable. Just as with your Ashley series, don't rush the key parts to have the story work--could have shown us some violent tendency in that series in both of his ladies.

I don't give 5 starts very often...

...but I gotta give five big ones to a guy who can incorporate a Doctor Who theme as a background to the story and manage not to make your protagonist an emasculated wimp! I'll even ignore the obvious setup that Lisa was undoubtedly fucking one or more bosses or coworkers. Overall, a thoroughly entertaining tale! FYI, I may or may not have a bumper sticker on my truck that says, "My Other Car Is A Tardis"!!!

Greatest Story On Here In Quite A While

5* if for nothing else than it said, "FUCK THE CUBS!" four times!!!

Well written

I believe you could be an accomplished writer if you so chose to pursue this passion. The ending, while still climatic, was slightly predictable. By repeatedly explaining the long unrealistic hours and her passion to further her career it became apparent she was having an affair. The great misleading feature was the hint of her allowing him this gift on his birthday and the stray thought that she too found Natalia attractive and a threesome might occur. Next time, makes the clues less obvious and the misdirection more reasonable. Throw in the idea that Lisa may have experimented prior to meeting and marrying him. Just a thought.

A singularly nasty turn

Very unlikable characters, dirty tricks pulled all the way around and no redeeming qualities at all.

It is written well enough, but the characters are all so despicable that I couldn't enjoy it. I need someone to like in a story, and that was not provided here. Five stars for being cleanly written. Subtract two stars for being about unpleasant characters. Three is generous, in my opinion.

I like this story.

I wondered if all of his wife's weekend working was legit. Turns out they weren't.

The story worked well.

Actually, I'd like to know what happens next, please?

You ended it as he caught Lisa , piss poor ending

You created this adultery so he can leave with Natalia , what a crock. He cheated , so they would break up . But two wrongs don't justify this ending. He is 40 and Natalia is 25 good luck on there future. Is there going to be kids, the age gap and her so called perfect 10 body never found her future husband. A little weak in the plot dept.

Will he trust his new lover?

Will he trust his new lover? A woman capable of using all those tricks to deceive him to fuck her? And this woman working closely to his wife didn't know or guessed she was cheating with their boss? Really? a story with 5 pages and we didn't learnt almost nothig about any of the characters? A lot of talk about an english TV serie from 1963, Dr. Who, as it could have been about "The Avengers" or "Space: 1999". It's good for the fans to remember, but it brings nothing to the story. For me there is no need for a part 2... 2*

This is a great story.

Really a good read. Keep em cumming.

WELL DONE!

Thanks for your time energy, imagination, and writing skills. This one of the more creative bits in Loving Wives. Enjoyed your work. Please stay with it.

A friend of mine had a similar situation but he wasn't lucky enough to land the 25 year old hottie. The wife was working late more and more so he decided to surprise her on a Friday night.bring her dinner at the office. He walked into her bent over the desk with her boss pounding her from behind while pulling her hair. It was a bad scene as he beat the shit out of the naked boss, she got hit in the process trying to stop him . She begged his forgiveness but he couldn't stay with her . He told her every day he's known her was now in question and that she probably fucks everyone at the job . . It took him years to recover, her also . He told everyone they knew a showed a few pics he snapped.He tried for a law suit but it did nothing but cause a divorce for the boss and a loss of their jobs which he was happy with

4*s

Really a very enjoyable and entertaining story.
I believe this is only the 2nd cheater story that includes science fiction as a part of the character's lives. The icing on the cake is the "When Harry met Sally" reference, the conundrum, wow that's nice💑. Gave you an extra * for all of that.

Dialogue was snappy and smooth. Character's motivation were clear and remained true. TallMarriedMan you could have spent a bit more time writing about him and his wife Lisa. Consider the fact, together since High school, married since college, and he is ready to dump the marriage after a few months at a new job in a new town. What's the problem, you can't afford some patience! He really was coming out as a selfish, asshole of a spouse. Scum of the earth💩. Many the LW story has the wife cheat, after the husband get a change at his job. Suddenly, for 6 months or so he must concentrate on work to a greater degree than she thought is normal. I was expecting that, with the exception of changing the genders. He was looking as a cheater to me. I don't care what she said I call my wife and hear it from the horse's mouth directly, sort of speak,lol!

