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roots
"Depression and damnation
Wrapped around each other
Like the roots of a suicide tree"
excellent lines
Strong....
...again, lost. This poet is clearly a growing voice who needs to be read by everyone here!
well done
Genuine emotions and questions explored. I always look for works like these.
Cross T Roads take me down
to a place I call home, Hellsylvania
nice line:
Like the roots of a suicide tree
Nice line break, considering line further down:
Screaming at the cross
Roads that have no destination
Lost, found, and lost again
While laughing at blasphemy
this is a nice distrbing image, but does not meld well, with the rest of the tone.
Curled up on the ground
A fetus out of utero
Discovers loneliness
Excellent choice of words!
Very powerfully beginning & concluding stanzas! I was a bit unsure if the word "son" in the last line of the second stanza was intentionally a play on words referring to the mother & child from the first stanza or if it was supposed to read "sun." Overall though, this is an excellent poem!
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Depression is so ... depressing, but this manages to convey the feeling so well while not becoming depressing to read.
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,500 poems.
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