Yes, a very HOT story and so much potential ... Anna now will want his big cock and with all the repairs she needs; I am sure her son in law will be doing a lot more than repairs over a long period of time. Who knows, maybe his wife Casey and her Mom talked about loaning his cock to her Mom too ?? It's certainly a carbon copy of how his wife Casey acts; big boobs and big sexual appetite !!
Cannot wait for more chapters .... who knows maybe Casey will cum too on the next trip ?
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Anonymous01/27/17
when
when did they move from the kitchen or dining room to the living room or family room to the couch??? need more descriptive writing
I did like it,but would want to have my mind settled that she was not going to get me in trouble with the wife.There is the horrible possibility of blackmail. I wouldn't want to be in a situation where I would not know for sure that a box of fireworks was about to go up any minute over years.
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Anonymous01/28/17
Reads like a book report.
It doesn't read like a story but more like a report of a story. It should not seem like reading cliff notes. Instead of just telling a story or summary you need to show us with your words. Use description and paint a picture rather than simply tell us in generic form.
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Anonymous01/29/17
wow..what a crappy story the start the new year.
good buildup in the beginning...but the middle and end went way too fast...like the guy in the story...premature ejaculation....come on dude....make the story last a few pages...needs better pacing...and improve the writing...reads like a 16 year old had written it.....one second the guy is sucking on the breasts and the next he is banging his 8 mm into the mother in law...not very convincing....with breasts like that any straight man would spend at least 10-5 minutes savoring those breasts......but hey what do i know.....better do a better job next time or we might take up a collection to have the writer flogged for making us read his crappy writing. you are welcome.
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Anonymous01/30/17
Too quick
I moved to quick..needs more build up and a goid hot ending
English
Great Start
Was a little rushed, but a great start to a lot of possibilties!
Yes, a very HOT story and so much potential ... Anna now will want his big cock and with all the repairs she needs; I am sure her son in law will be doing a lot more than repairs over a long period of time. Who knows, maybe his wife Casey and her Mom talked about loaning his cock to her Mom too ?? It's certainly a carbon copy of how his wife Casey acts; big boobs and big sexual appetite !!
Cannot wait for more chapters .... who knows maybe Casey will cum too on the next trip ?
when
when did they move from the kitchen or dining room to the living room or family room to the couch??? need more descriptive writing
Nice
More please
Gave 1 star but meant to give 2 stars
I did like it,but would want to have my mind settled that she was not going to get me in trouble with the wife.There is the horrible possibility of blackmail. I wouldn't want to be in a situation where I would not know for sure that a box of fireworks was about to go up any minute over years.
Reads like a book report.
It doesn't read like a story but more like a report of a story. It should not seem like reading cliff notes. Instead of just telling a story or summary you need to show us with your words. Use description and paint a picture rather than simply tell us in generic form.
wow..what a crappy story the start the new year.
good buildup in the beginning...but the middle and end went way too fast...like the guy in the story...premature ejaculation....come on dude....make the story last a few pages...needs better pacing...and improve the writing...reads like a 16 year old had written it.....one second the guy is sucking on the breasts and the next he is banging his 8 mm into the mother in law...not very convincing....with breasts like that any straight man would spend at least 10-5 minutes savoring those breasts......but hey what do i know.....better do a better job next time or we might take up a collection to have the writer flogged for making us read his crappy writing. you are welcome.
Too quick
I moved to quick..needs more build up and a goid hot ending
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