...point of view had been consistent. There was too much shifting of person between second (you) and third (he/she). In many ways, though, it was very clever.
Cheers,
Lalenya :^)
by
Anonymous07/01/04
Wishing
I wish there was a way to actually have a National Nude Day.
by
Anonymous12/02/04
Nice Dream
I wish your story had been longer, w/ either more sex encounters or longer ones. After I got into the theme I enjoyed it very much, and it sounded like a dream you may have had.
English
WHY?!
WHY AM I NOT IN THIS STORY?!
I DEMAND TO BE IN THIS STORY AS A YOUNG TRANSEXUAL GIGOLO!!!
lol
i am ver surpise. you have made a story base on somthing yet that poeple have posted
What a city...
Wow...now that is the place to live! Good luck!
Might have rated it higher if...
...point of view had been consistent. There was too much shifting of person between second (you) and third (he/she). In many ways, though, it was very clever.
Cheers,
Lalenya :^)
Wishing
I wish there was a way to actually have a National Nude Day.
Nice Dream
I wish your story had been longer, w/ either more sex encounters or longer ones. After I got into the theme I enjoyed it very much, and it sounded like a dream you may have had.
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