You started out ok, but the story seemed rushed! Should have been longer and gone into deeper detail.
... too few words to get there. Just my opinion.
Good for a quick jackoff session
A bit short, was most of it lost?
i prefer a slow burn to a flash fire
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Good story
You started out ok, but the story seemed rushed! Should have been longer and gone into deeper detail.
So much potential....
... too few words to get there. Just my opinion.
Quicky
Good for a quick jackoff session
A bit short, was most of it lost?
hmm
i prefer a slow burn to a flash fire
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