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by Syndra Lynn06/23/04

Lovely poetry

Thanks blue.

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by WickedEve06/23/04

very nice

But I wasn't sure if planks was being used as a noun, which makes sense because of the adjective that comes before it. But the part "my home" that follows, makes me want to read it as a verb.
Also, should either "pelican" or "know" have an s?
Anyway, I appreciate the form, and I realize that these forms, which only allow a few words, tend to make those few words very significant. That's why I'm questioning those few words.
I think the last line is fabulous.

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