Gave you 4*s. Left me with questions, why did Lisa cheat after so many years❓ Why was he selfish, impatient about her job❓ Why no children❓
Thank you for the fun read TallMarriedMan. Catch you on your next post👍.



AMerryman

Needs more development.

I think you could have developed Susan's character much more.

Basically read like a Stangstar story with fresh Dr.Who trope substituted for Mustang

Dudley Do-right narrator trades up for younger fresher female companion add ND divests self of neglectful cheating spouse who was his match only in chronological age. It was a ballsy move by TallMarriedMan to use novel Dr.Who angle. Well played. He hit his targeted demographic very well, judging by preponderance of favorable reviews in very tuff genre.

I never saw Dr, Who

But all the characters in that story were cheaters and all the episodes about cheating? By this story it seems so.

Well Done

You slowly but moved directly into your main plot. Characters very well rounded out and the story unfolded beautifully. Great job. Thanks for sharing. BK

Fun

As always i love reading your work 5* all day

Enjoyed it

But the characters were a bit shallow. The cheating wife aside, hubby jumps into bed with the assistant and is ready to divorce his wife because she is working too much. He feels bad he cheated, but in the next breath decides to leave his wife. It doesn't jive. There were no heated confrontations or arguments leading up to his effortless disconnect from his wife. In fact, weren't they making passionate love up to that point? In hindsight, her cheating justifies it all, but the story didn't unfold in hindsight.

spelling, suspension of disbelief, character non-development

Does the author know what "hors d'ouvre" means? Literally it is translated as "outside the work" The "h" is not sounded, nor is the "s"

A high echelon corporate officer gets a blowjob from a subordinate where they can be observed by the husband- yeah, right. The author just wanted to finish the story. The story is filled with unlikely happenings, but this one takes the prize.

The characters are stereotypical beautiful people. The Dr Who bit does serve as character development - assuming one knows or cares the slightest bit about the genre

The author's fans seem to believe that repeated servings of stroke material more than adequately substitutes for plot development. Good for them, and him. For me the story earned the lowest possible rating that the grading algorithm permits

Thanks Witton

Thanks for being the second person to point out that I spelled 1 word out of 17,487 words incorrectly. I Googled the spelling I used, found over 63,000 results so I figured it was an acceptable abbreviation. I'm not sure why you quesion if I know what the word MEANS because I spelled it incorrectly, it was used properly, was it not?

The ending was appropriate, the BJ was happening in an empty office on a Sunday afternoon, neither the wife nor boss was expecting anyone else to be there. Could the ending have been longer, sure, but then again a short story has to end at some point and this one is longer than a LOT of stories here on LIT.

One common thing I see people complain about here on Lit is the fact that the stories are "filled with unlikely happenings" as Witton put it. Isn't that the point of most fiction and especially that of Literotica? I like writing the stories as a bit over the top, if you don't like that you don't have to read them.

Thanks for the comments, though. I will certainly try to have less than the 0.0057% misspelled words in my next submission.

Impo_64 - Question of trust...

I specifically did not have Natalia use the, "your wife is cheating on you," angle to get Scott to fall for her. Did she know that his wife was cheating? I would think she did, but it's left to your interpretation.

Natalia really only used one "trick" to get Scott, pretending to be his wife's gift to him. Was it extreme? Sure, but I think it put an interesting angle on the story as Scott got a free pass, at least for a time.

Yes, there was a lot of sci-fi references in the story, but that just happened to be what the characters were interested in. Sorry it didn't "float your boat" as they say.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

Fun read

Wife Had too know she was close to getting caught. She was on borrowed time the birthday bit was the last straw. Getting caught in the act like that priceless.
Now the bit with her pa another dumb move she was so busy fucking her way to the top she had no clew was moving in her replacement. Natalia did not have to rat her out all she had to do was wait. In the matter of the weekend if she had set it up like the wife wanted it would have been over faster.